Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid fillers (e.g., 'uh'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention concrete plans (when/where) for the marathon and one or two favourite authors/genres to make your answer more specific and natural.

예시: Yes. I enjoy running and plan to run a marathon next spring, so I train three times a week to build endurance. I also love reading, especially contemporary short stories and modern poetry, because they help me relax and spark new ideas.

제안: Use past tense consistently and remove uncertainty phrases like 'I'm not completely sure'. Give a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add specific examples and a reason or memory. Avoid pauses and fillers.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I often ran with my dad and swam at the local pool or beach during summer holidays, which kept me active. I also read a lot of adventure books because they made long car trips more enjoyable.

제안: Correct small grammar errors and be concise. Use clear linking words ('for example', 'also', 'however') and keep sentences within the 5-sentence limit. Be specific about when you started chess and how often you play now.

예시: Yes, I have several. For example, I've enjoyed reading short stories since childhood and I continue to run with my dad around the park every weekend. I also took up chess in my teens and now play it online and with friends twice a week.

제안: Answer directly and give one or two specific comparisons or a brief example of doing the hobby together. Use present or past consistently and add a short reason why sharing these hobbies matters to you.

예시: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, my dad and I run together most weekends, which helps us stay fit and talk. My mother encouraged my love of reading by taking me to the library every month when I was young.

× 'Yes I do, I really enjoy running and I like to run a marathon probably next year.'

✓ 'Yes, I do. I really enjoy running, and I would like to run a marathon probably next year.'

'like to' vs 'would like to': The original mixed present simple 'I like to run a marathon' with 'probably next year' which refers to a future intention. Using 'would like to' or 'plan to' is more natural for a future desire. Also add commas and a full stop to separate clauses for clarity.'

× 'I also enjoy reading, especially books like short stories, poetry, novels and essays.'

✓ 'I also enjoy reading, especially short stories, poetry, novels, and essays.'

'books like' is unnecessary and slightly incorrect because short stories and poetry are not always categorized as "books". Removing 'books like' and listing the forms is clearer. Added a serial comma for clarity.'

× 'In my opinion, hobbies help us to unwind and feel relaxed, so for me it's a way to, uh, feel better.'

✓ 'In my opinion, hobbies help us unwind and feel relaxed, so for me they are a way to feel better.'

'help us to unwind' is acceptable but more natural is 'help us unwind' (omit to). 'it's a way to, uh, feel better' contains filler 'uh' and uses singular 'it' ambiguously; replace with 'they are a way' to match plural 'hobbies' and remove filler.'

× 'Yes I did, I enjoy running with my dad and I also liked swimming in the pool or at the beach.'

✓ 'Yes, I did. I enjoyed running with my dad, and I also liked swimming in the pool or at the beach.'

Mixing past 'did' with present 'enjoy' is inconsistent. The question asked about childhood, so use past tense 'enjoyed'. Added commas and separated clauses for clarity.'

× 'I'm not completely sure if these were hobbies or just activities.'

✓ 'I'm not completely sure whether these were hobbies or just activities.'

Use 'whether' for alternatives rather than 'if' in this context; 'if' is not wrong in speech but 'whether' is more precise for a choice between two possibilities.'

× 'I enjoyed it, but I spend a lot of time doing them.'

✓ 'I enjoyed them, and I spent a lot of time doing them.'

Pronoun agreement and tense: 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural activities. 'spend' should be past 'spent' to match 'enjoyed' and the past time frame.'

× 'I also liked uh, reading books as I said before.'

✓ 'I also liked reading books, as I said before.'

Remove filler 'uh' for a cleaner sentence. Add a comma before the clause 'as I said before' for clarity. Tense 'liked' is correct for past reference.'

× 'Actually I have a few hobbies from my childhood.'

✓ 'Actually, I have had a few hobbies since my childhood.'

For an action continuing from childhood to present, use present perfect 'have had' or say 'I have had a few hobbies since childhood.' Added comma after 'Actually'. The original is acceptable but this correction matches the intended meaning more precisely.'

× 'For example, I've always enjoyed a reading short stories.'

✓ 'For example, I've always enjoyed reading short stories.'

Remove the extra article 'a' before 'reading'; 'enjoyed reading' is the correct verb + -ing structure.'

× 'I also used to go running with my dad around the park and I've kept that habit until now.'

✓ 'I also used to go running with my dad around the park, and I've kept that habit until now.'

Minor punctuation fix: add comma before conjunction. The tenses are acceptable: 'used to' (past habit) and 'I've kept' (present perfect) to show continuation.'

× 'Additionally, I like playing chess.'

✓ 'Additionally, I like to play chess.'

Both 'like playing' and 'like to play' are correct; changed to 'like to play' for variety and to match later phrasing. This is optional stylistic change rather than strict grammar error.'

× 'I didn't play it much when I was younger but I discovered later and now I'm really enjoy playing check with my dad, friends and also online.'

✓ 'I didn't play it much when I was younger, but I discovered it later, and now I really enjoy playing chess with my dad, friends, and also online.'

Multiple issues: 'discovered later' needs an object 'it'. 'really enjoy' should be present 'enjoy' without 'am' (so 'I really enjoy'). 'check' is a typo for 'chess'. Added commas and corrected list punctuation.'

× 'Yes, I think I share some hobbies with my family members.'

✓ 'Yes, I think I share some hobbies with my family members.'

'No change necessary: subject-verb agreement is correct. Included here to indicate no error from the provided list.'

× 'For example, I enjoy running like my dad and we used to run together.'

✓ 'For example, I enjoy running like my dad, and we used to run together.'

Add comma before conjunction for clarity. Tenses are appropriate: present 'enjoy' and past 'used to run' indicate a habit that changed.'

× 'Also, my mom really encouraged me to read since it's a hobby she enjoys too.'

✓ 'Also, my mom really encouraged me to read, since it's a hobby she enjoys too.'

Add comma for clarity. Tenses are logical: 'encouraged' (past action that influenced present habit) and 'she enjoys' (present). No further grammatical change needed.'