Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and fragments. To improve, respond directly with one clear topic sentence stating your hobby, then add one or two specific supporting details (how often you do it and why you enjoy it). Use linking words (for example, because or so) and avoid filler words like uh. Keep the reply to no more than five sentences.

예시: I enjoy swimming in my free time. I go to the local pool twice a week because it helps me relax and keep fit. I also like watching films about sports, which inspires my training.

제안: Your reply has some good ideas but is confusing and lacks specific, coherent details. Improve by giving one clear topic sentence about a childhood hobby, then support it with specific examples (what you read, what you collected) and a brief reason or memory. Use clear vocabulary and linkers like for example or because.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed reading adventure books and collecting stamps. For example, I had a collection of stamps from different countries, and I loved reading stories about explorers because they sparked my imagination.

제안: The answer is vague and does not state a specific hobby or provide supporting details. To improve, state the hobby clearly (e.g., reading, swimming), explain how long you have had it, and give one reason or example of how it has continued into adulthood. Keep sentences concise and logical, using linking words such as since and because.

예시: Yes. I have been reading since I was a child, and I still read regularly now. I have enjoyed books for more than fifteen years because they help me learn and relax, so I always make time for them.

제안: The response is unclear and does not directly answer the question. Improve by giving a clear yes or no, then briefly explain the difference and give one specific example of a hobby that family members have versus yours. Use linking words like however or while to contrast.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For instance, my family enjoys gardening, while I prefer swimming and watching films, so we spend our free time apart doing activities we each enjoy.

× I might help with uh, swimming, uh, style week time week, uh, I my favorite uh, slide light skin spook, uh, movies, small ways, uh.

✓ I might help with swimming; my favorite is watching movies.

The original sentence is garbled and contains many non-grammatical fragments. I identified a need for present participle form for activities (swimming, watching). Use 'watching movies' (verb + -ing) to express a hobby. Also simplify and connect ideas with a semicolon or conjunction. Keep tense and modality: 'I might help with swimming' is questionable but preserved; better: 'I enjoy swimming and watching movies.'

× Yes I did. I enjoy reading adventures book and collecting spam.

✓ Yes, I did. I enjoyed reading adventure books and collecting stamps.

The response begins with 'Yes I did' indicating past context, so verbs should be in past tense: 'enjoyed'. Pluralize 'books' (singular/plural) and correct nouns: 'adventure book' -> 'adventure books'; 'spam' is incorrect for stamp, change to 'stamps'.

× For example, I would spend how many stories about Islam with studying my immigration and my star collection strongly special.

✓ For example, I used to spend hours reading stories about Islam, studying my family history, and organizing my star collection.

The original sentence has unclear phrases and wrong words. 'Would spend how many' is ungrammatical; use 'used to spend hours'. 'Studying my immigration' is incorrect — likely 'studying my family history' or 'learning about my heritage'. 'Star collection strongly special' is awkward; use 'organizing my star collection'. Ensure parallel structure when listing activities and past tense to match 'I used to'.

× Yes, as like we spoke healthy travels Thai week. My favorite is is essentially.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy traveling and staying healthy. My favorite hobby is traveling.

Original is unintelligible; correct to coherent present-tense statements about ongoing hobbies. Use simple present 'I still enjoy' to indicate a hobby continuing from childhood. Remove duplicate 'is is' and choose a clear noun 'traveling' as the favorite hobby.

× Uh, no, I, I strictly spoke, uh, families, uh, activists because, uh. What until now?

✓ No. I don't have the same hobbies as my family; they are more interested in activism, and I am not.

Original has disfluent fragments and unclear meaning. Recast into full sentences: negative response 'No.' then explain difference: 'I don't have the same hobbies as my family; they are more interested in activism, and I am not.' Use correct verb forms and clear conjunctions to express contrast. 'Strictly spoke' is meaningless; replace with 'they are more interested in'. 'What until now?' is unclear and removed.