Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise, correct tense and grammar, add one supporting detail with a linking word. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes. My main hobby is playing basketball because my father introduced me to it when I was a child. As a result, I practice several times a week to improve my skills and stay fit.

제안: Use past tense for childhood, make sentences clearer and shorter, add a specific example or frequency and connect ideas with linking words.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved exploring new things, and I especially enjoyed riding my bike. For example, I used to cycle around the neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me build confidence and fitness.

제안: Keep it natural and correct small grammar issues, use one or two vivid specific details and a linking word to explain why you continue the hobby.

예시: Yes. Riding bicycles has been my hobby since childhood because I enjoy the freedom it gives me. For instance, when I pick up speed and feel the wind on my face, I feel relaxed and energized, so I still ride regularly.

제안: Correct grammar and tense, avoid redundancy, add a concise linking phrase to explain influence and current situation.

예시: Yes. Most of my siblings play basketball because our father was a national player and encouraged us from a young age. Consequently, we still play together regularly as a family activity.

× Yes I do. My hobby is playing basketball because I've been introduced to basketball since I was a child and I grow to love basketball.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobby is playing basketball because I was introduced to basketball when I was a child and I grew to love it.

Errors: incorrect use of present perfect passive 'I've been introduced' and present tense 'I grow' do not match the past time reference 'since I was a child'. Use simple past 'was introduced' and past 'grew' to show past actions that led to a current state. Also replace repeated noun with pronoun 'it' for naturalness. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions (use past for actions that happened in the past).

× Yes, I do have hobbies when I was a child especially it's such a young age, I like to explore new things.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child. Especially at a young age, I liked to explore new things.

Errors: mixing present 'do have' with past 'was a child' causes tense inconsistency. Use simple past 'had' and 'liked' for childhood actions. 'It's such a young age' is awkward; use 'at a young age'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use natural prepositional phrase 'at a young age'.

× But for me personally, I like to ride a bike, so it's definitely a hobby for me until now.

✓ But for me personally, I like riding a bike, so it has definitely been a hobby for me until now.

Errors: 'until now' implies continuous action from past to present, so use present perfect continuous or present perfect 'has been' rather than simple present 'is'. Also 'ride a bike' is acceptable, but 'riding a bike' fits better as a general hobby. Suggestion: use present perfect to connect past and present activities when using 'until now'.

× Yes, as I said before, I love riding bicycles. It's been my hobby since I was a child.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I love riding bicycles. It has been my hobby since I was a child.

Errors: contraction 'It's' is acceptable conversationally, but when clarifying grammar keep 'It has' to emphasize present perfect. The main point: use present perfect 'has been' to indicate an action/state starting in the past continuing to present. Suggestion: use 'has been' for clarity in formal responses.

× I really enjoy the feeling of riding a bicycle when the speed catches you off and the wind blowing right to your face and you just feel the weather.

✓ I really enjoy the feeling of riding a bicycle when the speed picks up, the wind blows right in your face, and you can feel the weather.

Errors: 'catches you off' is incorrect idiom; correct is 'speed picks up'. 'the wind blowing' lacks a finite verb; use 'the wind blows'. Preposition 'to your face' should be 'in your face'. Also parallel structure requires consistent verb forms: 'when the speed picks up, the wind blows..., and you can feel...'. Suggestion: use correct idioms and matching verb forms in lists for clarity.

× Actually, yeah, all of my siblings played basketball.

✓ Actually, yeah, all of my siblings play basketball.

Errors: context implies ongoing habit; use present simple 'play' rather than past 'played' to indicate current shared hobby. Subject-verb agreement requires plural verb 'play' with plural subject 'siblings'. Suggestion: choose tense that matches meaning (ongoing vs past).

× It comes from my father, who was a national basketball player.

✓ It comes from my father, who was a national basketball player.

No grammar correction needed for tense; sentence is acceptable. Explanation: 'It comes from my father' correctly uses present tense to express origin; 'who was a national basketball player' is past because his career is in the past. Keep both as is.

× So since we were a child, he introduced basketball to us and we've grown to actually really enjoy playing basketball until now.

✓ So since we were children, he introduced us to basketball and we've grown to really enjoy playing it.

Errors: 'we were a child' should be plural 'we were children'. Word order 'introduced basketball to us' is less natural than 'introduced us to basketball'. 'actually really enjoy' is redundant; use 'really enjoy'. 'until now' is unnecessary with present perfect 'we've grown'. Suggestion: correct plural noun, prefer natural verb-object order, avoid redundant adverbs, and keep tense consistent.