Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, concise (max 5 sentences), and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words. For example, combine fragmented sentences into full sentences, correct verb forms, and add frequency/time phrases naturally.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies, but my favorites are reading and hiking. For example, I usually go hiking on weekends and enjoy climbing nearby mountains. I also read in the evenings to relax, especially novels and nature guides.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and specify what you practiced and why you enjoyed it. Avoid fragments and pronunciation errors like 'chill' for 'child'.

예시: When I was a child I had several hobbies, but my favorite was practicing artistic gymnastics. I trained at a local club three times a week, which helped me build strength and discipline.

제안: Use the correct words (holiday → hobby) and a clear structure: state the hobby, explain continuity, and give specific details with linking words. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and avoid redundancy like 'actually I love it so much.'

예시: Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood: reading. I have loved books since I was small, and I still read every evening, mostly fiction and biographies, which keeps improving my vocabulary and imagination.

제안: Answer directly with correct grammar and provide a brief explanation or contrast using linking words. Avoid double negatives ('don't' + 'neither'). Offer one specific example to enrich the answer.

예시: No, I don't share hobbies with my family. For instance, my parents prefer gardening while I enjoy reading and hiking, so we usually spend our free time on different activities.

× Frequently I go. Climbing the mountain, the weekends.

✓ I frequently go hiking in the mountains on weekends.

The original text has incorrect word order and fragmented clauses. 'Frequently' should come before the verb 'go' for natural adverb placement. 'Climbing the mountain' is a noun/verb phrase that must be converted to 'hiking in the mountains' to match the hobby and pluralize 'mountain' when speaking generally; 'the weekends' should be 'on weekends' using the correct preposition and plural time expression. Combine fragments into one complete sentence for clarity.

× When I was chill I had several hobbies, but I remember that my favorite was. Practicing artist gymnastic.

✓ When I was a child I had several hobbies, and I remember that my favorite was practicing artistic gymnastics.

Multiple errors: 'chill' is a wrong word choice; it should be 'child'. The fragment 'my favorite was.' is incomplete and must be followed by the activity. 'Practicing artist gymnastic' uses incorrect adjective/noun forms—'artistic' describes the type and 'gymnastics' is the correct noun. Use past tense 'had' is fine; join fragments into one complete sentence.

× Yes, I have a holiday that I do since childhood and this is reading and actually I love it so much.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood: reading, and I really love it.

The original mixes present simple 'have' with 'since childhood' which requires present perfect 'have had' to show an action continuing from the past to now. 'Holiday' is the wrong word; 'hobby' is intended. The phrase 'this is reading' is awkward—use a colon or rephrase. 'Actually' is informal; 'really' is more natural. Also simplify for clarity.

× No, I don't have the same hobby with neither member of my family.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as any member of my family.

Several errors: 'with neither member' is incorrect negative structure (double negative) and wrong preposition. Use 'as' for comparing hobbies and 'any member' avoids double negation. Also 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to match 'same' when comparing multiple family members or activities.