Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答の構成を明確にし、文法と語順の誤りを直しましょう。最初に簡潔なトピック文（趣味と頻度）を述べ、その後理由を述べると自然です。現在形・不定詞や動名詞の使い分け（"relaxing" vs "to relax"）と時制（"when I was"は不要）を直してください。例を一つ加えると具体性が増します。

예시: My hobby is golf; I play once or twice a month. I find golfing very relaxing because being outdoors and focusing on each shot helps me forget work. For example, I often play at a nearby course on weekends with friends.

제안: 文を短く整理して意味をはっきりさせましょう。不要に長いフレーズや語順の混乱を避け、接続詞で理由や結果をつなぐと良いです。例えば「毎日遊んだ」「友達と仲良くなれた」など具体的な効果を明示してください。

예시: Yes, I played baseball every day with my friends when I was a child. It helped me build good communication skills because we practiced together and solved problems as a team.

제안: 否定から始めるのは良いですが、理由と時系列を自然な英語で整理してください。現在の趣味に至る経緯を時制に注意して簡潔に述べましょう（"after I turned 20"）。最後に結論文を入れて完結させてください。

예시: No, my hobbies have changed over time. I played baseball as a child, but after I turned 20 I started playing golf, which I still enjoy now.

제안: 現在形と過去形の使い分けを正し、意図をはっきり述べましょう。習慣や現在の状況を説明する際は簡潔な文を使い、場所や頻度の具体例を加えると良いです（"go to the baseball park"）。

예시: Yes. My father and I both enjoy watching baseball. When I was a child I often went to the baseball park with him, and I still try to go to games with him whenever I can.

× I go to golf once a month or twice a month.

✓ I go golfing once a month or twice a month.

The phrase 'go to golf' is incorrect; English uses 'go' + activity with -ing for sports/leisure (go golfing). This fixes verb form and reads naturally. Use 'go golfing' instead of 'go to golf'.

× Playing golf is relaxing and unwind for me when I was.

✓ Playing golf is relaxing and helps me unwind.

Two issues: 'unwind' needs to be in base form after 'helps' or used as 'relaxing and unwinding'. Also 'when I was' is an incomplete time clause and inappropriate here. Corrected to 'helps me unwind' to show present effect.

× Yes, when I was a child I played baseball every day with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I played baseball every day with my friends.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no tense change needed. No correction required besides keeping it as is.

× Playing baseball with my friend who is the best communication tool with my friends in elementary school I communicate with.

✓ Playing baseball with my friends was the best way to communicate with them in elementary school.

Original sentence has confusing pronoun references and word order. 'Who' refers to a person, but 'the best communication tool' is not appropriate for a person. Reword as 'the best way to communicate with them' and use plural 'friends' to match context.

× No, my hobby has been changed every time.

✓ No, my hobbies have changed many times.

Use present perfect simple 'have changed' to indicate changes up to now. 'Has been changed' is passive and incorrect here. Use plural 'hobbies' to reflect multiple hobbies. 'Every time' is unnatural; 'many times' is clearer.

× When I was a child I played baseball and after turned over 20 I began to play golf.

✓ When I was a child I played baseball, and after I turned 20 I began to play golf.

Missing subject 'I' before 'turned'. Use 'turned 20' rather than 'turned over 20' to indicate age milestone. Add comma for clarity and maintain past tense.

× So that golf is.

✓ So now I play golf.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Rephrase to a complete sentence expressing the intended meaning: 'So now I play golf.'

× Yes, I like watching baseball games and my father likes it too.

✓ Yes, I like watching baseball games, and my father likes them too.

Pronoun 'it' should refer to plural 'games', so use 'them'. Also add a comma before conjunction for clarity.

× When I was a child I often go to baseball park with him and now also I want I go.

✓ When I was a child I often went to the baseball park with him, and now I still want to go.

Tense consistency: 'go' should be past 'went' for childhood. Add article 'the' before 'baseball park'. The second clause 'now also I want I go' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'now I still want to go' to express present desire.