Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, correct small grammar errors, and make the answer more concise with clearer linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two brief, specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'first' and 'also'). Avoid repeating words like 'helps' too many times.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading in my spare time. First, I read personal development books because they give me practical strategies and new perspectives on work and relationships. Also, I like fiction because a well-told story helps me relax and improves my mood after a busy day.

제안: Make the conditional structure grammatically correct and shorten the response. Clearly state your preference and then give a concise reason using linking words like 'however' or 'otherwise'. Use specific examples of online sources.

예시: It depends on the situation. I prefer paper books when I can access them because I like the feel and find it easier to focus; however, if a paper copy is unavailable, I read on my tablet or from online articles and e-magazines for convenience.

제안: Eliminate repetitions and slightly improve vocabulary and precision. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific categories with brief reasons, using linking words like 'for example' and 'on the other hand'.

예시: I read carefully when the information could have consequences, for example with official contracts, academic papers, or medication instructions because mistakes can be costly. On the other hand, I skim casual content like social media posts or personal emails since they rarely have serious implications.

× I usually prefer reading personal development and fictional books.

✓ I usually prefer reading personal development and fiction books.

'Fictional books' is an incorrect collocation; use 'fiction books' or 'fiction' as a noun. Also 'personal development' functions as a noun phrase and pairs with 'books' without 'and' in between types; 'personal development and fiction books' is clearer.

× Personal development books helps me to gain valuable perspective in life whereas fictional books helps me to unwind or hear a great story which helps me to uplift my mood.

✓ Personal development books help me gain valuable perspectives in life, whereas fiction books help me unwind or enjoy a great story that uplifts my mood.

Plural subject 'books' requires plural verb 'help' not 'helps'. 'Perspective' is countable in this context, so 'perspectives' is more natural. 'Fictional books' is better as 'fiction books' or 'fiction'. 'Uplift my mood' should be 'uplifts my mood' when referring to 'a story', so rephrase to maintain agreement and clarity.

× It actually depends on my situation.

✓ It actually depends on the situation.

This sentence is acceptable, but 'my situation' is slightly odd in this general question; 'the situation' is more natural. This is a suggestion to improve register rather than a strict grammatical error.

× If I had the accessibility of paper books, then I prefer to read from the paper books, but I do not have any access to new books, then I usually prefer learning from online platforms, reading articles and magazine.

✓ If I have access to paper books, I prefer to read them; if I do not have access to new books, I usually learn from online platforms, reading articles and magazines.

Use present tense 'have' to match habitual preference. 'Accessibility of paper books' is unnatural; use 'access to paper books'. 'Read from the paper books' should be 'read them' or 'read paper books'. Parallel clauses must be connected correctly; avoid repeating 'then'. 'Magazine' should be plural 'magazines' when listed with 'articles'.

× So yeah, it varies from the situation.

✓ So yeah, it varies depending on the situation.

'From the situation' is not the correct prepositional phrase here; use 'depending on the situation' or 'from situation to situation'. This corrects preposition and article usage for natural English.

× I need to read carefully when the information is important or potentially risky, for instance with official documents, academics, and any any sort of medications.

✓ I need to read carefully when the information is important or potentially risky, for instance with official documents, academic materials, and any sort of medication.

'Academics' as a noun is ambiguous; 'academic materials' is clearer. 'Any any' is a repetition error; remove duplicate. 'Medications' can be uncountable in this context, so 'medication' or 'medications' depending on meaning; 'any sort of medication' is natural. 'With' is acceptable, but 'such as' is also possible.

× Conversely, I don't need to read carefully when the material is not realistic, like social media and the e-mail from my friends or any fictional stories that would not affect me.

✓ Conversely, I don't need to read carefully when the material is not factual, such as social media posts, emails from my friends, or fictional stories that will not affect me.

'Not realistic' is better expressed as 'not factual' in this context. 'Social media' should be 'social media posts' for clarity. 'The e-mail from my friends' should be plural 'emails from my friends' and without 'the'. 'Would not affect me' can be 'will not affect me' to match the general present/future implication.