Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 总体不错，回答自然且信息明确。但可以更简洁并用连接词衔接两部分，使表达更流畅；另外可加入具体例子或频率以增加细节。避免冗长或重复。

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading novels and jogging regularly. For example, I read about 2–3 novels a month to relax and learn new words, and I go jogging three times a week to stay fit.

제안: 有内容，但存在口头填充词（如“uh”）和明显的语言错误（如“STEM collecting”、“prove fine motor skills”用词不当）。需要纠正词汇并提供具体细节或例子。注意句子结构与用词准确性。

예시: Yes, I loved collecting stamps and drawing cartoons. Collecting stamps taught me patience and attention to detail, and drawing cartoons helped me develop my creativity and fine motor skills.

제안: 回答直接且有具体细节，但口语化词汇（如“Yeah”，“used to”后可加频率或年龄）可稍微更正式；句子可用连接词丰富。建议补充具体时间或成果。

예시: Yes, I've enjoyed drawing since childhood. For example, when I was around eight to twelve years old I often spent several hours a day sketching cartoons and scenes from storybooks.

제안: 回答内容相关但开头有错误（“Your family members”不应出现），并使用了非正式缩写（'cause）。应删除不相关短语，使用更自然的连接词并增加具体例子或频率。

예시: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family, such as hiking and cooking. For instance, we go hiking together once a month and try new recipes on weekends so we can spend quality time together.

× STEM collecting taught me patience and attention to detail, while drawing helped me express creativity and prove fine motor skills.

✓ Stamp collecting taught me patience and attention to detail, while drawing helped me express creativity and improve fine motor skills.

这句中有拼写/用词错误：原文写成“STEM collecting”应为“stamp collecting”（集邮）。另外“prove fine motor skills”不合适，应为“improve fine motor skills”（改善精细运动能力）。建议检查拼写并使用恰当动词（prove 意为证明，不是改善）。

× I used to spend hours sketching cartoons and scenes from store storybooks.

✓ I used to spend hours sketching cartoons and scenes from storybooks.

原句中“store storybooks”词序和搭配不自然。通常说“storybooks”（图画故事书）即可，若要表示商店里的书应写“storybooks in stores”。建议删去多余的“store”或调整为正确短语。

× Your family members Yes, I share some hobbies with my family such as hiking and cooking 'cause we enjoy spending time together outdoors and trying new recipes.

✓ Yes, I share some hobbies with my family, such as hiking and cooking, because we enjoy spending time together outdoors and trying new recipes.

原句开头错误地包含“You r family members”且标点混乱。需移除多余片段并用完整连词“because”替代口语缩写“'cause”，同时添加逗号分隔插入语，使句子结构清晰。建议避免口语缩写并注意标点与主语一致。