Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然、简洁并修正语法错误。避免重复与犹豫词，使用一个主题句，然后加一到两个具体细节。可以用连词使句子连贯，如“and”或“also”。例如说明喜欢哪种音乐、多久听一次或练习时间。

예시: Yes, I enjoy music. I regularly listen to pop and classical pieces, and I also play the piano for about an hour most days and sometimes sing along.

제안: 减少口头禅（如umm, uh），用更流畅的句子描述童年爱好并提供具体例子或结果。可以说明什么时候开始、画什么题材、有没有参加比赛或获奖。

예시: When I was a child I loved drawing. I often sketched landscapes and plants, and teachers praised my work; I even entered a local art contest once.

제안: 回答总体不错但需修正时态和表达，使句子更自然并增加一点细节，例如何时开始学习、证书级别或练习频率。用衔接词让信息更连贯。

예시: Yes, I've loved music since childhood. I started piano lessons when I was eight, have been playing for over ten years, and recently earned a Grade 6 piano certificate.

제안: 注意主谓一致与自然衔接，去掉犹豫词，使用对比连接词（however、whereas）并给出简短比较或原因，例如为什么兴趣不同或是否会一起参与对方爱好。

예시: Not really; my parents and I have different hobbies. I enjoy music, whereas my mother prefers gardening and my father plays golf, so we rarely do the same activities together.

× Yes, I'm interested in musics, so I like listening music and also playing the piano, and I like singing a song, right?

✓ Yes, I'm interested in music, so I like listening to music and also playing the piano, and I like singing songs.

“musics” 是不可数名词，正确形式为 “music”；动词短语 “listening music” 缺少介词，应为 “listening to music”；“a song” 在此处泛指唱歌爱好，用复数 “songs” 更自然或省略冠词。建议记住不可数名词不加复数，动词 listen 后常接介词 to。

× In my childhood, I was really addicted to drawing, umm and uh, many teachers and uh, students said I have a talent in drawing. I can, I have a deep understanding of nature.

✓ In my childhood, I was really addicted to drawing, and many teachers and students said I had a talent for drawing. I felt I had a deep understanding of nature.

“said I have a talent” 时态与叙述时间不一致，应使用过去时 “said I had a talent”；搭配上常用介词是 “talent for drawing” 而非 “talent in drawing”；“I can, I have a deep understanding” 口语中断，改为过去感受用过去时 “I felt I had a deep understanding”。建议保持时态一致并注意常见搭配（talent for）。

× I like music since my childhood and I have played the piano for about 10 years or more and I have a certificate of piano.

✓ I have liked music since my childhood, and I have played the piano for about ten years or more, and I have a piano certificate.

“since my childhood” 表示从过去持续到现在，应使用现在完成时（have liked）而非一般现在时 “I like”；“have played the piano for about 10 years” 可保留现在完成时，但数字建议写出十（ten）；“a certificate of piano” 搭配不自然，改为 “a piano certificate” 或 “a certificate in piano”。建议学习 since 与现在完成时连用的规则和固定搭配。

× Not really, my parents and me have different hobbies and I like music and my mother like planting some flowers and trees. Umm however my father like play the golf.

✓ Not really. My parents and I have different hobbies: I like music, my mother likes planting flowers and trees, and my father likes playing golf.

主格代词用在主语位置应为 “I” 而不是 “me”；动词与主语需一致，第三人称单数用 likes（my mother likes；my father likes）；动词后需要动名词形式（likes playing golf）；“play the golf” 中不需要定冠词，且常用短语是 “play golf”。建议注意主格/宾格区分、主谓一致和动词搭配（like + doing）。