Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be natural and grammatically correct: give a direct topic sentence and one brief supporting detail. Use correct noun forms and articles. For example, say “Yes, I have a hobby” or “Yes, I have several hobbies.” Keep it to 1–2 sentences and avoid unnecessary words like “leisure activities” without context.

예시: Yes, I have a hobby. I enjoy reading contemporary novels because they help me relax and learn new vocabulary.

제안: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence and follow with one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. For example: “When I was a child, I played chess.” Then add why it mattered using “because” or “so”.

예시: When I was a child, I played chess regularly because it improved my concentration and problem-solving skills. As a result, I enjoyed competitions and felt proud when I won local matches.

제안: Answer directly with past-to-present continuity and give one specific reason or example. Use correct verb forms and natural collocations (e.g., “make me feel happy” not “very good feelings”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I have played football since I was a child because I love the team spirit and the physical exercise. It still makes me feel happy and energetic when I play on weekends.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then briefly compare hobbies. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, plurals) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like “but” or “for example” correctly and provide a concise example about a family member.

예시: No, we don't share the same hobbies. For example, my sister enjoys drawing and often paints landscapes, while I prefer playing football.

× Yes, I have a leisure activities.

✓ Yes, I have a leisure activity.

The noun 'activities' is plural but the determiner 'a' requires a singular noun. Use 'a leisure activity' for one, or 'leisure activities' without 'a' for plural. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and match the article accordingly.

× Yes, I have. And I'm convinced that it was chess playing chess.

✓ Yes, I did. And I'm convinced that it was playing chess.

The question asked 'Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?' requires a past tense short answer 'Yes, I did.' The phrase 'chess playing chess' is redundant; use 'playing chess'. Also keep past reference: 'it was playing chess.'

× It's my it was my pastimes and I like it.

✓ It was one of my pastimes and I liked it.

The sentence repeats 'my' and mixes present and past tenses. 'Pastimes' is plural so use 'one of my pastimes' and align tense to past ('liked') because speaking about childhood. Also ensure single subject and clear structure.

× It's very significant thing was for me.

✓ It was a very significant thing for me.

Word order is incorrect. Use the article 'a' before 'very significant thing' and place 'for me' at the end. Also match tense to past: 'It was a very significant thing for me.'

× Of course. And it is football and I like this hobby.

✓ Of course. It is football and I like this hobby.

Extra conjunction 'And' at sentence start is unnecessary but not ungrammatical; main issue is stylistic. This sentence is acceptable in present tense because question asked 'Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?'. Keep present simple 'It is football' and 'I like this hobby.'

× It's very interesting for me.

✓ It's very interesting to me.

English prefers 'interesting to me' rather than 'interesting for me' when expressing personal opinion. Either 'I find it very interesting' or 'It's very interesting to me.'

× It's makes me feel very good feelings, very good emotions.

✓ It makes me feel very good and gives me positive emotions.

Using both 'feel very good feelings' and 'very good emotions' is redundant and 'It's makes' is incorrect subject-verb form. Use 'It makes me feel' (no 's' on 'It' + verb agreement: actually 'It makes' is correct so remove 'It's') -> corrected to 'It makes me feel very good and gives me positive emotions.' This clarifies and removes redundancy.

× No, we don't. So you actually have umm, another hobbies, uh, for example, my sister like drawing and she's uh, art girl.

✓ No, we don't. So I actually have other hobbies. For example, my sister likes drawing and she's an art girl.

Several errors: 'you' is wrong person — student should say 'I'. 'Another hobbies' mixes singular 'another' with plural 'hobbies' — use 'other hobbies'. 'My sister like' needs third person singular 'likes'. Also include article before 'art girl': 'an art girl' is awkward but matches original; better: 'she's an artist.' Adjust pronouns and subject-verb agreement accordingly.