Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use present simple for current hobbies, correct verb forms and plurals, and make sentences concise. Organize answer with a clear topic sentence followed by a brief example. Use linking words like "and" or "for example" appropriately.

예시: I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading books, watching movies, listening to music and playing sports. For example, I play basketball with a friend every week because it helps me relax and stay fit.

제안: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood; avoid filler words and be more specific about frequency and context. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give supporting details linked with words like "when" and "because."

예시: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I especially loved playing cricket with my friends in the community, and we played almost every weekend because it was fun and helped me forget my worries.

제안: Be concise and use correct tense: say you have played cricket since childhood using present perfect or simple present. Reduce redundancy and improve cohesion with linking words like "so" or "therefore." Provide one clear example of recent activity.

예시: Yes, I have played cricket since I was a child and it is still my main hobby. I often play whenever I have free time; for example, I played a match with friends last week, which was enjoyable and re-energized me.

제안: Clarify relationship and use correct grammar: state that you share a hobby with your father, use past tense for learning and present tense for current habits. Avoid incomplete sentences; finish the thought and include a reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "so."

예시: Yes, I share a hobby with my father: reading. I learned to enjoy books because my father loved reading and encouraged me from a young age, so now I read regularly as well.

× Yes, I had some hobbies.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies.

This sentence is actually acceptable if the student refers to past hobbies; no change needed. Keep past tense when talking about past period. Note: If meaning is current hobbies, use 'I have some hobbies.'

× I liked reading book and play, playing sports and watching a movie, listening music.

✓ I liked reading books and plays, playing sports, watching movies, and listening to music.

Plural nouns are required for general activities (books, plays, movies). The verb 'listening' needs preposition 'to'. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× For example, I played basketball every week with my friend who's a help me to relax.

✓ For example, I played basketball every week with my friend who helped me to relax.

The relative clause should use 'who helped' to match past tense. 'Who's a help' is incorrect: use 'who helped' or 'who helped me relax'. 'Help' is a verb here, not a noun, and 'to relax' can be omitted or written as 'relax'.

× Yes, I have a lot of hobby when I was sad, especially I love to playing cricket and score with my friend and uh, I frequently played it uh, with group of people in my community.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of hobbies when I was sad; especially I loved playing cricket and scoring with my friends, and I frequently played it with a group of people in my community.

Tenses must be consistent: past context uses past tense verbs (had, loved, played). 'A lot of hobby' should be 'a lot of hobbies'. Use gerund 'playing' after 'love' (love playing), and plural 'friends' and 'a group' require articles.

× Yes, in the first I had playing cricket a lot also.

✓ Yes, at first I played a lot of cricket as well.

Use 'at first' to indicate initial time. 'Had playing' is incorrect combination; use simple past 'played'. 'A lot' modifies verb properly as 'played a lot of cricket'. 'Also' better as 'as well'.

× Currently cricket is my passion and when I get any leisure time this time I go for cricket.

✓ Currently cricket is my passion, and when I get any free time I play cricket.

Use present simple 'play' for habitual actions. 'Leisure time' or 'free time' is preferred; 'go for cricket' is unnatural—use 'play cricket'. Remove redundant 'this time'.

× For example, last week I had played cricket here with my friend.

✓ For example, last week I played cricket here with my friend.

Past simple 'played' is appropriate for a specific time in the past. Using 'had played' (past perfect) is unnecessary unless contrasting with an earlier past event.

× So it's give me pleasure and also bounce back my energy.

✓ So it gives me pleasure and also restores my energy.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'gives' for 'it'. 'Bounce back my energy' is incorrect collocation; use 'restore my energy' or 'recharge me'.

× Yes I have especially my reading book is also one of my hobby.

✓ Yes, I do; especially reading is one of my hobbies.

'Reading book' is awkward; use 'reading' as activity. Use 'one of my hobbies' (plural). 'I have' requires auxiliary 'do' in short answer for present: 'Yes, I do.'

× I will taught I taught it from my father because my father has made favorite hobbies reading book so that make me encourage to read book that's why I think my father and my.

✓ I was taught by my father because my father made reading his favorite hobby, which encouraged me to read; that's why I think my father and I share the same hobby.

Use passive 'was taught' or 'my father taught me'. 'Will taught' is incorrect. Use past tense 'made' and 'encouraged'. 'Reading book' should be 'reading' or 'reading books'. Complete the final clause as 'my father and I'.