Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific examples with a brief reason. Avoid fillers like “and so on.” Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy crocheting because it relaxes me, and I play guitar to unwind after work. I also work out regularly to stay fit.

제안: Improve coherence and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, avoid repetition, and provide a brief reason with a linking phrase.

예시: No, I didn't have hobbies as a child because both my school and family encouraged me to focus only on my studies. As a result, I spent most of my free time studying rather than pursuing activities.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence variety: give a concise answer, then briefly explain when and why you picked up your hobbies using linking words like “however” or “since.”

예시: No, I don't. I only took up my hobbies later in life; for instance, I started crocheting and playing guitar in my late teens when I began exploring my own interests.

제안: Speak more fluently and clearly: remove fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (plural/singular), and give a short contrast then an example with a linking word like “however” or “only.”

예시: Not really; my family and I have different interests. However, we do have one hobby in common: we sometimes play tennis together, and I usually play with my brother at the weekend.

× Yes, I do have a lot of hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have a lot of hobbies.

Using 'do' for emphasis is not necessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. 'I have' is the standard form. Remove the auxiliary 'do' unless you want to add strong emphasis (e.g., 'I do have a lot of hobbies').

× Some of my hobbies are crocheting, working out, playing sports, playing guitar and so on.

✓ Some of my hobbies are crocheting, working out, playing sports, and playing the guitar.

List items should be parallel and idiomatic. Add the definite article with musical instruments ('the guitar') and include the Oxford comma for clarity. The original verbs are fine form-wise but improving parallel structure and article use makes the sentence more natural.

× When I was a child, I didn't have any hobbies.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have any hobbies.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it correctly uses simple past negative 'didn't have' to describe a past state. No change needed.

× Neither the school or at home encouraged me to have any hobbies because they want only only to.

✓ Neither the school nor my family at home encouraged me to have any hobbies because they wanted me to focus only on my studies.

Use 'neither... nor' for negative pairing, not 'neither... or'. Also maintain past tense ('encouraged', 'wanted') to match 'When I was a child'. Remove duplicated word 'only' and place 'only' before the phrase it modifies. Clarify 'at home' by specifying 'my family at home'.

× They want for me to only focus on my studies.

✓ They wanted me to focus only on my studies.

Use correct verb tense (past: 'wanted') and natural word order: 'wanted me to focus only on my studies' or 'wanted me to only focus on my studies' (split infinitives are acceptable but less preferred). Remove 'for' after 'want' when followed by an object and infinitive.

× So yeah, I didn't have any hobbies.

✓ So yeah, I didn't have any hobbies.

This sentence is correct as a past-tense summary. No correction necessary.

× No, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child.

This is correct past-tense usage; no change needed.

× All of my hobbies right now are particularly recent.

✓ All of my hobbies right now are relatively recent.

'Particularly recent' is odd collocation; 'relatively' or 'quite' fits better. The verb 'are' is correct for present state.

× When I grew up and started to discover myself, I started also to discover my interests and things.

✓ As I grew up and began to discover myself, I also began to discover my interests and other things.

Use parallel structure: 'began' pairs with both verbs; place 'also' before the verb it modifies. 'Discover myself' is acceptable but 'discover who I am' is clearer. 'Things' is vague; 'other things' is slightly better.

× So I developed these hobbies myself.

✓ So I developed these hobbies myself.

This past-tense sentence is appropriate because development happened over time; it's grammatically correct. No change needed.

× But as I was a child I didn't have any hobbies.

✓ But when I was a child I didn't have any hobbies.

Use 'when' rather than 'as' for clarity in this simple past-time reference. Both can be used, but 'when' is more natural here.

× No uh, me and my family members have particularly different interest so my hobbies are different from theirs.

✓ No, my family members and I have particularly different interests, so my hobbies are different from theirs.

Use subject pronoun 'I' not 'me' in subject position and put 'my family members and I' as the subject. 'Interest' should be plural ('interests') to match 'different'. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses.

× Only one thing we participate and do together is playing tennis.

✓ The only thing we participate in and do together is playing tennis.

Use 'the only' to specify a single item. 'Participate in' requires the preposition 'in'. Maintain parallel gerund structure: 'participate in and do together' or rephrase: 'The only activity we do together is playing tennis.'

× I play tennis with my brother from time to time but that's the only interest that is umm.

✓ I play tennis with my brother from time to time, but that's the only interest we share.

Add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. 'The only interest that is umm' is incomplete; complete it as 'the only interest we share.' Use 'share' to express common interest. This fixes the prepositional and sentence completeness issues.