Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で意図は伝わりますが、文法と語彙の選択、流暢さで改善の余地があります。例えば、’Yes I have’は不自然で ‘Yes, I do’ が適切です。また、冗長な表現（'every time I go out I always'）を避け、名詞の単複一致や語順を正す必要があります。さらに、詳細を具体的にして接続語（for example, such as, especially）を使うとより自然に聞こえます。改善練習：短く明確な主題文→具体的な例→理由や頻度を示す。

예시: Yes, I do. I love photography. For example, whenever I go out I often take pictures of landscapes and interesting cloud formations because I enjoy capturing changing light and weather.

제안: 内容は理解できますが、時制と語順の誤りがあります。過去の話なので主文は過去形（'Yes, I did' または 'Yes, I did. I really liked...'）に統一してください。'usually practice the piano for two hours after I came home' は 'usually practiced for two hours after I came home from school' のように過去形と時制一致が必要です。最後の 'I also liked playing.' は不明瞭なので削除するか具体化しましょう。接続語で理由や頻度を明確にしてください。

예시: Yes, I did. I really enjoyed playing the piano and usually practiced for about two hours after I came home from school because I wanted to improve for exams and performances.

제안: 文法ミスが目立ちます。'I've had enjoyed' は誤りで、現在完了形と過去形の混乱があります。もし『子供の頃からずっと続けている』ことを言いたければ 'I've enjoyed listening to music since I was a child.' が正しいです。'I used to.' は不完全なので、続けてどのように続けているかを示してください。例を加えて具体性を出しましょう。

예시: I've enjoyed listening to music since I was a child. For instance, I used to listen to classical and pop albums every evening, and I still listen to playlists now to relax.

제안: 意味は通じますが、語順と語彙の選択に改善の余地があります。'where to go trips next time' は不自然で、'where to go next' や 'places to visit next' の方が適切です。接続詞 'So' の代わりに 'Therefore' や 'So' のままでもいいですが、詳しい方法（どのチャンネル、どんな情報を探すか）を加えるとより具体的で高得点になります。

예시: Yes, we all enjoy traveling. We usually watch travel YouTube channels to find ideas and practical tips about places to visit and things to do for our next trip.

× I really love taking photos.

✓ I really love taking photos.

The sentence is correct; 'love' followed by a gerund 'taking' is appropriate. No change needed.

× Every time I go out I always take photos such as beautiful natures, clouds.

✓ Every time I go out I always take photos of beautiful nature and clouds.

'Natures' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable noun in this context and should not be pluralized. Use 'of' to indicate the content of the photos rather than 'such as' with a plural noun. Suggestion: use 'photos of' and keep 'nature' singular.

× Yes, I have. I really liked playing the piano, and I usually practice the piano for two hours after I came home from school.

✓ Yes, I did. I really liked playing the piano, and I usually practiced the piano for two hours after I came home from school.

The response to 'Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?' requires past tense: 'Yes, I did' not 'Yes, I have.' Also the habitual past action should use past tense 'practiced' instead of present 'practice' to match 'when you were a child' and 'came home' is correct past. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when speaking about childhood routines.

× I also liked playing.

✓ I also liked playing other instruments.

The sentence is incomplete and vague: 'playing' needs an object to clarify what was being played. Provide a specific object (for example 'other instruments' or 'games') to make the sentence grammatically and contextually complete.

× I've had enjoyed listening to music when I was a child.

✓ I enjoyed listening to music when I was a child.

The combination 'I've had enjoyed' is ungrammatical. For a past habit use simple past 'I enjoyed' or present perfect 'I've enjoyed' for an experience continuing to present; but because the clause 'when I was a child' specifies past time, use simple past. Suggestion: use 'I enjoyed' to match the past time expression.

× I used to.

✓ I used to listen to music a lot.

'I used to.' is a sentence fragment that lacks the verb complement explaining the past habit. 'Used to' must be followed by a base verb (e.g., 'listen to music'). Add the verb and object to complete the sentence.

× Yes, we love traveling.

✓ Yes, we love traveling.

The sentence is correct: 'love' followed by present participle 'traveling' properly expresses a general preference. No change needed.

× So we usually watch YouTube channels to research information about where to go trips next time.

✓ So we usually watch YouTube channels to research information about where to go next time.

The phrase 'where to go trips' is ungrammatical. 'Trip' is unnecessary; use 'where to go' as the object of 'research information about'. Alternatively, say 'places to go' or 'where to go on our next trip.' Suggestion: 'where to go next time' or 'where to go on our next trip.'