Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and short reason), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors (e.g. "I'm not like that person who loves to read anything" → incorrect relative clause). Use correct tense and articles.

예시: I don't consider myself an avid reader, but recently I've started reading more because I want to improve my knowledge. For example, I often read articles about psychology and technology to learn new ideas and improve my thinking.

제안: Give a clear preference with one or two specific reasons and use smoother linking words. Correct repetition and phrasing (avoid "it it"), and use plural/singular correctly ("on my mobile phone or laptop").

예시: I prefer reading on a screen because it's more convenient and portable. For example, I can read articles on my phone during my commute, whereas carrying paper newspapers is less practical.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific examples. Remove hesitations and fix grammar: use concise phrases like "I read carefully when..." and connect ideas with linking words (for example, "because").

예시: I read carefully when the material is important or useful for my work or studies because I need to understand details. For instance, I read contracts and academic articles thoroughly, but I skim social media posts or casual emails.

제안: Give a clear main sentence stating your general preference and then explain with specific examples. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences; use linking words such as "however" or "for example."

예시: I use both methods depending on the text: I usually scan social media and headlines for quick information, however I do detailed reading for newspapers or academic articles when I need full understanding.

× Well, I'm not like that person, which is love to read anything, but in the recent times I realized that I need to read a lot and that's why I read every.

✓ Well, I'm not the kind of person who loves to read everything, but recently I realized that I need to read more, and that's why I read often.

The original sentence misuses the relative pronoun 'which' for people and the pronoun/form 'that person' is awkward; use 'the kind of person who'. 'Love' should be 'loves' to agree with 'who' (third person singular). 'Anything' is too broad here; 'everything' or 'a lot' fits better. 'In the recent times' is unnatural; use 'recently'. 'Read every' is incomplete; replace with 'read often' or 'read regularly'. Suggestions: use 'the kind of person who', ensure subject-verb agreement ('loves'), and choose clearer adverbs ('recently', 'often').

× I read the those things, which is really, uh, enhance my cognitive knowledge.

✓ I read those things that really enhance my knowledge.

The phrase 'the those' is incorrect; choose either 'the' or 'those' (use 'those'). Use 'that' instead of 'which' for restrictive clauses in informal speech is acceptable, or 'which' with a comma for nonrestrictive clauses; here no comma is needed. 'Is really enhance' mixes forms: use 'really enhance' (plural verb) to match 'things'. 'Cognitive knowledge' is wordy; 'knowledge' is clearer. Suggestion: remove redundant article, correct verb agreement, and simplify vocabulary.

× Well, in that case I prefer on screen because it is it is more convenient and it it we can carry through my mobile phone or laptops.

✓ Well, in that case I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient and we can carry it on my mobile phone or laptop.

Use 'reading on a screen' or 'on a screen' rather than 'prefer on screen'. 'Carry through my mobile phone or laptops' is incorrect: use 'carry it on my mobile phone or laptop' (singular consistency). Remove repeated words. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'on' for devices and keep nouns consistent in number.

× And on the other hand paper newspaper is not carryable though some people like newspaper.

✓ On the other hand, paper newspapers are not easy to carry, though some people like newspapers.

'Paper newspaper' is awkward; pluralize to 'paper newspapers' to match general statement and change verb phrase to 'are not easy to carry'. 'Newspaper' at end should be plural 'newspapers' for general reference. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and a natural adjective phrase 'easy to carry'.

× Uh, I really don't know the answer, but if I really answer to your question, I would like to say that if I when I read to some something which is productive or which is important to for me that is really carefully read, otherwise it is not essential.

✓ I don't really know the answer, but if I had to answer your question, I would say that when I read something productive or important to me, I read it very carefully; otherwise it is not essential.

Original has redundancy ('really' repeated), incorrect 'answer to your question' (use 'answer your question' or 'had to answer'), and mixed tense. 'If I when I read to some something' is ungrammatical; use 'when I read something'. 'Which is productive or which is important to for me' should be 'productive or important to me'. 'That is really carefully read' is awkward; use 'I read it very carefully'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, fix verb placement, remove redundant words, and ensure proper object pronoun usage ('it').

× Well, I prefer both. It depends on which type of thing I read Yeah, for scanning and the like social media and social media news and others and something like that and just scanning and too detailed reading. I when I read any newspapers or papers, which is.

✓ Well, I prefer both. It depends on the type of material I am reading. For scanning, I do that for social media, news, and similar content; for detailed reading, I reserve that for newspapers or academic papers.

The original is fragmented and has poor preposition and article use. 'Which type of thing I read' should be 'the type of material I am reading'. 'Social media news and others' is unclear; rephrase as 'social media, news, and similar content'. 'I when I read any newspapers or papers, which is.' is an incomplete sentence; complete thought by specifying detailed reading is for newspapers or academic papers. Suggestions: restructure into clear sentences, use 'for' to indicate purpose, and avoid sentence fragments.