Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và sự tự nhiên: sửa lỗi động từ thiếu (ví dụ “particularly keen on” cần “am particularly keen on” hoặc “particularly enjoy”), loại bỏ lặp ý và giữ câu ngắn hơn (tối đa 5 câu). Bổ sung liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc và cụ thể hóa ví dụ (ví dụ loại sách bạn đọc hoặc món bạn thích nấu).

예시: Yes, I am particularly keen on reading and cooking. For example, I enjoy contemporary fiction because it helps me relax and think about different perspectives. I also like trying new recipes, especially Italian dishes, which lets me be creative after a busy day.

제안: Sửa lỗi cú pháp và dùng từ chính xác: loại bỏ những từ thừa/mất nghĩa (ví dụ “step spend” và “without play” không hợp lý). Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động và ảnh hưởng của nó đối với bạn.

예시: Absolutely. I was really into drawing and collecting storybooks as a child. I would spend hours sketching characters and reading fairy tales, which helped develop my imagination and artistic skills.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp thì và cấu trúc: dùng đúng thì (ví dụ “is continue” → “continues”) và tránh lặp ý. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn đọc hiện nay để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

예시: Yes, reading is a hobby I've kept since childhood. Although my taste has shifted from children's books to non-fiction and novels, reading still continues to be an essential part of my daily routine, especially before bed.

제안: Sửa cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng: tránh các từ không phù hợp (ví dụ “why”, “that say”, “which helps train”). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, rồi nêu một hoặc hai ví dụ cụ thể về những hoạt động chung và khác biệt.

예시: Not exactly. My family prefers outdoor activities like hiking, while I enjoy quieter hobbies such as reading or cooking. However, we sometimes share interests — for example, we watch films together on weekends, which is a nice way to bond.

× In my spare time, I particularly keen on reading and cooking.

✓ In my spare time, I am particularly keen on reading and cooking.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' for the present tense of 'be' with the adjective 'keen'. Use 'am' with the subject 'I' to form the correct present simple structure: 'I am keen on...'. Suggestion: Add the correct form of the verb 'to be' (am) after the subject.

× When I was younger I was really into drawing and collecting storybooks.

✓ When I was younger, I was really into drawing and collecting storybooks.

The original sentence is acceptable but needs a comma after the time clause 'When I was younger' for natural written English. This is punctuation rather than a tense error; however content fits past tense correctly. Suggestion: Add a comma after introductory time clauses for clarity.

× I could step spend hours immersing myself in imaginary world without play a significant role in shaping my creativity.

✓ I could spend hours immersing myself in imaginary worlds, which played a significant role in shaping my creativity.

The original has several structural errors: 'step' is extraneous, 'imaginary world' needs plural 'worlds' or an article, and the clause 'without play a significant role' is ungrammatical. The corrected version uses 'could spend' (correct verb phrase), plural 'worlds', and a relative clause 'which played a significant role...' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: Remove extra words, ensure verbs are in correct forms, match noun number, and use a clear clause to show cause/effect.

× Although my taste has evolved over the years, the habit itself has remained constant and is continue to be an essential part of my daily routine.

✓ Although my taste has evolved over the years, the habit itself has remained constant and continues to be an essential part of my daily routine.

The phrase 'is continue to be' incorrectly combines 'is' with the base verb 'continue'. Use the present simple 'continues' to agree with the singular subject 'the habit' and to correctly express a current, ongoing state. Suggestion: Use the correct present simple form 'continues' for the singular subject.

× Not exactly why my family members tend to prefer outdoor activities.

✓ Not exactly. My family members tend to prefer outdoor activities.

The original fragments 'Not exactly why...' is ungrammatical and unclear. Splitting into two sentences and removing 'why' produces a clear response: a short negative answer followed by an explanation. Suggestion: Use a short negative phrase like 'Not exactly.' then give the explanation.

× I'm more inclined toward quiet individual hobbies that say we occasionally share common interests, such as watching films together, which helps train.

✓ I'm more inclined toward quiet, individual hobbies, though we occasionally share common interests, such as watching films together, which helps bring us closer.

The original contains 'that say' which is incorrect and unclear, and ends with 'which helps train' which is incomplete/incorrect. Replacing 'that say' with 'though' clarifies contrast; adding a clear result 'bring us closer' (or similar) completes the idea. Also add a comma between 'quiet' and 'individual' for readability. Suggestion: Remove nonsensical words, use appropriate conjunctions like 'though' or 'but', and finish the final clause with a meaningful verb phrase.