Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意语法和句子开头的清晰表达。开头应直接回答问题（例如："Yes, I enjoy..."），避免多余填充词（例如："maybe"、冗长重复）。动词时态和主谓一致要正确（例如："It strengthens my body and helps me unwind."）。可以用一至两句补充细节并用连接词衔接（例如："I usually walk in the morning with my family, which helps..."）。

예시: Yes, I enjoy going for long walks every morning around my neighbourhood with my family. These walks strengthen my body and help me unwind after a busy day. They also give me time to talk with my family and start the day positively.

제안: 注意时态和句子连贯性。先直接回答（例如："Yes, I loved drawing."），然后用连接词说明细节。避免语法错误如"With it strengthened"和名词短语不当，应改为"It strengthened my imagination and confidence in self-expression." 使用单复数和不可数名词要准确（"imagination"不可数）。

예시: Yes, I loved drawing when I was a child, especially cartoon characters. Drawing helped to develop my imagination and gave me more confidence in expressing myself creatively.

제안: 回答中出现不相关或错误的词（例如"Johnny is my hobby"）要避免，先给出明确主题句（"Yes, drawing is a hobby I've had since childhood."）。说明开始时间和持续性可以用现在完成时或过去完成时，并用连接词衔接细节。注意从句和主句的一致性（例如："which strengthens my imagination and helps me express myself."）。

예시: Yes, drawing is a hobby I've had since childhood. I started it in primary school and I still enjoy drawing cartoon characters like Hello Kitty, which strengthens my imagination and helps me express myself.

제안: 回答要更简洁有条理。先直接回答（例如："Yes, we often share the same hobby."），然后用一两句具体说明和连接词（例如："After dinner we take a leisurely walk and chat, which helps us relax and bond."）。减少口头语（如"umm","is"重复），注意动词形式（"eat"应为"eating"或使用过去式/现在分词结构）。

예시: Yes, we often share the same hobby of taking leisurely walks after dinner. During these walks we chat about our day, which helps us relax and strengthens our family bond.

× Is I'm into going for a long walk maybe in the morning every day around my neighborhood with my family. It strengthen my body as well as help me unwind.

✓ I'm into going for long walks, maybe in the morning every day around my neighborhood with my family. It strengthens my body and helps me unwind.

句子开始使用“Is I'm”是错误的句子结构，英语陈述句不需要前导“Is”。此外，“going for a long walk”在描述习惯性活动时应使用复数或动名词泛指，改为“going for long walks”。动词与主语不一致：‘It’（单数）后动词需用第三人称单数形式，故将“strengthen”改为“strengthens”；同理“help”改为“helps”。并将“as well as”改为更自然的并列连词“and”。建议：去掉多余助动词，注意习惯性活动用复数或泛指形式，主语为单数时动词须加-s。

× Yes, I was quite fond of drawing, especially during the portraits of cartoon characters. With it strengthened my imaginations as well as the confidence to self-expression.

✓ Yes, I was quite fond of drawing, especially portraits of cartoon characters. It strengthened my imagination as well as my confidence in self-expression.

原句“during the portraits of cartoon characters”用法不当，应为“especially portraits of cartoon characters”。“With it strengthened”结构错误，需用完整句“It strengthened...”来表达过去对想象力和自我表达信心的促进。名词复数与单数问题：将“imaginations”改为单数“imagination”，并在“confidence”前加“my”，表示所属；“to self-expression”应为“in self-expression”更地道。建议：使用正确的过去时独立句，注意名词单复数及介词搭配。

× Yes, Johnny is my hobby that I've had since I was a child. I took it up in primary school and until now I love drawing, especially cartoon characters like Hello Kitty which strengthen my imagination and self-expression.

✓ Yes, drawing is a hobby I've had since I was a child. I took it up in primary school and even now I love drawing, especially cartoon characters like Hello Kitty, which strengthen my imagination and self-expression.

原句将人名“Johnny”误用作爱好，且代词和指代不清。应直接说明“drawing is a hobby”。“until now I love”时态与表述不自然，改为“even now I love”或“I still love”。定语从句“which strengthen”中先行词为复数“cartoon characters”，因此动词用复数“strengthen”是正确，但前文改为复数语义需保持一致；同时建议加逗号分隔非限制性定语从句。建议：确保指代清楚，不要把人名误当事物，注意时间副词位置，使句子更自然流畅。

× Is we do show the same hobby of taking a leisurely stroll after eat umm after dinner umm during the walk we have a chit chat umm so that we can know know more about each other is such a good way to relax and to bond.

✓ Yes, we do share the same hobby of taking a leisurely stroll after dinner. During the walk we have a chit-chat, so we can get to know each other better. It's a good way to relax and bond.

句子开头“Is we do”是错误的结构，陈述句应直接用“Yes, we do”或“Yes, we”开始。“after eat”语法错误，应为“after dinner”或“after eating”，这里选择“after dinner”。“chit chat”作为名词可写作“chit-chat”。“know know more”重复错误，应为“get to know each other better”。最后用独立句“It’s a good way to relax and bond.”更清晰。建议：去掉多余填充词（umm），使用正确的动词或动名词结构，避免词语重复，并将想法分成几个短句提高可懂度。