Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, articles and collocations (e.g., “a big fan,” “helped me relax” → present tense “helps me relax”). Avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes. One of my favorite hobbies is watching movies because I’m a big fan of different genres such as comedies and thrillers. For example, I often watch light comedies to unwind after work, while thrillers keep me mentally engaged and curious.

제안: Give a concise, well-structured answer: a clear topic sentence in past tense, then specific supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., “When I was a child, I had…”), avoid vague phrases and repetition.

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed watching cartoons and playing with my friends. In particular, cartoons made me feel happy and refreshed after a long day at school, so I watched them almost every afternoon.

제안: Be clear and avoid hesitations. Use the correct pronoun and sentence structure: e.g., “Yes, I do” not “He's”. State the hobby and give specific details (name of the cartoon, why you liked it) in a smooth two-sentence answer.

예시: Yes, I do. Since childhood I have loved watching a cartoon called Doraemon because I admired the imaginative gadgets and the friendship between the characters.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with correct phrasing. Avoid repetition (“with my sister” twice) and incorrect words like “outdoors game.” Use linking words such as “for example” and “because” appropriately.

예시: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, my sister and I both enjoy hiking because we love being outdoors and it’s a great way to spend quality time together and stay active.

× Yes I do, one of my favorite hobby is watching movies because I'm big fan of different genres like comedies and thrillers.

✓ Yes I do. One of my favorite hobbies is watching movies because I'm a big fan of different genres like comedies and thrillers.

The phrase 'one of my favorite hobby' is incorrect because 'one of' must be followed by a plural noun ('hobbies'). Also 'I'm big fan' is missing the article 'a' before 'big fan'. Correcting these fixes number agreement and article use. Suggestion: use 'one of my favorite hobbies' and include necessary articles such as 'a'.

× It helped me to relax and feel unwind.

✓ It helps me to relax and feel unwound.

The response is about a current habit so present simple 'helps' is appropriate rather than past 'helped'. 'Feel unwind' is incorrect: 'unwind' is a verb, while 'unwound' or 'relaxed' are adjectives/participles describing state. Use 'feel unwound' or 'feel relaxed'.

× When I was child I have different hobbies like since in childhood or children have many hobbies like watching cartoons and playing with my friends.

✓ When I was a child I had different hobbies; for example, I watched cartoons and played with my friends.

The original has mixed tenses and redundant phrases ('since in childhood or children have many hobbies') producing an unclear sentence structure. Use past tense 'was a child' and 'had' to describe past habits, and give clear examples: 'I watched cartoons and played with my friends.' Avoid inserting unrelated general statements in the personal response.

× Especially I love watching cartoons because it make me feel happy and make me feel fresh.

✓ Especially I loved watching cartoons because they made me feel happy and refreshed.

Describing childhood habits requires past tense. 'Make' should be 'made' to match past. Also 'it make' is wrong subject agreement because 'cartoons' is plural so use 'they made'. 'Make me feel fresh' is unnatural; 'refreshed' is the correct adjective. Suggestion: use past tense and ensure subject-verb agreement and natural adjective choice.

× He's definitely a hobby that I had since childhood. Is watching cartoon, uh, cartoon name is Doravan.

✓ Yes, I definitely had a hobby since childhood: watching cartoons. One of my favorite cartoons was called Doravan.

'He's definitely a hobby' is ungrammatical and unclear. The sentence mixes pronouns and contractions incorrectly. Rephrase to a clear affirmative sentence in past tense: 'I definitely had a hobby since childhood: watching cartoons.' Use plural 'cartoons' or 'a cartoon' consistently and introduce the name properly: 'was called Doravan.'

× Is watching cartoon, uh, cartoon name is Doravan.

✓ I watched a cartoon called Doravan.

The noun 'cartoon' requires an article in this context: 'a cartoon' or 'the cartoon'. Also use a clear past tense statement 'I watched' and 'called Doravan' to name it. Avoid fragmented, spoken fillers in written correction.

× Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, my sister and I both enjoy hiking because we like being outdoors game and it's a good way to spend time together with my sister.

✓ Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For example, my sister and I both enjoy hiking because we like being outdoors, and it's a good way to spend time together.

The phrase 'being outdoors game' is incorrect and likely a slip. Remove 'game' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and'. Also avoid repeating 'with my sister' since it's already stated. Ensure clear, concise phrasing: 'we like being outdoors, and it's a good way to spend time together.'