Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify awkward phrases and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete supporting details. Replace vague or incorrect phrases like “reduces strength” with the intended idea (e.g. reduces stress). Keep under five sentences and use linking words such as “for example” or “also” correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me relax and exchange ideas. For example, we often discuss movies and recent events, which keeps me informed. Also, talking with close friends reduces my stress after a busy day and strengthens our relationship.

제안: Make the topics clearer and fix grammar and word order mistakes. Use linking words (‘for instance’, ‘also’) and avoid trailing or incomplete phrases. Be specific about one or two topics and give a short example or reason.

예시: I usually talk about everyday things, such as my workout routine, school or work, and plans for the weekend. For instance, we exchange restaurant recommendations and personal stories, which helps us stay connected and discover new places to try.

제안: Correct phrasing and redundant words: use “one-on-one” not “1 to one-on-one,” and remove extra modifiers like “most personal.” Start with a clear reason, then give a brief example. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” smoothly.

예시: I prefer one-on-one conversations because they tend to be deeper and more personal. For example, in a one-on-one chat I can discuss sensitive topics without interruptions, which allows us to be more honest and supportive.

제안: Organize the answer into a topic sentence plus clear supporting detail. Fix unclear fragments like “in meetings, always close friends” and awkward expressions such as “facial experience expressions.” Give one concise example showing a real situation and use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read body language and respond naturally, which reduces misunderstandings. For example, when I meet a friend in person, their facial expressions help me understand how they really feel, so conversations are clearer.

제안: Good structure and content—clear topic sentence and example. To improve, add a linking word to show resolution and be slightly more specific about what you learned or how the argument affected the friendship. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, occasionally we argue, particularly about politics or personal decisions. For example, I once had a heated discussion about career choices, but by listening carefully and respecting each other’s views we resolved it quickly and our friendship stayed strong.

× Talking with close friends also strengthens our relationships and reduces strength, especially after a busy day.

✓ Talking with close friends also strengthens our relationships and reduces stress, especially after a busy day.

The word 'strength' is incorrect in this context; 'stress' is the appropriate noun to express tension or pressure that is lessened by talking. Replace the incorrect adjective/noun with the correct one to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: choose context-appropriate vocabulary (stress, anxiety, tension).

× I usually chat with friends about daily life topics like workout studies and plans for the weekend because these are relatable and help us stay updated.

✓ I usually chat with friends about daily life topics like workouts, studies, and plans for the weekend because these are relatable and help us stay updated.

Items in a list require parallel structure and correct plural forms. 'workout studies' is confusing: it should be 'workouts' and 'studies' as separate plural nouns, and commas should separate list items. Ensure parallel nouns and correct pluralization when listing items.

× We also share personal stories and recommendations for movies or restaurants, which strengthens our bond and gives us new ideas to.

✓ We also share personal stories and recommendations for movies or restaurants, which strengthens our bond and gives us new ideas.

The phrase ends with an unnecessary preposition 'to'. This is an error in word choice/structure; removing 'to' completes the sentence correctly. Use concise endings and avoid dangling prepositions.

× I prefer chatting with only one friend because conversations tend to be deeper and most personal, allowing us to share experiences and opinions more honestly.

✓ I prefer chatting with only one friend because conversations tend to be deeper and more personal, allowing us to share experiences and opinions more honestly.

The comparative structure 'most personal' is incorrect when comparing; the correct form is the comparative 'more personal'. Use 'more' + adjective for comparatives with multisyllabic adjectives rather than 'most'.

× For example, when I talk 1 to one-on-one, I can discuss sensitive topics without interruption, so that is important for me.

✓ For example, when I talk one-to-one, I can discuss sensitive topics without interruption, which is important to me.

The original has nonstandard phrasing '1 to one-on-one' and misused connector 'so that is important for me.' Replace numeric shorthand with 'one-to-one' and use 'which is important to me' for a correct relative clause structure. Avoid mixing numerals and hyphenation in spoken transcripts.

× I prefer face to face communication because it allows me to read body language and respond more naturally, which leads to clearer understanding.

✓ I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to read body language and respond more naturally, which leads to clearer understanding.

When used as a compound adjective before a noun, 'face-to-face' should be hyphenated. This is a punctuation/compound adjective issue related to prepositional phrase formatting. Use hyphens for compound modifiers before nouns.

× For example, in meetings, always close friends.

✓ For example, in meetings, I usually meet only close friends.

The original fragment 'always close friends' is incomplete and lacks a verb and clear subject. Provide a full clause that fits the context: 'I usually meet only close friends.' Ensure sentences contain a subject and verb to be grammatical.

× Real-time facial experience expressions help avoid misunderstandings.

✓ Real-time facial expressions help avoid misunderstandings.

The phrase 'facial experience expressions' is incorrect and redundant. The correct collocation is 'facial expressions.' Remove unnecessary words to form a standard noun phrase.