Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 불필요한 중복과 망설임을 줄이세요. 예: 주제문으로 바로 시작한 뒤 구체적 예시와 이유를 한두 문장으로 연결하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘umm’, ‘uh’ 같은 말버릇을 줄이고 책 제목과 작가 이름은 정확히 말하세요. (예: Brian Greene)

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially popular science books about physics. For example, I liked Cosmos and The Elegant Universe by Brian Greene because they explain complex concepts in a clear and engaging way, which helped me feel I understand more about the universe.

제안: 중복 표현과 문법 오류를 줄이고 이유를 간결하게 연결하세요. ‘there are so many information(s)’ 같은 표현은 ‘there is a lot of information’로 고치고, 이유를 두세 요소로 정리해 말하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because screens distract me with notifications and other websites. Also, printed books help me focus and remember details better, so I usually choose paper when I want to concentrate.

제안: 문장을 더 간결하고 정확하게 구성하세요. 'the moment that' 대신 ‘I need to read carefully when…’로 시작하고, 예시(시험, 교과서)와 대비(잡지)는 명확한 연결어로 나누어 표현하면 좋습니다.

예시: I need to read carefully when I'm studying for a test or reading a textbook because I have to understand details and remember facts. However, I skim magazines or light articles for general ideas and enjoyment, so I don't read them thoroughly.

제안: 문장 유창성과 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 'more fit on me'는 어색하므로 'suits me better' 등으로 바꾸고, 이유를 명확한 예로 뒷받침하세요. 반복·망설임을 줄이면 점수가 올라갑니다.

예시: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the writer's intentions and subtle arguments. For example, when I read academic essays slowly, I can notice assumptions and evidence that I would miss if I skimmed.

× I do like reading, especially about umm, physical physics things.

✓ I like reading, especially about physics.

Remove redundant words and filler 'umm'; 'physical physics things' is redundant and ungrammatical—use the noun 'physics'. This makes the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× For example Cosmos or Elegant Universe from Brian Green.

✓ For example, Cosmos or The Elegant Universe by Brian Greene.

Incorrect title formatting and author name spelling. Use definite article for book titles where appropriate and preposition 'by' for authors. Correct spelling: 'Greene'. Also add comma after 'For example' for clarity.

× I really like to read it.

✓ I really like reading it.

Using the gerund 'reading' fits general preference statements better than the infinitive 'to read'. Maintain consistency with previous present-tense statements.

× Uh, when I'm reading it, I think I can understand everything about the universe.

✓ When I read it, I feel I can understand a lot about the universe.

Present simple or present continuous can be used, but 'I think I can understand everything' is exaggerated and awkward; 'I feel I can understand a lot' is more natural. 'When I'm reading it' to 'When I read it' suits habitual actions.

× Personally, I do not prefer to read on a screen because it distracts me a lot while I'm using a computer because there are so many information, not only the the text of readings, there are so many informations.

✓ Personally, I prefer not to read on a screen because it distracts me when I use a computer; there is a lot of information besides the text.

Multiple issues: awkward structure and repetition. 'Prefer not to' is more natural than 'do not prefer to'. 'It distracts me when I use a computer' avoids tense clash. 'Information' is uncountable so use 'a lot of information' not 'informations'. Removed duplicate 'the the' and simplified.

× That's why I don't like it.

✓ That's why I don't like reading on screens.

Clarify the pronoun 'it' to refer to 'reading on a screen' for clarity. Grammatically original sentence is acceptable but specificity improves cohesion.

× Umm, the moment that I read something carefully is when I'm having a test or when I'm reading, uh, paper or textbook that I at this time, I need to read it very carefully.

✓ I read something carefully when I have a test or when I'm studying a paper or textbook; at those times I need to read very carefully.

Original has word order and redundancy problems. Use 'when I have a test' for habitual situations. 'Paper or textbook' should be 'a paper or a textbook' or 'a paper or textbook' and 'at those times' clarifies reference. Simplify and fix tense consistency.

× But when I'm reading articles, when I'm reading just magazine, I don't need to read very carefully.

✓ But when I'm reading articles or magazines, I don't need to read very carefully.

Use plural 'magazines' to match 'articles' and simplify repetition. 'Just magazine' is ungrammatical; use 'magazines' or 'a magazine' depending on meaning.

× I just read it.

✓ I just skim through them.

'I just read it' is vague and mismatches plural 'articles/magazines'; 'skim through them' more accurately describes casual reading. Adjust pronoun to plural.

× In my opinion, I think detailed, uh, reading is more fit on me because while you read something very detailed, you can find the hidden intention of the writers.

✓ In my opinion, detailed reading suits me better because when you read something in detail, you can find the writers' hidden intentions.

Use 'suits me better' instead of 'more fit on me'. 'Read something very detailed' is incorrect — use 'read something in detail'. 'Intention of the writers' should be 'writers' intentions' (possessive and plural).

× And it's very, uh, nice to do that because when you read something very quickly, you can, you never find.

✓ And it's nice because when you read something very quickly, you often don't find them.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence completion issues. 'You never find' is incomplete; 'you often don't find them' completes the idea and agrees with plural 'intentions'. Also remove unnecessary filler 'uh'.