Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence about how often you walk, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar (work → walk, near my near my house) and natural phrasing (in the afternoon). Keep to under five sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I walk almost every day. I usually stroll along the river in the park near my house, and in the afternoons I enjoy sitting in the sunlight and watching people pass by.

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and add specific details about frequency and activities. Use correct past tense (went, used to) and connect ideas with linking words like "often" or "sometimes." Avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: Yes, I often went outside to play when I was a child. For example, I used to go out with my friends every evening to play games in the street, and sometimes at weekends we explored the nearby park.

제안: Begin with a clear general statement, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (for example, because, and, moreover). Avoid unclear phrases ("a series saw") and unnecessary repetition.

예시: People like to walk in parks because the scenery is pleasant and the air is fresh. For example, parks usually have trees and ponds that make walking relaxing, and they are free and safe places for families and joggers.

제안: Use a clear conditional sentence with consistent tense (would like / would want). Be specific about location and reasons, and reduce fillers (uh). Keep it within a few sentences and use linking words (because, so).

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk across a desert for a week because I want to see its unique landscapes and test my endurance. It would be a personal challenge and a chance to disconnect from daily life.

제안: Answer with a clear past-tense topic sentence and add one or two specific observations. Correct vocabulary (walk, people) and grammar (many people, I saw many different people). Remove repetition and keep sentences concise.

예시: I went for a walk around the lake last Sunday. I saw many different people exercising and I observed several wild birds near the reeds.

× Yes, I work a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The examiner's question is 'Do you walk a lot?' The student's reply 'I work a lot' changes the meaning and uses present simple correctly but does not answer the question. Change to 'I walk a lot' to match the verb and meaning. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× I always walk along the river in the park near my near my house.

✓ I always walk along the river in the park near my house.

There is a repeated phrase 'near my near my house' which is a redundancy and likely a typing error. Remove the duplicate to make a grammatically correct present simple sentence describing a habitual action.

× After in the afternoon I enjoy the sunlight.

✓ In the afternoon I enjoy the sunlight.

The phrase 'After in the afternoon' mixes two time expressions. Use only 'In the afternoon' to indicate when the action happens. Place the time expression at the beginning of the sentence for clarity.

× Yes, I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

This sentence is correct as a short answer to 'Did you often go outside...' and uses past simple appropriately. No change needed.

× When I was a child. I go out.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go out.

The original has a sentence fragment and an incorrect tense 'I go out' for past habitual action. Use 'When I was a child, I used to go out' to express past habitual action, or 'I went out' as past simple. Also combine into one sentence with a comma.

× I went out to have work every night with my friends.

✓ I went out to have fun every night with my friends.

The phrase 'have work' is unidiomatic here. Context suggests 'have fun' or 'go for a walk'. Replace 'work' with 'fun' to match the intended meaning. The past simple 'went out' correctly matches 'when I was a child.'

× Sometimes in the weekend I want to.

✓ Sometimes at the weekend I wanted to.

Time preposition: use 'at the weekend' (British) or 'on the weekend' (American). The original 'I want to' conflicts with the past context; change to past 'I wanted to' to match earlier past tense. Also finish the idea (e.g., 'I wanted to') or add an activity.

× Because a series saw is beautiful, it's beautiful and the air is fresh in the park and park is free to public.

✓ Because the scenery is beautiful, the air is fresh in the park, and the park is free to the public.

Multiple issues: 'a series saw' is garbled—use 'the scenery.' Use definite article 'the park' and correct preposition 'free to the public.' Use commas to separate items in a list and parallel structure for clarity.

× When? When?

✓ (No correction needed if the student is asking for clarification.)

Repeating 'When? When?' likely signals the student asking for clarification. It's not a grammatical error but a conversational interjection. No rewrite required unless a substantive answer is intended.

× Uh, if I had a chance, I wanted to take a long week in the desert, uh, because I wanted to see different, uh, views and, uh, I want to challenge myself.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the desert because I would like to see different views and challenge myself.

This conditional sentence should use the second conditional: 'If I had the chance, I would...' Also 'long week' is incorrect for walking—use 'long walk.' Keep tense and modal verbs consistent: use 'would like' for polite desire and 'challenge myself' without extra modal for parallel structure.

× I went for work around the lake last Sunday.

✓ I went for a walk around the lake last Sunday.

The phrase 'went for work' is incorrect; use 'went for a walk' to describe the activity. Past simple 'went' with 'last Sunday' is correct.

× I I saw a many many different peoples and I observed the wild birds.

✓ I saw many different people and observed wild birds.

Remove the duplicated 'I' and the article 'a' before 'many' (incorrect). 'Peoples' is incorrect in this context; use 'people.' Also articles before 'wild birds' are unnecessary in general statements. Keep past tense 'saw' and 'observed.'