Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 시제 오류를 고치고 문장을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 만드세요. 주제문을 명확히 하고, 이유와 습관을 연결하는 연결어를 사용하세요. 예: 시제 일치(현재 습관은 현재형), 관사와 동사의 형태 수정, 그리고 중복된 표현 제거. 구체적으로는 "I like drawing"을 주제문으로 유지하고, 이유를 "because"로 연결한 뒤 어떻게/언제 그리는지 짧게 덧붙이세요.

예시: I enjoy drawing because I like working with colors and creating pictures. For example, I often draw to relax in the evenings after finishing my work.

제안: 과거 시제 사용에 주의하고 문장을 명확하게 구성하세요. 주제문에서 과거의 습관임을 분명히 하고, 이유는 간결하게 설명하세요. 또한 'for instance' 같은 표현은 예시를 들 때 사용하되 적절한 연결어(so, therefore 등)를 정확히 사용하세요. 문법(관사, 동사 형태)과 어휘 선택을 교정하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: When I was a child, I read a lot because I loved interesting plots. For example, I would read in the morning before school or while waiting to go out.

제안: 부정문을 말할 때 더 자연스럽게 대답하고 시제 일치를 지키세요. 과거의 습관과 현재의 상태를 비교할 때는 적절한 연결어(although, but, however)를 사용하세요. 예: 'I didn't keep that hobby' 같은 표현으로 명확히 말하고 이유를 간단히 설명하세요.

예시: No, I don't have any hobby that I've kept since childhood. Although I used to enjoy reading novels when I was young, I don't read them much now.

제안: 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 정리하세요. 활동 이름은 소문자로 시작하고, 반복되는 단어는 제거하세요. 가족과의 공통 취미를 말할 때는 언제, 어떻게 함께 하는지 구체적인 예를 덧붙이세요. 연결어는 'so'나 'so we'로 간단히 연결하세요.

예시: My younger sister and I both enjoy drawing, so we often sketch pictures together when we relax at home.

× I like drawing because I like see the picture and using color is good for me.

✓ I like drawing because I like to see pictures, and using color is good for me.

'like see' is incorrect; after 'like' use infinitive 'to see' or gerund 'seeing'. 'the picture' is too specific; use plural 'pictures' for general preference. Also connect clauses with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I like to see pictures' or 'I like seeing pictures'. Grammar types: 6 (Present tense issue), 8 (Verb + -ing form)

× Therefore, when I was when I rest, I'm drawing always.

✓ Therefore, when I rest, I always draw.

Mixed past 'was' with present meaning; remove extra 'was'. 'I'm drawing always' is an incorrect adverb placement and tense; use simple present 'I always draw' for habitual actions. Place adverb 'always' before main verb. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits: 'When I rest, I always draw.' Grammar types: 6 (Present tense issue), 20 (Incorrect adverb placement), 26 (Sentence structure errors)

× When I was child, I'm read a book because I like, for instance, plot no better.

✓ When I was a child, I used to read books because I liked stories with good plots.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. 'I'm read' mixes present continuous with past; use past habitual 'used to read' or 'I read'. 'a book' is okay but 'books' fits habitual action. Phrase 'for instance, plot no better' is ungrammatical; clarify to 'stories with good plots' or 'plot that is good'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I used to read books because I liked stories with good plots.' Grammar types: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 5 (Past tense issue), 22 (Article errors), 26 (Sentence structure errors)

× Therefore I read up when I wake up or when I'm ready to go out.

✓ Therefore I read when I woke up or when I was ready to go out.

Context refers to childhood, so past tense 'woke up' and 'was ready' should be used. 'read up' is unnatural here; use 'read' alone. Also avoid mixing tenses. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when speaking about childhood: 'I read when I woke up or when I was ready to go out.' Grammar types: 5 (Past tense issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors)

× No, I don't have that because when I was young I enjoy reading a book but when I become an adult I don't like read a novels.

✓ No, I don't. When I was young I enjoyed reading books, but as an adult I don't like reading novels.

Mixes present and past: 'was young' requires past 'enjoyed'. 'become an adult' should be 'became an adult' or 'as an adult'. 'don't like read a novels' has incorrect verb form and pluralization; use 'don't like reading novels' and plural 'novels'. Suggestion: Use past for past habits and correct gerund after 'like': 'I enjoyed reading books' and 'I don't like reading novels.' Grammar types: 5 (Past tense issue), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 8 (Verb + -ing form), 26 (Sentence structure errors)

× My younger sister and I like to Draw Something, therefore we we always during some, uh, pictures when we rest.

✓ My younger sister and I like to draw pictures; therefore we always draw pictures when we rest.

'Draw Something' likely incorrect capitalization and unclear (unless referencing app). Repetition 'we we' is a mistake. 'during some pictures' is incorrect verb choice and structure; use 'draw pictures'. Use simple present 'like' and 'always draw' for habitual actions. Suggestion: 'My younger sister and I like to draw pictures; therefore we always draw when we rest.' Grammar types: 6 (Present tense issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 20 (Incorrect adverb placement)