Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be consistent with tense and use clear, concise sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence in present tense if these are current hobbies, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid spelling mistakes ("laser" → "leisure") and unnecessary words.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing badminton and reading novels, and in my free time I like to cook simple meals. For example, I often try new recipes on weekends to relax.

제안: Use past tense for childhood and make sentences more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence ("Yes, I did") then explain briefly why and how you pursued the hobby, using linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I wanted to learn dancing because I loved watching my classmates perform. So I tried to copy their steps and practiced whenever I had time.

제안: Keep answers under five sentences and more structured: state the hobby, say how you maintained it, and give a specific example. Use correct grammar ("free time" not "off free time") and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I have kept dancing since childhood. I learned many moves from YouTube and from friends, and I still dance at weddings and local events. For instance, last year I performed at a cousin's wedding.

제안: Answer directly and provide clearer reasons with correct grammar and word choice. Use linking words like "because" and avoid confusing pronouns. Keep it concise and specific about who and why.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. They are busy with work and study, so they don't have time for dancing. In fact, my parents prefer that I focus on my studies rather than extracurricular activities.

× I had a lot of hobbies like playing badminton, reading novels and in my laser time I used to cook food.

✓ I had a lot of hobbies like playing badminton and reading novels, and in my leisure time I used to cook food.

The main issue is tense and word choice: 'had' and 'used to' correctly indicate past habits, but 'laser time' is a spelling error for 'leisure time'. Also the sentence needed a conjunction and punctuation to be clear. Suggestion: replace 'laser' with 'leisure' and add 'and' before the last item to improve parallel structure.

× In my childhood I want to learn dance because whenever I saw my classmates dancing, I also keen to learn the dance steps because I got some attraction from that time. So yeah, I have hobby of dancing.

✓ In my childhood I wanted to learn to dance because whenever I saw my classmates dancing, I became keen to learn the steps. So yes, I have a hobby of dancing.

Tense and verb form errors: 'want' should be past 'wanted' to match 'In my childhood'; 'learn dance' should be 'learn to dance'; 'also keen' needs a verb 'became keen' or 'was keen'; 'I got some attraction' is unnatural — use 'I became attracted' or 'I was attracted'. Also 'So yeah' is informal; 'So yes' is better. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for childhood events and use correct infinitive form 'learn to dance'.

× Yes, like I answered above that I had a hobby of dancing sometime when I got off free time I learned some dance moves from the YouTube videos and from my friends that would that would help me in dancing, in the wedding and in an event.

✓ Yes, as I said above, I had a hobby of dancing. Sometimes when I had free time, I learned some dance moves from YouTube videos and from my friends, which helped me when dancing at weddings and other events.

Multiple tense and structure issues: use past tense 'had' consistently; 'sometime when I got off free time' is incorrect — use 'Sometimes when I had free time'; 'YouTube' does not need 'the'; remove duplicate phrase 'that would that would'; use a relative clause 'which helped me' to explain purpose; 'in the wedding and in an event' should be 'at weddings and other events'. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, keep past tense, and use appropriate prepositions 'at' for events.

× No, in my opinion my hobbies would not match any of my member because they don't have enough time to do dancing.

✓ No. In my opinion, my hobbies do not match those of any of my family members because they do not have enough time to dance.

Pronoun and noun choice issues: 'any of my member' is incorrect; use 'any of my family members' or 'any of them'. 'Would not match' is modal unnecessary — use present 'do not match'. 'To do dancing' is awkward; use 'to dance'. Suggestion: use correct plural noun 'members' and better phrasing 'do not have enough time to dance'.

× They also stopped me to doing these type of activities because all our focus on their study only.

✓ They also stopped me from doing these types of activities because their focus is only on studying.

Several errors: 'stopped me to doing' is incorrect; correct form is 'stopped me from doing'. 'these type of activities' should be plural 'these types of activities' or 'this type of activity'. 'all our focus on their study only' is unclear and grammatically wrong — likely intended 'their focus is only on studying'. Also pronoun agreement: 'their' matches 'they'. Suggestion: use 'stopped me from doing', pluralize 'types', and rephrase latter clause as 'because their focus is only on studying'.