Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Mejora la precisión y coherencia del tiempo verbal y evita repeticiones. Por ejemplo, en lugar de decir “I usually go twice or three times a week” (que sugiere ir a algún lugar), explica claramente dónde practicas (por ejemplo, en línea o en un curso) y usa conectores para unir ideas. Además, reduce la longitud a máximo 4-5 oraciones y añade un detalle específico sobre qué proyectos o lenguajes estás aprendiendo.

예시: Yes, I enjoy coding as a hobby. I usually practice three times a week online, watching YouTube tutorials to learn Python and JavaScript. For example, I'm currently building a personal website to apply new skills and improve steadily.

제안: Buen uso del pasado y detalles personales; aún puedes mejorar añadiendo un enlace lógico y un detalle más específico (por ejemplo, con qué frecuencia jugaban o algún recuerdo concreto). Mantén la respuesta directa y no repitas ideas similares.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to play football with my friends in the square near my home almost every weekend. We also tried other sports like basketball, and I remember a local tournament we played in when I was ten, which made me enjoy being active.

제안: Evita repetir exactamente lo mismo que en la respuesta anterior; añade contraste claro usando conectores (however, although) y da un ejemplo concreto de cómo mantienes el hobby ahora (por ejemplo, watching matches, occasional games). Sé conciso y preciso.

예시: Yes, I do. Although I played football regularly as a child, I don't play as often now; however, I still follow local matches and join friends for a game once a month to keep it as a hobby.

제안: Buena comparación; mejora la naturalidad usando conectores más fluidos (whereas, while) y corrige la expresión “encounter these activities” por algo como “find these activities relaxing.” Añade un breve ejemplo de una actividad compartida si existe para mostrar matices.

예시: No, I don't. I prefer playing sports to stay fit, whereas my family finds cooking and listening to music more relaxing. Still, we sometimes cook together on weekends, which is a nice way to spend time as a family.

× I usually go twice or three times a week.

✓ I usually go two or three times a week.

The speaker used 'twice or three times' which mixes 'twice' (meaning two times) with a cardinal number form; use consistent quantifier forms. Use 'two or three times' for clarity and parallel structure.

× I enjoy watching YouTube tutorials to improve my skills and to learn programming languages.

✓ I enjoy watching YouTube tutorials to improve my skills and learn programming languages.

The phrase 'to improve my skills and to learn' repeats the infinitive marker unnecessarily. Removing the second 'to' creates a smoother, more natural sentence without changing meaning.

× When I was a child, I used to play football with my friends in a square near my home.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play football with my friends in a square near my home.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included in response to show checked sentence.)

× Additionally, we played several sports together and I loved it because it helped me to stay fit and active.

✓ Additionally, we played several sports together and I loved it because they helped me stay fit and active.

The pronoun 'it' refers back to 'sports' (plural), so it should be 'they.' Also, 'helped me to stay' is acceptable but 'helped me stay' is more natural. Correct pronoun agreement improves clarity.

× When I was a child I used to play football with my friends in a square near my home, and even though I don't play as much nowadays, I still consider football one of my hobbies.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play football with my friends in a square near my home, and even though I don't play as much nowadays, I still consider football one of my hobbies.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only a comma after the introductory clause improves readability. No tense or agreement errors found.

× No, I don't.

✓ No, I don't.

This short answer is grammatically correct and appropriate for the question; no changes needed.

× I like playing sports because I enjoy improving my fitness and physical activities.

✓ I like playing sports because I enjoy improving my fitness and staying physically active.

'Improving my fitness and physical activities' is awkward because 'physical activities' is not something one 'improves.' Use 'staying physically active' to express maintaining activity level; this fixes incorrect collocation.

× On the other hand, my family likes cooking and listening to music because they encounter these activities more relaxing.

✓ On the other hand, my family likes cooking and listening to music because they find these activities more relaxing.

'Encounter' is the wrong verb collocated with 'relaxing.' Use 'find' to express perception/opinion. Also use 'these activities' to refer back to cooking and listening to music. This corrects verb choice and clarifies meaning.