Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer the question using a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. use “hobbies” not “habits” here), and avoid incomplete phrases. Mention 1–3 hobbies, give a brief specific reason or example for each, and use linking words (for example, “and”, “for”, “also”) to make your response coherent. Keep answers to under five sentences.

예시: I have several hobbies. I enjoy painting because it helps me relax and express my creativity, and I go running three times a week to stay fit. I also like chatting with friends online to unwind and share ideas.

제안: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood (e.g. “I had”), avoid repetition and filler words ("uh"), and complete your sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence, then a specific detail about how the hobby affected you. Limit to a few sentences.

예시: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, I enjoyed dressing my Barbie dolls, which helped me develop creativity and an eye for colors. I also liked hanging out with neighbors and playing simple outdoor games.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and grammar (e.g. “reading has helped me…”). Be specific about what you read and give a concise reason or example. Remove fillers like “uh” and keep the response under five sentences. Use linking words such as “because” or “also”.

예시: Yes, I have: I have loved reading since childhood because stories let me explore new worlds and ideas. I usually read novels and short stories, and reading has also helped me improve my vocabulary and concentration.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms (e.g. “we like to look for places we are interested in” or “we like to share our travel memories”), and add one specific recent example or plan to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words like “for example” or “so” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, my mother and I share a love of travel. For example, last year we planned a trip to Yunnan and enjoyed researching places to visit together, and we often share photos and stories from our trips to remember the experiences.

× I have a lot of habits such as painting which can help me relax and pass my time.

✓ I have many hobbies such as painting, which can help me relax and pass the time.

The student used 'a lot of habits' which is unnatural here. 'Hobbies' is the correct noun; use 'many' with countable plural nouns. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which can help...' and change 'pass my time' to the idiomatic 'pass the time'. Improve vocabulary consistency and punctuation.

× Also I like running which strengthen my body and chatting with my.

✓ Also I like running, which strengthens my body, and chatting with my friends.

After 'like' use gerunds correctly; 'running' is fine but the relative clause needs third-person singular verb 'strengthens' (subject 'which' refers to running). 'Chatting with my' is incomplete; add the noun 'friends'. Add commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, I have a lot of hobbies when I was a child, I like dressing my Barbie dolls, which helps me helped me uh, develop my creativity and I also like hang out with my.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of hobbies when I was a child. I liked dressing my Barbie dolls, which helped me develop my creativity, and I also liked hanging out with my friends.

The time frame is past ('when I was a child'), so verbs must be past tense: 'had', 'liked', 'helped'. Remove duplicated 'helps me helped me'. After 'liked' use gerund 'hanging out'; complete 'my friends'. Use sentence separation and commas for clarity.

× Yes I have, the hobby is reading which helps me relax myself and pass the time with the story I never experience before.

✓ Yes I have. The hobby is reading, which helps me relax and allows me to experience stories I have never experienced before.

Maintain present perfect 'I have' is okay, but the clause 'pass the time with the story I never experience before' mixes tenses and word forms. Use 'helps me relax' and 'experience' in present perfect 'have never experienced' to show prior lack of experience. Avoid 'relax myself' – 'relax' is sufficient. Add commas for nonrestrictive clause.

× And uh, reading also helps me building my vocabulary.

✓ And reading also helps me build my vocabulary.

After 'helps' use the base form of the verb, not '-ing'. So use 'build' not 'building'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Yes, both my mother and I love traveling around the world.

✓ Yes, both my mother and I love traveling around the world.

Original sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It remains included to show it matches no listed error. (Kept for completeness.)

× We like spending time together to search the place we interested in the next time and we like share our memories in traveling.

✓ We like spending time together to search for places we are interested in visiting next time, and we like to share our memories from our travels.

Use 'search for' not 'search' alone; 'places' should be plural to match general meaning. Insert 'are' for 'are interested in', and 'visiting' clarifies the action. Use 'like to share' and 'memories from our travels' (not 'in traveling') for natural preposition use and verb forms.