Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with good structure and specific details. To improve, reduce redundancy (avoid repeating similar reasons) and vary vocabulary and sentence length. Use a linking phrase to separate ideas more smoothly and keep sentences concise (max 3–4 sentences).

예시: I enjoy jogging and reading. I jog in the pleasant park near my house on weekends to stay fit and clear my mind, and in the evenings I read fiction to relax and unwind after a busy day.

제안: The answer addresses the question but has grammar errors, unclear phrasing and redundancy. Improve subject-verb agreement, correct tense and article use, and be specific about activities. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I had several outdoor hobbies as a child. For example, I practised gymnastics and karate regularly, which kept me very fit and helped me build confidence.

제안: This is a natural and well-structured response with specific details. To improve further, vary vocabulary (e.g., "habit" synonyms) and combine sentences for conciseness. Mention a particular book or genre for added specificity.

예시: Yes, I've read since childhood. I read every evening—usually a few pages of a favorite nonfiction book—because it helps me relax and teaches me something new; recently I've been enjoying popular science titles.

제안: The response is relevant and personal but has grammatical errors and repetition. Correct pronoun use, remove duplicated words, and use linking words to make it concise. Start with a direct topic sentence about shared hobbies, then give one supporting detail.

예시: Yes, my husband and I share running as a hobby. Since moving to our new home, we run in the nearby park every weekend, do some exercises together, and enjoy each other's company.

× I always thought was doing the gymnastic and karate and I did it regularly and was very fit child.

✓ I always thought I was doing gymnastics and karate, and I did them regularly and was a very fit child.

The sentence contains incorrect word forms and missing pronouns. 'gymnastic' should be the plural noun 'gymnastics'. The clause 'I always thought was doing' is missing the subject 'I' after 'thought'. 'Karate' and 'gymnastics' are activities, so use plural verb reference 'did them' rather than 'did it'. Also add the article 'a' before 'very fit child'. Suggestion: include necessary subjects, use correct noun forms for activities, and ensure articles are present where needed.

× There is a pleasant park next to my house, so I go jogging there at the weekend because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind, while I usually read fiction in the evenings to relax and forget the stresses of a busy day.

✓ There is a pleasant park next to my house, so I go jogging there on the weekends because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind, while I usually read fiction in the evenings to relax and forget the stresses of a busy day.

The preposition for days or general weekend habit in many varieties of English is 'on the weekend(s)' or 'at the weekend'. The original mixed 'at the weekend' is acceptable in British English; however, because the sentence uses 'at the weekend' with 'go jogging there at the weekend' it's not incorrect in British English. If targeting consistency with American usage, 'on the weekends' is preferred. Suggestion: choose the preposition that matches the intended variety of English and keep it consistent.

× So me and my husband every weekend we go to the park that is very close to our house and we we run, we do some exercises and enjoy the company.

✓ So my husband and I go to the park that is very close to our house every weekend, and we run, do some exercises, and enjoy each other's company.

Pronoun order and form: use 'my husband and I' rather than 'me and my husband' when the phrase is the subject. The sentence also has redundant timing phrase placement ('every weekend we' repeated) and duplicate 'we'. 'Enjoy the company' is vague; natural phrasing is 'enjoy each other's company'. Suggestion: place 'every weekend' after the verb phrase or at the end, remove duplicate words, and use correct subject pronoun order.

× When we moved to the new place, I started running every weekend and I involved my husband into doing this physical activity with me.

✓ When we moved to the new place, I started running every weekend and I involved my husband in doing this physical activity with me.

The verb 'involved' is followed by the preposition 'in' rather than 'into' when indicating inclusion in an activity. 'Involved my husband into' is incorrect; use 'involved my husband in'. Suggestion: use 'involved someone in [activity]' for correct collocation.

× When I was a child I spent a lot of time outdoors with my friends, so most of my hobbies were based on outdoors activities.

✓ When I was a child I spent a lot of time outdoors with my friends, so most of my hobbies were based on outdoor activities.

'Outdoors activities' incorrectly uses the adverb 'outdoors' as an adjective. The correct adjective form is 'outdoor'. Use 'outdoor activities' to modify 'activities'. Suggestion: use the adjective 'outdoor' before a noun.

× The hobby I've had since childhood is reading. I grew up reading every day and I still keep this habit. Every evening I read at least a few pages of my favorite non fiction book because it helps me relax and learn something new.

✓ The hobby I've had since childhood is reading. I grew up reading every day and I still keep this habit. Every evening I read at least a few pages of my favorite non-fiction book because it helps me relax and learn something new.

'non fiction' should be hyphenated as 'non-fiction' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This is a punctuation/style correction rather than grammar per se, but it affects readability. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives like 'non-fiction' when they precede a noun.

× I always thought was doing the gymnastic and karate and I did it regularly and was very fit child.

✓ I always thought I was doing gymnastics and karate; I did them regularly and was a very fit child.

The original runs several clauses together with missing subjects and articles, causing structure problems. Adding proper subjects ('I'), correct plural forms ('gymnastics'), pronouns ('them'), and the article 'a' before 'very fit child' clarifies meaning and fixes sentence structure. Suggestion: break long clauses into shorter, clearer sentences and ensure each clause has a subject and verb.

× There is a pleasant park next to my house, so I go jogging there at the weekend because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind, while I usually read fiction in the evenings to relax and forget the stresses of a busy day.

✓ There is a pleasant park next to my house, so I go jogging there at the weekend because it helps me stay fit and clear my mind, while I usually read fiction in the evenings to relax and forget the stresses of a busy day.

No third person singular verb errors were found in this sentence. The main verbs agree with their subjects ('it helps'). No correction needed. Suggestion: none.