Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., "letting" -> "let").

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me express my feelings and share important events. For example, when I feel stressed about exams, talking to a close friend makes me feel supported and often gives me useful advice.

제안: Organize the response: give a direct topic sentence, then two specific examples with linking words. Correct unclear phrases ("MO") and avoid asking rhetorical questions inside the answer. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "subjects," "extracurriculars").

예시: Mostly we talk about our studies, especially upcoming tests and assignments. In addition, we often discuss hobbies such as playing football or drawing, and how we relax during weekends when we are not at school.

제안: Respond with a clear preference and give a concise reason plus a specific example. Fix grammar ("more opinion" -> "more opinions"; "note about opinion" -> "hear opinions"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer chatting in a group because you get a variety of opinions and ideas. For example, when I ask for study tips, different classmates suggest different methods, so I can choose what works best for me.

제안: Give a direct answer, then two clear reasons with proper vocabulary and grammar ("loss of feelings," "weaker friendships"). Avoid vague endings like "so." Use connecting words such as "because" and "therefore."

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because it conveys emotions more accurately and builds stronger relationships. For example, when I talk in person I can use facial expressions and tone, which are often missed in messages and can cause misunderstandings.

제안: Clarify your main point: say whether you do argue, then explain why with one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid contradiction and overly long sentences. Use linking words like "however" or "because."

예시: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends because we all have different opinions and need to express ourselves. However, these arguments are usually constructive; for instance, when we disagree about group project roles, we discuss our viewpoints and reach a fair compromise.

× I really love chatting with my friends because this can help me to express my own feelings and share my ups and downs and letting people know my thoughts to having a more deep conversation.

✓ I really love chatting with my friends because it helps me express my feelings and share my ups and downs, letting people know my thoughts so we can have a deeper conversation.

The sentence mixes verb forms and uses unnecessary infinitives. 'This can help me to express' is wordy; use simple present 'it helps me express'. 'and letting' should be coordinated as a participial phrase linked to the main clause. 'to having' is incorrect; use 'so we can have' or 'so we have'. Use 'deeper' as the comparative adjective. Fixing these makes the sentence grammatical and more natural.

× As a student I would say we mostly chat about studies as we MO spend most of our time at school together.

✓ As a student, I would say we mostly chat about our studies because we spend most of our time at school together.

Use present simple 'we spend' to describe habitual action. 'MO' appears to be a typo and should be removed. Add 'our' before 'studies' for clarity and use 'because' instead of 'as' for cause to avoid ambiguity. Include a comma after the introductory phrase for readability.

× Apart from that we also talk about our hobbies like what do we enjoy doing apart from studies and how do we spend our time when we are bored or apart from school.

✓ Apart from that, we also talk about our hobbies, such as what we enjoy doing outside of studies and how we spend our time when we are bored or not at school.

Embedded question forms ('what do we enjoy') are incorrect inside a declarative sentence; use statement word order ('what we enjoy doing'). 'Apart from studies' is better expressed as 'outside of studies'. Add commas for clarity. 'Apart from school' is ambiguous; 'not at school' is clearer.

× I actually prefer to chat with a group of people as we can have more different ideas, but not only on one point and more people can give more opinion based on your needs.

✓ I actually prefer chatting with a group of people because we can have more diverse ideas; more people can give more opinions based on your needs rather than just one point of view.

Use 'chatting' or 'to chat' consistently. 'More different ideas' is unnatural; use 'more diverse ideas'. 'Opinion' should be plural 'opinions' to agree with 'more'. Rephrase 'but not only on one point' to 'rather than just one point of view' for clarity.

× For example, if I would like to ask about a thing, we can note about opinion from different stances, but not only one.

✓ For example, if I want to ask about something, we can get opinions from different perspectives, not just one.

In conditional 'if I want' is correct for present/future intention; 'if I would like' is awkward. 'a thing' is vague; use 'something'. 'note about opinion' is incorrect collocation; use 'get opinions' or 'hear opinions'. 'stances' is acceptable but 'perspectives' is more natural.

× I really prefer face to face as in a fast-paced society people usually communicate on social media, but I think that this will lead to the lost of the feelings that you want to express and it will lead to a unfriend friendship so.

✓ I really prefer face-to-face communication because in a fast-paced society people usually use social media, but I think this can lead to the loss of the feelings you want to express and can make friendships less close.

Use hyphenated 'face-to-face' as an adjective/noun phrase. 'The lost' is incorrect; use 'the loss'. 'A unfriend friendship' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to 'make friendships less close' or 'weaken friendships'. Replace 'so' at the end with a clear clause. Use 'can' rather than 'will' for a general possibility.

× I would say in a healthy relationship arguing with friends can be avoided as we have our own thoughts and if we are willing to express our new thoughts but not only telling something people want to hear but also expressing the real perspective of ourselves.

✓ I would say that in a healthy relationship, arguments can be avoided because we respect each other's thoughts; if we are willing to express honestly rather than only saying what others want to hear, we can maintain understanding.

Original sentence is long and repetitive with unclear references. 'Arguing with friends can be avoided' is better phrased as 'arguments can be avoided'. 'Express our new thoughts' is odd; use 'express honestly'. 'Expressing the real perspective of ourselves' is wordy; 'expressing our true perspectives' is clearer. Break into clearer clauses and use connectors like 'because' and 'rather than'.

× So arguing will appear in true friendships. Yes.

✓ So arguing may occur even in true friendships.

'Will appear' is awkward; use 'may occur' or 'can happen' to indicate possibility. 'Arguing' as a noun is fine but pair with 'may occur' for natural phrasing. Remove the standalone 'Yes' or integrate it if answering a question; here 'may occur even in true friendships' is sufficient.