Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitive words (e.g., “playing the”). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “also” or “in addition”). Correct articles and prepositions (say “play basketball” not “playing the basketball”).

예시: I have several hobbies. I play the piano and violin, and I also enjoy playing basketball and football with my younger brother because staying active is good for my health.

제안: Make tense and grammar consistent and avoid redundancy. Give a clear topic sentence (past tense) and one specific reason or memory. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” correctly. Avoid unclear phrases like “I also considered it so far.”

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I played the piano because I was very interested in music, and I remember practicing every day after school.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement confirming the hobby and use present perfect or simple present appropriately (e.g., “I have played the piano since childhood”). Give one supporting detail about current practice or progress and avoid filler words like “uh.”

예시: Yes, I have played the piano since childhood. I still take lessons now to improve my technique, and I also practice the violin occasionally.

제안: Use correct sentence structure and reduce repetition. Start with a clear statement about shared hobbies, then give a specific routine or example. Use correct verb forms and linking words such as “so” or “and” to connect ideas. Remove repeated words and unclear fragments like “which can which can.”

예시: Yes, several family members enjoy badminton. We often go to the gym together to play friendly matches, which is a fun way for us to stay fit and bond.

× I have many hobbies like playing the piano and playing the violin and I also like many sports hobbies like playing the basketball and football with my younger brother.

✓ I have many hobbies like playing the piano and the violin, and I also like sports such as basketball and football with my younger brother.

Use uncountable or bare nouns for sports: 'play basketball' not 'play the basketball'. Remove unnecessary repetition 'playing the' before 'violin' and avoid 'many sports hobbies' which is awkward; 'sports such as' is clearer.

× I think it is good for my health.

✓ I think it is good for my health.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed. It uses present simple appropriately to express a general opinion.

× Yes, just like I said above, I when I was a child I have a hobby is playing the piano because I really interested in music and I also considered it so far.

✓ Yes, just like I said above, when I was a child I had a hobby: playing the piano, because I was really interested in music and I kept it for a long time.

Multiple errors: tense consistency and verb forms. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'; 'I have a hobby is' is ungrammatical — use 'I had a hobby: playing the piano'. 'I really interested' needs auxiliary 'was interested'. 'I also considered it so far' is unclear; 'kept it for a long time' or 'continued it for a long time' is appropriate.

× Definitely if they're playing the piano.

✓ Definitely, I have been playing the piano since then.

Original uses 'they're' (they are) incorrectly; pronoun does not refer to speaker. Replace with a clear first-person statement. Also adjust tense to indicate continuation from childhood to present: 'have been playing'.

× I also, uh, like playing the violins and and now I still learn it to improve the level.

✓ I also like playing the violin, and now I am still learning it to improve my level.

Use singular 'violin' when referring to the instrument in general. Use progressive 'am still learning' for an ongoing activity. 'Improve the level' is incorrect collocation; use 'improve my level' or better 'improve my skills'.

× Of course, the members in my family alike playing the playing the badminton.

✓ Of course, the members of my family also like playing badminton.

Use 'members of my family' not 'in my family alike'. 'Alike' is wrong here; use 'also like'. Drop the repeated 'the' before 'badminton' and do not use article before sports.

× We usually went to the gym and playing playing playing the badminton and compete with others friendly which can which can.

✓ We usually go to the gym to play badminton and compete with others in friendly matches.

Tense should match habitual action: present simple 'we usually go'. Use 'to play' not gerund alone in this structure. Remove repeated words. Use 'compete with others in friendly matches' for natural collocation; 'friendly' should modify 'matches'.