Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer first, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. "setting all all the time"). Use linking words like "so" or "because" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often, especially in the evenings. I usually go for a 30–40 minute walk after work because it helps me unwind and keeps me active, so I sleep better at night.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add specific examples and correct tense/use. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear references ("we takes"). Use a linking word like "so" or "and then" to show sequence.

예시: Yes, I often went outside as a child. For example, I played football with my neighbors and sometimes walked several kilometers to visit friends, and this active habit continued until I started university.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition ("breeze" repeated). Use precise vocabulary ("calming" not "frashing") and give one or two specific benefits with a linking phrase such as "for example" or "because".

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer calm surroundings and fresh air. For example, a morning walk can be energizing and reduce stress, while the greenery and birdsong make the experience peaceful.

제안: Start with a clear statement naming the place, then give two specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect claims (Central Park is not the biggest in the world) and complete your final sentence. Use linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: I would like to walk in Central Park in New York because it has extensive green spaces and diverse wildlife. For instance, strolling by the reservoir or through the Ramble would be peaceful and offer good chances to see birds and escape city noise.

제안: This answer is clear and concise. To improve, add one linking phrase and a brief reason or detail (e.g. how long it takes or how you feel after). Keep sentences well structured.

예시: Lately I have been walking around my neighborhood to the metro station, a route of about four to five kilometers. It takes me around 45 minutes and helps me clear my mind before work.

× Yes I do, I work a lot especially at night when I finish everything in my job and my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I do. I work a lot, especially at night when I finish my tasks at work and my hobbies.

Run-on sentence and unclear noun usage. Separate clauses into two sentences and replace 'everything in my job and my hobbies' with 'tasks at work and my hobbies' for clarity. Add commas after introductory elements.

× I like to go for a walk at night to unwind for the day and have an active body at the end of the day, especially after setting all all the time.

✓ I like to go for a walk at night to unwind after the day and to keep my body active, especially after being busy all the time.

Awkward phrase 'unwind for the day' and redundant repetition 'all all'. Use 'after the day' -> 'after the day' or better 'after the day' changed to 'after the day' corrected to 'after the day' -> simplified to 'after the day'. Replace 'have an active body at the end of the day' with 'to keep my body active'. Use 'being busy all the time' to express continuous activity.

× Back in the day when I was younger, I was very active.

✓ Back in the day when I was younger, I was very active.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present to note: no change needed. It uses past tense appropriately.

× I tended to go out to play with my neighbors or my schoolmates.

✓ I tended to go out and play with my neighbors or schoolmates.

Use 'go out and play' rather than 'go out to play' for natural collocation. 'My schoolmates' -> 'schoolmates' is sufficient; sentence structure tightened.

× Just playing outside in the street, go for a walk or a run, especially for long walks.

✓ I would just play outside in the street, or go for a walk or a run, often taking long walks.

Original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Add subject 'I would' and rephrase to show frequency and natural collocation.

× It continues till I went to the university we takes.

✓ It continued until I went to university.

Incorrect tense and agreement: 'continues' (present) conflicts with 'I went' (past). Use past 'continued'. Remove 'the' before 'university' in general statements and remove 'we takes' which is ungrammatical; simplify to 'I went to university.'

× I believe people like to work on parks because parks are very calm.

✓ I believe people like to walk in parks because parks are very calm.

Wrong verb 'work' should be 'walk' given context. Use preposition 'in' with 'parks' rather than 'on'.

× You are surrounded by nature and wildlife.

✓ You are surrounded by nature and wildlife.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. 'Nature and wildlife' are used appropriately without articles.

× The breeze, especially in the morning, early in the morning or late at night, the breeze is very frashing and calming and relaxing, especially after a long day or at the beginning of the day to give you power and energy to go.

✓ The breeze, especially early in the morning or late at night, is very refreshing, calming and relaxing, especially after a long day or at the start of the day to give you energy.

Spelling error 'frashing' -> 'refreshing'. Remove redundant phrase 'in the morning, early in the morning' and duplicate 'the breeze'. 'Power and energy to go' is awkward; use 'energy' only. Simplify for clarity and fluency.

× I would like to go for a walk in Central Park, New York Central Park has been known as the biggest park in the world It has different kinds of wildlife and also lots of greenery space The breeze there and the car and the atmosphere is very calming and relaxing and.

✓ I would like to go for a walk in Central Park, New York. Central Park is known as one of the largest urban parks in the world. It has many kinds of wildlife and large green spaces. The breeze there and the atmosphere are very calming and relaxing.

Run-on sentence with missing punctuation. Use period to separate sentences. 'Has been known as the biggest park in the world' is inaccurate and unnatural; change to 'one of the largest urban parks'. 'Greenery space' -> 'green spaces'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the breeze and the atmosphere are'. Remove stray 'car' and trailing 'and'.

× Lately I've been going for a walk around my home, especially to the metro station.

✓ Lately I've been going for walks around my home, especially to the metro station.

Use plural 'walks' for habitual action. 'Around my home, especially to the metro station' is acceptable; transform 'a walk' to 'walks' to match 'lately I've been' habitual present perfect continuous.

× The distance is about four to five kilometers.

✓ The distance is about four or five kilometers.

Use 'four or five kilometers' or 'about four to five kilometers' — both are acceptable; prefer 'four or five kilometers' for clarity. Original is understandable but slight stylistic improvement suggested.