Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundant phrases. Use one or two supporting details linked logically. Fix subject-verb agreement and inappropriate word choices (e.g., ‘physique’ ok but ‘do a lot of work’ is wrong).

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I enjoy regular exercise because it helps me stay fit and reduces stress, so I usually walk for about 45 minutes every day.

제안: Give a clear past-focused topic sentence and specific supporting details. Correct past tense and pronoun errors, remove hesitations and redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks with my grandparents when I was a child because they liked to exercise despite their age. We usually walked around our village two or three times a week, which I remember fondly.

제안: Start with a direct answer and give two clear reasons connected with linking words. Avoid filler words and incorrect plural/verb forms. Use more natural vocabulary (e.g., 'enjoy nature', 'meet like-minded people', 'socialise').

예시: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy nature and fresh air, and they often meet like-minded people, which makes walking a pleasant social activity.

제안: Use the correct conditional form and be concise. Give a clear reason and one detail about what you would do or enjoy there. Avoid repetition like 'that's why I like it very much.'

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because I love the sea view and the calming sound of waves — it helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Use simple past or present perfect for recent actions and correct article/pronoun usage. Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add specifics about frequency and company, using linking words like 'so' appropriately. Remove future tense errors ('I'll') when describing habitual past/present.

예시: Recently I have been walking in a small park near my house. I usually go there when I have time because many of my friends walk there daily, so we meet and exercise together.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

Using 'do' in affirmative present simple is unnecessary and sounds emphatic; use the plain present simple 'I walk a lot' for a natural answer.

× I'm a kind of guy who like always doing exercise.

✓ I'm the kind of guy who always likes to exercise.

Word order and form are incorrect: 'a kind of guy' should be 'the kind of guy' for a general characteristic; 'like always doing' should be 'always likes to' (verb agrees with 'who' referring to 'guy'). Use 'likes' for third person singular and 'to exercise' is a more natural infinitive form.

× I want to maintain my physique, that's why I do a lot of work.

✓ I want to maintain my physique; that's why I do a lot of exercise.

'Do a lot of work' is ambiguous and contextually odd; 'exercise' fits the context. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to link the cause and effect. The structure 'that's why' should follow a comma with a clear preceding clause.

× Yes, when I was child I used to go for a walk with my grand grandparents because they were their old age.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to go for walks with my grandparents because they were old.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and 'grand grandparents' is incorrect — use 'grandparents'. 'Used to go for a walk' is better as plural 'go for walks'. 'Because they were their old age' is ungrammatical; use 'because they were old' to explain reason.

× They also like to walk like around our village.

✓ They also liked to walk around our village.

Tense should match past narrative ('liked' not 'like'). Remove filler 'like' before 'around'. Use 'walk around our village' for correct prepositional phrase.

× So maybe I I'll go few days in a week with them to walk around my village.

✓ So maybe I would go a few days a week with them to walk around my village.

Mixed forms 'I I'll' incorrect; question asks about past habitual so use 'would' for past habit (or 'used to'); include article 'a' in 'a few days a week'.

× Uh, people like it because they just want to see the nature and in parks you'll get more persons who has the same interest and you can gossip as well.

✓ People like it because they want to see nature, and in parks you will meet more people who have the same interests and you can chat as well.

'See the nature' should be 'see nature' (no article). 'You'll get more persons' is unnatural; use 'you will meet more people'. 'Who has' should agree with plural 'people' so 'who have'. 'Same interest' should be plural 'same interests'. 'Gossip' is possible but 'chat' is more neutral.

× And I think it's more natural to.

✓ And I think it's more natural.

Sentence ends with 'to' incorrectly; remove 'to' to complete the clause. The present tense 'think' is fine.

× I would say if I'll get any chance to walk, I'll go maybe to the beach because I love the view of the sea.

✓ I would say if I got the chance to walk, I would go to the beach because I love the view of the sea.

Mixing conditionals: 'if I'll get' is incorrect. Use second conditional 'if I got... I would go' or first conditional 'if I get... I will go'. Also 'maybe' placement is awkward; remove or place before 'go'.

× There is one part which is very near to my house, so every time when I'll get some time I go there and my many friends like come there for a daily walk.

✓ There is one park that is very near my house, so whenever I have some time I go there and many of my friends come there for a daily walk.

'One part' unclear—use 'one park' if referring to a park. 'Near to my house' should be 'near my house'. 'Every time when I'll get some time' uses incorrect future tense; use present 'whenever I have some time'. 'My many friends like come there' is ungrammatical: use 'many of my friends come there'.

× So I'll meet them there and do some walking.

✓ So I meet them there and do some walking.

In describing habitual action, use present simple 'I meet' rather than future 'I'll meet'. If it's a future plan, keep 'I will meet them' but context suggests habitual.