Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verbs and articles, avoid filler sounds, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Add a brief specific detail about what you read or which dramas you like. Use linking words such as 'and' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading contemporary novels, listening to indie music, and watching TV dramas, especially historical series. These activities relax me, so I usually do them on weekends or in my free time.

제안: Organize into a clear past-tense narrative and correct grammar mistakes. Use past simple consistently, reduce fillers, and combine short sentences with linking words like 'then' or 'after that'. Add a specific detail about a favorite stamp to make the story more vivid.

예시: Yes, I used to collect stamps as a child. Whenever we received a letter, I would carefully remove the stamp by soaking it in water, then dry it in the sun and store it in an album. I especially liked a blue stamp from my first foreign pen pal because it felt special and gave me a sense of achievement.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence that uses present perfect or simple present to show continuation from childhood. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., genres, movie title). Be specific about the film and why you like it, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Avoid vague phrases like 'plenty of time' and 'some'.

예시: Yes, I've enjoyed watching films since childhood, especially romance, mystery, thriller, and action genres. My favorite film is The Mummy; I loved its adventurous plot and special effects, so I watched it many times as a child and still enjoy it occasionally.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and vocabulary for film titles. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Provide a concise contrast between your hobbies and family members' hobbies, then give a clear reason why you and your sister share one hobby, with a specific example of what you like about those films (e.g., atmosphere, suspense).

예시: Not really — my family members mostly prefer outdoor activities, but my sister and I both enjoy watching horror films. We particularly like The Conjuring and Insidious because of their tense atmosphere and well-timed jump scares, which make watching them together exciting.

× Yes, I have plenty hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have plenty of hobbies.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural and needs a plural form, but 'plenty' is followed by a plural noun; the sentence originally omitted the plural marker 's'. Add 's' to 'hobby' to form 'hobbies'. Also consider using 'plenty of hobbies' for more natural phrasing.

× My hobbies including uh reading books, listening to music and watch drama.

✓ My hobbies include reading books, listening to music, and watching dramas.

When listing activities after 'hobbies', use the base verb 'include' (not 'including' without auxiliary) and keep parallel gerund forms: 'reading', 'listening', 'watching'. Also pluralize 'dramas' for consistency.

× Carry out all these uh activities makes me feel happy and relaxed and I will do my hobby during weekend or when I have free time.

✓ Carrying out all these activities makes me feel happy and relaxed, and I do my hobbies on weekends or when I have free time.

Subject-verb structure requires a noun phrase as subject: use the gerund 'Carrying out' as a subject. 'Makes' agrees with singular noun phrase. Use 'do my hobbies' (plural) and correct preposition 'on weekends'. Use present simple to state habitual actions.

× Yes, I remember I like to collect stamps back then.

✓ Yes, I remember I liked to collect stamps back then.

Referring to past habitual actions should use past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like'. 'Back then' indicates the past.

× Every time when we receive letter, I'll carefully take down, cut down the stamp and immerse it in the water to separate it.

✓ Every time we received a letter, I would carefully peel off and cut out the stamp and soak it in water to separate it.

Use past tense 'received' for past events. 'Receive letter' needs article 'a letter'. 'Take down' is incorrect collocation for removing a stamp; use 'peel off' or 'remove' and 'cut out'. 'Immerse it in the water' is unnatural; use 'soak it in water' and omit 'the'.

× Then I'll dry it under the sun.

✓ Then I would dry it under the sun.

Maintain past habitual tense with 'would' to match previous past narration. 'I'll' is future and inconsistent. 'It' correctly refers to the stamp.

× I have an album to keep these stems, uh, keep by looking at though.

✓ I had an album to keep these stamps, which I liked to look through.

Use past tense 'had' to match context. 'Stems' is a misspelling of 'stamps'. 'Keep by looking at though' is ungrammatical; use relative clause 'which I liked to look through' for clarity.

× These stamps make me feel a sense of achievement and also happy.

✓ Those stamps made me feel a sense of achievement and happiness.

Narration is about past feelings, so use past tense 'made'. 'Also happy' should be 'and happiness' or 'and happy' with parallel structure; 'made me feel... and happy' is awkward—use 'and happiness' or 'and made me happy'. Changed 'these' to 'those' to match past context but 'these' could also be acceptable depending on speaker perspective.

× I like watching movies, especially those romance, mystery, thriller and also action movies I have.

✓ I like watching movies, especially romance, mystery, thriller, and action films.

Use parallel noun forms and correct word order: list genres without 'those' and use 'films' or 'movies'. The original had an extra fragment 'I have' that is ungrammatical.

× My favorite movie is the Mummies.

✓ My favorite movie is The Mummy.

If referring to a specific film title, use the correct singular title 'The Mummy' (or plural 'The Mummies' if that is a correct title). Ensure the article 'the' and capitalization match the film's actual title.

× I watch it plenty of time when I was young up until now I still watch it some.

✓ I watched it many times when I was young, and even now I still watch it occasionally.

Use past tense 'watched' for past habitual action. 'Plenty of time' is unidiomatic; use 'many times'. Connect clauses with a comma and conjunction. 'I still watch it some' is ungrammatical; use 'occasionally' or 'sometimes'.

× I don't think so, but my sister love to watch a haunted movie with me.

✓ I don't think so, but my sister loves to watch haunted movies with me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'sister' is singular, so verb should be 'loves'. Use plural 'haunted movies' for natural phrasing or 'a haunted movie' but then adjust verb accordingly.

× We particularly love uh The Conjuring series and also the Insinu Insidious series because the plot is full of umm.

✓ We particularly love The Conjuring series and the Insidious series because their plots are full of suspense.

Fix titles ('Insinu Insidious' is incorrect). Use plural possessive 'their plots' for series (or 'the plot' if referring to one) and provide a clear adjective like 'suspenseful' instead of trailing 'umm'.

× The plot is interesting and also the jump scares scene is.

✓ The plots are interesting, and the jump-scare scenes are effective.

Complete the sentence: provide a full predicate after 'is'. Use plural 'plots' or singular consistently, and 'jump-scare scenes' is the correct noun phrase; 'are effective' completes the thought.