Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변 구조는 주제문이 있고 추가 설명을 제공한 점에서 기본 요건을 충족합니다. 그러나 음음(um) 같은 음성 충동이 많고 문장이 길어져 반복적이며 결론이 없이 끝난 점을 개선해야 합니다. 구체적으로: 1) 망설임 표현(uh, um)을 줄이고 2) 문장을 간결하게 나누어 핵심을 먼저 말한 뒤 한두 문장으로 구체적 정보를 덧붙이세요(예: 어떤 책이거나 어떤 주제가 흥미로운지). 3) 마지막에는 간단한 마무리 문장을 넣어 답변을 완결하세요.

예시: Yes, I love reading. Recently I prefer nonfiction, especially books about colonialism and Korean contemporary art from the 1980s and 1990s. These topics help me with my field of study and give me historical context. For example, a recent book examined how art responded to political changes, which I found very insightful.

제안: 주제에 명확히 답했고 개인적 이유를 들었으나 문법 오류(‘lay your sight’, ‘saw seen’)와 어색한 표현 때문에 자연성이 떨어집니다. 개선 방법: 1) 정확한 어휘 사용(예: rest your eyes, look away from screens), 2) 중복 표현 제거(‘I do read sometimes’ 대신 ‘I sometimes read on screens’), 3) 문장 흐름을 위해 연결어 사용(However, for longer texts ...).

예시: I prefer reading on paper because it feels more relaxing and helps me rest my eyes after long screen time. However, I sometimes read on my tablet when I’m traveling or need quick access to articles.

제안: 핵심은 잘 전달되었지만 망설임과 어색한 문장구조(‘very that contains’)가 점수를 깎습니다. 개선 방법: 1) 망설임 제거, 2) ‘for instance’ 뒤에 구체적 예시 한두 개를 명확히 제시, 3) 문장을 나눠 읽기 상황과 예시를 분리하세요.

예시: I read carefully when the material is long or academic, such as journal articles or research papers. For example, when I study an article about post-colonial theory, I take notes and read it slowly to understand the arguments.

제안: 의도를 잘 설명했지만 표현 오류(‘fast writer’ 불필요, ‘read by detail by detail’ 어색)와 문장 연결 문제 때문에 명료성이 낮습니다. 개선 방법: 1) 정확한 표현 사용(‘fast reader’), 2) 간결하게 이유와 방법 제시(예: I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand arguments), 3) 연결어로 흐름 개선(However, when I review ...).

예시: I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand complex arguments for my graduate studies. I'm not a fast reader, so I read slowly and take notes, then review the text later to catch any points I missed.

× I think it's a very therapeutic experience that you can like lay your sight and your eyes outside from the media screens that are so frequently saw seen these days.

✓ I think it's a very therapeutic experience that you can, like, take your sight and your eyes away from the media screens that are seen so frequently these days.

The phrase 'lay your sight and your eyes outside from' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect verbs and word order. Use 'take ... away from' to express removing attention from screens. 'Like' as a filler should be set off with commas. 'So frequently saw seen' mixes tenses and redundant words; correct to 'seen so frequently' to form a past-participial adjective phrase modifying 'screens'. Suggestion: use 'take your eyes away from' or 'look away from' and place filler words with commas.

× I do read sometimes on screens, but I try to avoid it as well.

✓ I sometimes read on screens, but I try to avoid it as well.

Word order 'do read sometimes' is awkward in affirmative statements; 'do' is unnecessary. Place adverb 'sometimes' before the main verb for natural English. This is not a tense error per se but involves incorrect auxiliary use; correction simplifies to correct present tense usage. Suggestion: use 'sometimes read' for natural word order.

× I tend to read carefully when I am dealing with, uh, lengthy texts and also texts that are for academics, uh, for instance papers that are seen in journals and very that contains a lot of knowledgeable insight of the field.

✓ I tend to read carefully when I am dealing with lengthy texts, especially academic texts, for instance, papers published in journals that contain a lot of insight into the field.

The original sentence has redundant fillers and incorrect phrase order ('texts that are for academics'), wrong verb agreement ('that contains' should match plural 'papers'), and awkward modifiers ('knowledgeable insight of the field'). Use 'academic texts' and 'papers published in journals' and ensure plural agreement with 'contain' and correct preposition 'insight into the field'. Suggestion: remove filler words, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations like 'insight into' and 'published in journals'.

× I wish I could be a fast writer and can scan all the texts in a very fast kind of way.

✓ I wish I could be a fast reader and be able to scan all the texts very quickly.

The original mixes 'wish' with incompatible modal constructions and uses 'writer' instead of 'reader' given context. After 'I wish I could', use a single modal construction; avoid combining 'could' with 'can'. Use adverb 'quickly' rather than awkward phrase 'in a very fast kind of way'. Suggestion: use 'I wish I could' followed by an appropriate capacity verb and 'be able to' if needed, and use correct nouns (reader vs writer).

× I've got to know that these days when I'm studying in Graduate School, I like to read by detail by detail, and I come back to the missing points afterwards.

✓ I've learned that these days, while I'm studying in graduate school, I prefer to read in detail and then come back to any points I missed afterwards.

'I've got to know' is non-idiomatic; use 'I've learned' or 'I've come to realize'. 'Graduate School' should be lowercase 'graduate school' unless a proper noun. 'Read by detail by detail' is incorrect; use 'read in detail'. 'Missing points' is better as 'points I missed'. Tense and aspect adjusted to present perfect for learned knowledge and present preference. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions ('I've learned', 'read in detail'), correct capitalization, and clear phrasing for reviewing missed points.