Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: remove filler words (e.g., "umm"), give one clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking phrase to expand if needed.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I particularly enjoy painting, because it helps me relax and express my ideas visually. For example, I often paint landscapes when I have free time on weekends.

제안: Make your answer direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, avoid hesitations and vague phrases like "little gap", and give a specific example or time reference to support your statement.

예시: Yes, I used to draw a lot as a child and it was my favorite activity. For instance, I used to spend hours drawing cartoons and animals after school, and I hope to take up painting again in the future.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail; avoid fillers and unclear phrasing. Mention a specific example or how often you dance to strengthen the response.

예시: Yes, dancing is a hobby I have kept since childhood. For example, I used to join school dance clubs and even now I dance at family gatherings whenever there is music.

제안: Answer directly by comparing hobbies and giving a clear contrast. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use linking words like "however" or "although" to make the relationship clear. Provide a brief example to illustrate differences or similarities.

예시: Although my brother is talented at painting, his main hobby is playing football. However, we both appreciate painting as an interest, even if he spends more time on sports than on art.

× Yes, I have umm, few hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have a few hobbies.

Use 'a few' with countable plural nouns to indicate some; 'few' without 'a' implies almost none. Say 'a few hobbies' to mean several hobbies.

× One of them is painting.

✓ One of them is painting.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present tense context; no change needed.

× I love to paint whenever I have free time.

✓ I love to paint whenever I have free time.

This sentence is correct in present tense; no changes required.

× Yes, I can say that I used to draw as well when I was a child uh, and my, it was my best activity to do so.

✓ Yes, I used to draw when I was a child, and it was my favorite activity.

Use 'used to' for past habits (correct). Remove filler 'can say that' for clarity. 'My, it was my best activity to do so' is ungrammatical and wordy; 'it was my favorite activity' is natural. 'Favorite' preferred over 'best' in this context.

× I think painting is the hobby that I used to have when I was a child and for now I have little gap, but for the future.

✓ I think painting was a hobby I had as a child. I haven't done much recently, but I plan to return to it in the future.

Mixes tenses and awkward phrasing. Use past simple 'was' or 'had' for past habits. 'I have little gap' is incorrect; express idea as 'I haven't done much recently' (present perfect) to indicate a recent interruption. Add clear future intention 'I plan to return to it in the future.'

× Despite the painting, I was very into dancing, uh, so from childhood since now I love dancing and whenever uh music starts playing I get up and dance whole time.

✓ Besides painting, I was very into dancing, and from childhood until now I have loved dancing; whenever music starts playing I get up and dance the whole time.

'Despite the painting' is awkward; 'Besides painting' or 'Aside from painting' is correct. 'From childhood since now' is incorrect; use 'from childhood until now' or 'since childhood'. Use present perfect 'have loved' to show continuing state. Add article 'the' in 'the whole time.'

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question sentence is correct; plural 'members' matches 'family members' and 'hobbies' plural is appropriate.

× I can say that my brother have uh, talent in painting but for hobbies he's doing football but we have same, uh. Love subject painting but I can't say that the same hobbies.

✓ I can say that my brother has a talent for painting, but as a hobby he plays football. We both love painting as a subject, but I can't say we have the same hobbies.

Use 'has' for third person singular (subject-verb agreement). 'Talent in painting' is better as 'a talent for painting.' 'He's doing football' is unnatural; use 'he plays football' or 'he plays football as a hobby.' 'We have same' needs article/adjective: 'we both love painting' or 'we have the same hobby' depending on meaning. Clarified to convey intended contrast between interests.