Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法ミスや語彙の誤用が多く、冗長でつながりが不自然です。改善点：①正しい動詞（work → walk）と前置詞（to work → to work/to the station）を使う。②主題文を明確にし、補足情報は短い2文以内にまとめる。③接続詞（because, so）を自然に使い、語順を正しくする。例：I walk a lot because my home is a little far from the station, so I often walk to work.

예시: I walk a lot. My home is a little far from the station, so I often walk to work instead of taking the bus.

제안: 時制や動詞が混乱しています（現在形・過去形の混用、work/walkの取り違え）。構造を単純にし、過去の習慣を示す“used to”や過去形を使う。詳細は具体的な活動（play on swings, ride bikes）を短く示すと良いです。接続詞で理由を整理してください。

예시: Yes, I used to go outside a lot when I was a child. My mother often took me to the playground, and my friends and I would play on the swings and ride bikes.

제안: 言いたいことは“refreshing”という語で伝わりますが、冗長で文法が崩れています。理由を2点までに絞り、論理的な接続（because, and）で結ぶ。具体例（nature, fresh air, quiet）を入れると説得力が上がります。

예시: I think people walk in parks because it helps them feel refreshed. The fresh air and natural scenery make walking there relaxing and enjoyable.

제안: 主語や目的語が抜けていて意味が不明瞭です。仮定法（If I had the chance, I would...）は使えているので、続けて具体的な場所と理由を2つまで述べてください（safety, familiarity）。語彙は“road”や“area”など正しい単語を選ぶ。

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk near my house. I feel safe there, and I know the roads and paths well.

제안: 質問に対して答えが混乱しており、別の質問を挟んでしまっています。過去の出来事を述べるので過去形を使い、簡潔に場所と時期を答える。余分な情報（他の質問）は避け、理由は1文にまとめる。

예시: Lately I walked near my house. I chose that route because it is very safe, and I haven't been walking much in winter because it's often too cold.

× Yes, I work a lot because my home is little far from the station so I often go work.

✓ Yes, I work a lot because my home is a little far from the station, so I often go to work.

The phrase 'little far' is incorrect; use 'a little far' or better 'a little far from' but more natural is 'a little far from the station'. Also 'go work' needs the preposition 'to' before 'work' when indicating destination or habitual action: 'go to work'. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses clearly.

× Yes I do I often go outside to have a work when I was a child because my mother often took me out outside and played the playground and also my friends like to go outside so I always.

✓ Yes, I did. I often went outside to play when I was a child because my mother often took me to the playground, and my friends also liked to go outside, so I always did too.

The answer mixes present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used: 'did' instead of 'do', 'went' instead of 'go', 'played the playground' is incorrect; use 'played at the playground' or 'went to the playground'. 'Took me out outside' is redundant; use 'took me to the playground'. 'Like' should be 'liked' to match past tense. End the sentence with 'did too' to complete the idea.

× I think it that's because the people like want to refresh and it's the the going to the park is and like to work walking is refreshing.

✓ I think that's because people want to refresh; going to the park and walking are refreshing.

There are extraneous words and incorrect pronoun/article usage: 'the people' should be 'people' generally. Remove duplicate words 'it that's' and 'the the'. Use gerund phrases correctly: 'going to the park and walking are refreshing.' This uses plural verb 'are' to match the compound subject.

× If I had a chance I would like to take a long near my house because the most out the reason is their safety and also I know the load and.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk near my house because, most of all, it is safe and I know the roads well.

Sentence fragments and incorrect words: 'take a long' needs the noun 'walk'. 'The most out the reason' is incorrect; use 'most of all' or 'the main reason'. 'Their safety' is wrong pronoun and should be 'it is safe' referring to the area. 'I know the load' likely means 'I know the roads' or 'I know the area'; use 'roads' and add 'well' for clarity.

× I work Where do you go for a holiday? I yes, I work near my house and lately because it's really safe and also in the winter I was really cold to go outside so I'm.

✓ I work near my house. Lately I have been walking near my house because it's really safe. Also, in winter it was too cold to go outside.

The original contains multiple fused sentences and an irrelevant question fragment. Separate ideas into clear sentences. Use present perfect 'have been walking' or simple present depending on meaning; here 'lately' fits present perfect. 'I was really cold to go outside' is unnatural; use 'it was too cold to go outside.' Remove the stray 'I'm' at the end.