Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify the meaning and avoid repeated mistakes (confusing 'walk' and 'work'). Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Use correct verbs: 'walk' and 'ride'.

예시: No, I don't walk a lot. I prefer riding a bike for short trips because it is faster and more enjoyable, so I usually cycle instead of walking.

제안: Answer directly about frequency, use correct tense and avoid word repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'Yes, I often went out...'), then give one specific detail with a linking phrase. Correct verb forms: 'went', 'took'.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child, especially in kindergarten. For example, my parents took me to the park almost every day so I could play and get fresh air.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific, relevant reasons linked logically. Avoid unclear words like 'hurt' and stray phrases. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and natural collocations (feel the breeze, enjoy sunlight).

예시: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and sunlight, which helps them relax. For example, the greenery and open space reduce stress and provide a pleasant change from indoor environments.

제안: Answer the hypothetical question directly (e.g., name a place) even if you don't like long walks. Use conditional phrasing and clear reasons. Avoid fragmented sentences—explain why with one or two concise supporting sentences.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path, but I usually avoid long walks because walking for more than 30 minutes makes my feet hurt. Still, a scenic route by the sea would be enjoyable if I were prepared.

제안: Use past tense consistently and provide one or two specific details about the place or activity. Avoid unfinished sentences. Combine information with linking words (and, so, with).

예시: I went to the solar park recently; it is near my home. I went there with my parents for a short walk and enjoyed the open space and the views.

× No, I don't work a lot because I prefer riding a bike to working, so I don't want to work a lot and I ride a bike rather than working.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot because I prefer riding a bike to walking, so I don't want to walk a lot and I ride a bike rather than walk.

The student repeatedly uses 'work' instead of 'walk' (wrong word choice) and mixes gerund and base verb forms inconsistently. 'Prefer A to B' and 'rather' are followed by parallel forms: 'prefer riding a bike to walking' (both gerunds) or 'ride a bike rather than walk' (base form after rather). Maintain consistent verb forms and use the correct verb 'walk'. Suggestions: replace 'work' with 'walk', use parallel structures: 'prefer riding to walking' or 'ride rather than walk'.

× It's when I was in kindergarten. We have a working time every day and my parents take me to took me to the park for work walking.

✓ It was when I was in kindergarten. We had a walking time every day and my parents took me to the park to walk.

Tense consistency is required. The student mixes present ('have', 'take') with past ('was', 'took'). When describing past routines, use past tense: 'It was', 'We had', 'my parents took me'. Also 'working time' and 'work walking' are incorrect collocations; use 'walking time' or 'time to walk' and 'to walk' after 'took me to the park'. Suggestions: use past simple for past events and use correct noun phrases like 'walking time' or 'time to walk'.

× Because they can feel breeze or sunlight and it makes them feel relaxed and hurt. Touch it.

✓ Because they can feel the breeze and the sunlight, and it makes them feel relaxed, not hurt.

Missing articles and incorrect word choice: 'feel breeze' should be 'feel the breeze'; 'sunlight' usually takes 'the' here. The sentence 'it makes them feel relaxed and hurt. Touch it.' is unclear and ungrammatical. Likely the student meant 'feel relaxed, not hurt.' Remove 'Touch it.' Suggestions: use definite articles for specific sensations and avoid fragmented sentences; state contrast clearly ('relaxed, not hurt').

× I don't want to take a long walk because I walk over more than 30 minutes. I feel sick, my foot.

✓ I don't want to take a long walk because I don't like walking for more than 30 minutes. My foot hurts and I feel sick.

Tense and phrasing errors: 'I walk over more than 30 minutes' is ungrammatical; use 'walking for more than 30 minutes'. Also 'I feel sick, my foot.' is a fragment and incorrect collocation; express cause: 'My foot hurts and I feel sick.' Suggestions: use 'walking for' to indicate duration and combine related symptoms into a complete sentence. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('my foot hurts').

× I went to the solar park, it is nearby my home and I went there with my mom and dad for walking. There are.

✓ I went to the solar park; it is near my home, and I went there with my mom and dad for a walk.

Run-on sentence and article/preposition errors: use a semicolon or separate sentences instead of a comma splice. 'Nearby my home' should be 'near my home'. 'For walking' is awkward; use 'for a walk'. The final fragment 'There are.' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestions: correct punctuation, use 'near' not 'nearby' before a noun phrase, and use 'a walk' to express purpose.