Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "love walking a lot" and "I love walking"). Use clearer phrasing: "I walk regularly to stay active" instead of "taking it as my own habit".

예시: I walk regularly to stay active. For example, I often walk in the park near my house because it’s pleasant and I enjoy meeting neighbours there.

제안: Open with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace awkward phrases like "eating and dining" and "most memorable stories" with concise descriptions. Limit to 2–4 sentences and give one specific memory for impact.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I often walked in the local park with my parents because it was a family bonding time. After our walks we usually treated ourselves to a meal at a nearby restaurant, which is one of my fondest childhood memories.

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: use plural agreement and clearer linking words. Provide 2–3 specific reasons (e.g. fresh air, safe paths, facilities) and briefly explain each. Avoid repeating "parks" and "amusement parks" awkwardly.

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer fresh air and safe paths for exercise. In addition, parks often have facilities and activities for families, and food stalls nearby make it convenient to relax afterwards.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the place, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. "because", "so"). Avoid repeating "lots of" and correct phrasing like "lots of foods" to "many food stalls". Mention a brief example of an activity you would enjoy.

예시: I would choose to take a long walk in an amusement park because it has many activities and friendly places to sit. For example, I could stroll between rides with friends and stop at food stalls for snacks.

제안: Use a clear past-time reference and correct grammar: say "Recently I visited..." or "Last time I went for a walk I visited..." Keep sentences shorter and correct verb forms ("my day off comes" → "on my days off I usually"; "eating" → "eat"). Give one specific recent detail rather than general habit to answer the question directly.

예시: Recently I visited the park near my house. On my day off I took a long walk there and sat on a bench with friends, where we ate hot dogs and sandwiches.

× It's because I'm taking it as my own habit to make myself active all the time.

✓ It's because I take it as my habit to keep myself active all the time.

The phrase 'I'm taking it as my own habit' incorrectly uses the present continuous 'taking' for a habitual situation. Use simple present 'take' or 'I have made it a habit' to describe habits. Suggestion: use simple present for habits or a perfect construction ('I have made it a habit').

× I love walking in the parks.

✓ I love walking in parks.

The definite article 'the' before 'parks' implies specific parks already known; general preference uses zero article: 'in parks'. Remove 'the' for general statements.

× Mostly it's because I used to meet different people and I just love the place, especially near our house.

✓ Mostly it's because I used to meet different people, and I just love the place near our house.

Comma and phrasing: 'especially near our house' should clearly modify 'the place' and punctuation should separate clauses. Also ensure consistent tense: 'used to meet' (past habit) and 'I just love' (present) are acceptable together because one refers to past habit and one to current feeling.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The preposition 'to have a walk' is less natural. Use 'for a walk' or 'go out for a walk'. This is an issue with collocation and article use; 'for a walk' is the standard phrasing.

× I really like walking with them because this is our way of bonding together.

✓ I really liked walking with them because it was our way of bonding together.

The speaker refers to a past routine ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in past tense: 'liked' and 'was'. Mixing past context with present tense 'like' creates a tense inconsistency.

× And after walking, we usually go to restaurants, eating and dining.

✓ And after walking, we usually go to restaurants to eat.

'Eating and dining' is redundant and awkward. Use the infinitive purpose structure 'to eat' after 'go to restaurants' or simply 'we usually eat at restaurants'. Avoid gerund list here.

× I believe that parks is the most convenient place to walk.

✓ I believe that parks are the most convenient places to walk.

Plural subject 'parks' requires plural verb 'are' and plural noun 'places'. The original has singular predicate 'the most convenient place' which mismatches number.

× It's because there's lots of recreational activities going on in the parks and there are sometimes an amusement parks and of course there's lots of food that you can find.

✓ It's because there are lots of recreational activities in parks; sometimes there is an amusement park, and of course there is lots of food to be found.

Multiple issues: 'there's' is singular contraction used with plural 'lots of activities' — use 'there are'. 'an amusement parks' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'an amusement park' or 'amusement parks'. Also 'that you can find' is wordy; 'to be found' or 'you can find' is clearer. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct article+noun number.

× I really like to walk in amusement parks.

✓ I really like to walk in amusement parks.

This sentence is acceptable but check context consistency: if speaking generally, 'amusement parks' is fine. No correction needed; included for completeness.

× It's because there's lots of activities happening right there and there are lots of foods and stalls that I can go to whenever I want to buy something.

✓ It's because there are lots of activities happening there, and there are many food stalls that I can visit whenever I want to buy something.

Use 'there are' with plural noun 'activities'. 'Lots of foods' is unnatural; use 'many food stalls' or 'lots of food stalls'. Replace 'go to' with 'visit' for clarity.

× And most of the time this is the place to go with my friends.

✓ And most of the time this is the place to go with my friends.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable in general present tense describing habitual action. No correction needed.

× Last time I just visited the park near our house and it's very amusing to me because there's lots of activities right there and every time my day off come I usually take a long walk in the park and eating hot dogs and sandwiches on the bench with my friends.

✓ Last time I visited the park near our house, and it was very enjoyable because there were lots of activities there. Whenever I have a day off, I usually take a long walk in the park and eat hot dogs and sandwiches on a bench with my friends.

Multiple problems: 'Last time I just visited' — 'just' is unnecessary; past event uses 'visited' and follow-up comment should be past: 'it was very enjoyable' and 'there were'. 'Every time my day off come' has subject-verb agreement and number errors; use 'Whenever I have a day off'. 'and eating' should be parallel with 'take' – use infinitive or simple present/past: 'and eat'. Also 'on the bench' -> 'on a bench' for natural phrasing.