Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and fix grammar, make answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases (e.g., "try instead of lock").

예시: Yes, I used to walk a lot when I lived in my hometown. For example, I often walked to school because it helped me relax and gave me daily exercise, so I preferred walking to taking a bus.

제안: Keep tenses consistent and give one specific detail with a linking phrase. Replace vague phrases like "get a healthy body" with natural expressions such as "keep fit" or "stay healthy." Remove repetition.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. In the evenings my parents and I would walk in front of our house to stay healthy and enjoy the cool, pleasant weather.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar, use linking words to organize reasons, and be specific. Replace incorrect words (e.g., "work" -> "walk", "crash" unclear) and avoid filler phrases. Provide two clear reasons with examples.

예시: People like walking in parks for two main reasons. Firstly, parks have lots of trees and greenery, which create a peaceful atmosphere; secondly, parks are social places where you can meet other walkers or join group activities.

제안: Be precise with location expressions and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a reason why you prefer mountains. Correct collocations ("go for a walk on the mountain" or "in the mountains").

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains because I enjoy jogging there; the fresh air and quiet trails make me feel more energetic and refreshed.

제안: Use correct word order and natural collocations ("public park" not "park public"). Make sentences concise and finish thoughts. Replace informal fillers and correct adjectives ("fresh" not "freshy"). Provide one clear reason with a specific detail.

예시: Lately I went for a walk in the public park with my family and friends. We usually go in the mornings because the fresh morning air and lively atmosphere help us relax and lift our mood.

× Well when I live in my hometown, I used to walk a lot.

✓ Well, when I lived in my hometown, I used to walk a lot.

The sentence mixes present tense 'live' with past context 'used to'. Use past tense 'lived' to match 'used to' which describes a past habitual action.

× I would say I walk to everywhere when I wanted to go, especially the school.

✓ I would say I walked everywhere when I wanted to go, especially to school.

Use past tense 'walked' to match 'wanted'. 'To everywhere' is incorrect; use 'everywhere' without 'to'. Use 'to school' without 'the' for general institutions.

× I usually walk to school because it would allow me to feel relaxed and I can actually do exercise.

✓ I usually walk to school because it allows me to feel relaxed and I can actually exercise.

Use present simple 'allows' to state a general fact. 'Do exercise' is awkward; use 'exercise' as a verb. Keep consistent present-tense forms.

× But right now I try instead of lock because I need to go to school in time.

✓ But right now I try to take a bus instead because I need to get to school on time.

The original is unclear and uses wrong words: 'instead of lock' is incorrect. Use 'try to' + verb. Use 'get to school on time' and preposition 'on' in the phrase 'on time'. If the intended meaning differs (e.g., 'drive' or 'take a taxi'), replace 'take a bus' accordingly.

× Yes, I used to go outside to have a walk when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to go outside for a walk when I was a child.

Use the phrase 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk'. Both clauses correctly use past tense; this change improves idiomatic usage.

× I would say during the evening time I used to walk in front of my house with my parents because we want to get a healthy body and sometimes it's it's really nice weather to walk.

✓ I would say during the evening I used to walk in front of my house with my parents because we wanted to be healthy, and sometimes the weather was really nice for walking.

Maintain past tense 'wanted' and 'was' to match 'used to'. Use 'be healthy' instead of 'get a healthy body'. Remove duplicate 'it's'. Use 'for walking' or 'to walk' for purpose.

× Well, I believe that people prefer to work in parks for numerous reason.

✓ Well, I believe that people prefer to walk in parks for numerous reasons.

'Work in parks' is incorrect in this context; 'walk in parks' fits the topic. Use plural 'reasons' and correct verb 'prefer to walk'.

× First of all, I would say the park would exist a lot of nature like the tree, the crash and the lovely atmosphere.

✓ First of all, I would say the park contains a lot of nature, like trees, grass, and a lovely atmosphere.

'Exist a lot of nature' is unnatural; use 'contains' or 'has'. Use plural 'trees' and correct word 'grass' instead of 'crash'. Use 'a lovely atmosphere' for countable phrase.

× And secondly, there are a lot of person people who are likely to walk there so.

✓ And secondly, there are a lot of people who are likely to walk there.

Remove redundant 'person' and trailing 'so'. Use 'people' as plural noun and complete the sentence without filler 'so'.

× Well, if I had a chance, I would like to take a long walk at the mountain.

✓ Well, if I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the mountains.

Use 'the chance' for a specific hypothetical opportunity and 'in the mountains' (or 'on a mountain') for natural location phrasing.

× I would say I would definitely go jogging because yeah, it's it is one of my favorite activity.

✓ I would say I would definitely go jogging because it is one of my favorite activities.

Use plural 'activities' after 'one of my' and simplify 'it's it is' to 'it is'.

× And yeah, it's an exercise activity that would allow me to feel more energy.

✓ And yeah, it's an exercise activity that helps me feel more energetic.

'Feel more energy' is unnatural; use adjective 'energetic' or verb 'feel more energetic'. 'Helps' is a better present-tense verb for general truth.

× Well, lately I went to go for a walk in the park public with my friends and family.

✓ Well, lately I went for a walk in the public park with my friends and family.

Use 'went for a walk' (not 'went to go for a walk') and correct word order 'public park'. 'Lately' with past simple 'went' is acceptable when referring to a recent action.

× I would say we usually go there every morning because it's a great, great time for us for relaxing our mood and yeah, enjoying with the lively atmosphere because the wind there is really freshy.

✓ I would say we usually go there every morning because it's a great time for us to relax and enjoy the lively atmosphere because the breeze there is really fresh.

Use 'to relax and enjoy' infinitive form after 'time for us'. Replace 'relaxing our mood' with 'to relax'. 'Enjoying with' is incorrect; use 'enjoy'. 'Freshy' is not a word; use 'fresh' or 'a fresh breeze'.

× So it's make me feel.

✓ So it makes me feel refreshed.

Sentence lacks proper verb form; use 'makes' to agree with 'it' and complete the idea with an adjective like 'refreshed'.