Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la fluidité en évitant les répétitions et les hésitations, simplifiez les structures et utilisez des connecteurs logiques. Donnez des détails précis (fréquence, lieu, raison) sans dépasser 4–5 phrases. Corrigez les petites erreurs lexicales (par exemple «in the beach» → «on the beach») et les mots répétés («to to»).

예시: I have several hobbies. I go horse riding once a week at a nearby stable because I enjoy being outdoors and working with animals. In summer I often swim in the pool or on the beach to relax and exercise. I also follow trends on social media to keep up with new ideas and inspiration.

제안: Réduisez les hésitations et corrigez la grammaire (par ex. «a many hobbies» → «many hobbies»). Donnez des exemples précis et utilisez un connecteur pour organiser l'information. Evitez les répétitions inutiles («to, to, to»). Limitez la réponse à 3–4 phrases pour rester naturelle.

예시: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. I loved coloring pictures and spent hours choosing bright colours. I also enjoyed matching names to pictures in learning books, which helped me learn new words.

제안: Clarifiez le vocabulaire et corrigez les erreurs (par ex. «getting such as powerful animal» → «being close to such a powerful animal», «walks or throats» incorrect). Utilisez des phrases précises et des connecteurs pour expliquer pourquoi ce hobby est important. Respectez la limite de 4–5 phrases et évitez petites fautes verbales («write» → «ride»).

예시: I have ridden horses since I was a child because I enjoy being close to such powerful animals and feeling their steady rhythm. I usually ride twice a week at a local stable, where I have learned to steer and respond to subtle cues. Riding makes me feel confident and calm.

제안: Rendez la réponse plus naturelle en reformulant «worthy» et en ajoutant un exemple concret ou fréquence. Utilisez un lien logique pour expliquer l'effet positif de partager le hobby. Restez bref (2–4 phrases) et précis.

예시: Yes, my brother and I both love horse riding, so we often ride together at weekends. Sharing the hobby lets us improve our skills faster and gives us a great way to spend time outdoors together.

× For example, I love to to do horse riding once a week and I love to swim a lot in a pool or in the beach in the summer.

✓ For example, I love to do horse riding once a week and I love to swim a lot in a pool or on the beach in the summer.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'to' (typo) and an incorrect preposition 'in the beach'. Use 'on the beach'. Also 'do horse riding' is acceptable but more natural is 'go horse riding'; however that is optional. Grammar problem type's ID: 8 and 11 Grammar problem type: Verb + -ing form and Incorrect use of prepositions

× Also, I love to surf on social media and know uh, everything new entrance, uh, I love everything of that.

✓ Also, I love to surf social media and know, uh, all the new things; uh, I love all of that.

Use 'surf social media' rather than 'surf on social media' (both are possible but common phrasing is 'surf social media'); 'everything new entrance' is incorrect word choice and order — use 'all the new things'. 'Everything of that' should be 'all of that'. Grammar problem type's ID: 11 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of prepositions

× Yes, when I was a child, I had a many hobbies like color, uh, coloring.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had many hobbies like coloring.

Use 'many' without the article 'a' before it: 'many hobbies'. Also 'color, uh, coloring' is redundant — keep 'coloring'. Grammar problem type's ID: 22 Grammar problem type: Article errors

× I was addicted to, to, to color, uh, some pictures.

✓ I was addicted to coloring some pictures.

Remove repeated 'to' (typo) and use the gerund 'coloring' after 'addicted to'. Grammar problem type's ID: 8 Grammar problem type: Verb + -ing form

× Also I love to match in the, the names of things to the pictures, uh, like every child.

✓ Also I loved matching the names of things to the pictures, like every child.

Use past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was a child'. Use the gerund 'matching' after 'loved'. Remove extraneous 'in the, the'. Use correct word order: 'matching the names of things to the pictures'. Grammar problem type's ID: 6 and 8 and 11 Grammar problem type: Present tense issue; Verb + -ing form; Incorrect use of prepositions

× I've been horse riding since I was a child because I love getting such as powerful animal and feeling the rhythm when it walks or throats.

✓ I've been horse riding since I was a child because I love being with such a powerful animal and feeling the rhythm when it walks.

Use 'being with' instead of 'getting such as'; 'such a powerful animal' needs the article 'a'; 'it walks' is correct and 'throats' is incorrect (wrong word). Remove 'throats'. Grammar problem type's ID: 11 and 22 and 13 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of prepositions; Article errors; Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs

× I usually write twice a week at a local stable and I've learned to steer and control the horse with the subtle cues which makes me feel confident and calm.

✓ I usually ride twice a week at a local stable and I've learned to steer and control the horse with subtle cues, which make me feel confident and calm.

Use 'ride' not 'write'. 'Cues' is plural so the relative clause should use 'make' not 'makes'. Omit 'the' before 'subtle cues' unless specific cues are meant. Grammar problem type's ID: 5 and 27 Grammar problem type: Past tense issue; Subject-verb agreement errors

× We enjoy spending time outdoors and practicing new skills, which makes the hobby even more worthy for both of us.

✓ We enjoy spending time outdoors and practicing new skills, which makes the hobby even more rewarding for both of us.

'Worthy' is the wrong adjective here; 'rewarding' correctly expresses that the hobby gives satisfaction. The rest of the sentence is fine. Grammar problem type's ID: 13 Grammar problem type: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs