Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답하는 문장으로 시작하고 말의 반복과 어색한 동사형태를 줄여야 합니다. 문법(시제, 관사, 동사 형태)을 바로잡고 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 예: 주어+동사로 간단히 시작한 뒤, 'because'나 'so'로 이유를 이어 주고 구체적인 빈도나 효과(예: 건강, 기분)를 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often because I prefer walking to taking the bus. Walking keeps me healthier and improves my mood, so I try to walk whenever I have free time.

제안: 과거 상황에 대해 말할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고 중복 표현을 피하세요. 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤, 이유와 한두 가지 구체적 예를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 또한 불필요한 반복(예: 'I rarely went out' 여러 번)을 줄이세요.

예시: No, I didn't go out much when I was a child because I was addicted to video games. I usually stayed at home and spent most of my free time playing games.

제안: 일반적인 이유를 말할 때는 논리적으로 정리된 문장을 사용하고 연결어(Firstly, Also, Finally)를 활용하세요. 모호한 표현('values in to walking paths')을 피하고 구체적인 이유(건강, 경치, 휴식 등)를 명확히 제시하세요.

예시: People like walking in parks for several reasons. Firstly, it is good for their health because walking is a simple form of exercise. Also, parks offer pleasant scenery and fresh air, which helps people relax.

제안: 가정법 질문에는 직접적인 의사표현으로 시작하고 이유를 덧붙이세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 문법적 오류(시제와 전치사)를 고치세요. 장소를 구체적으로 말하고 왜 그곳을 선호하는지 한두 문장으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a quiet park near my home because it is peaceful and has many trees. I prefer green spaces to busy urban streets.

제안: 최근의 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 명확히 사용하고 장소 이름과 경험을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 어색한 표현('it is made various kinds of nature', 'I enjoyed as the rivers')을 고치고 구체적 묘사(예: 강, 나무, 사람들이 많음)를 간결하게 정리하세요.

예시: I went for a walk recently at Humnock Park, which is close to my home. The park has rivers, open skies and many beautiful trees, and I enjoyed watching people walking and relaxing there.

× It depends on times what I have.

✓ It depends on the time I have.

This sentence uses 'times' incorrectly when referring to an amount of free time or schedule. Use the singular 'time' with 'depends on' to indicate the amount of time available. Suggestion: say 'It depends on the time I have' or 'It depends on how much time I have.'

× If I have many times yes, I I love to work rather than umm taking a bus or driving, because that working make me more healthier and I like to working take a walk and it makes me feel.

✓ If I have a lot of time, then yes; I love to walk rather than taking a bus or driving, because walking makes me healthier and I like taking a walk because it makes me feel good.

Multiple issues: 'many times' is incorrect when referring to quantity of time—use 'a lot of time'. 'I I' duplication removed. Use 'walk' not 'work'. After 'rather than' use verb+ing: 'taking'. 'That working make me more healthier' has subject-verb disagreement and incorrect comparative: 'walking makes me healthier'. 'I like to working take a walk' mixed forms; use 'I like taking a walk' or 'I like to take a walk.' Suggestions: simplify sentences, maintain consistent verb forms and subject-verb agreement.

× No, I'm addicted to playing video games, so I rarely went out.

✓ No, I was addicted to playing video games, so I rarely went out.

The context asks about childhood (past), so use past tense: 'was addicted' not 'I'm addicted'. 'Rarely went out' is correct past tense. Suggestion: align verb tenses to past when talking about childhood.

× I'll go. I rarely went to outside and I always been was in my house and played video games and had time with my.

✓ I rarely went outside; I was always at home playing video games and spending time by myself.

'I'll go' is irrelevant and should be removed. 'Went to outside' is incorrect preposition order—use 'went outside'. 'I always been was' contains conflicting auxiliary verbs; use 'I was always at home'. 'Had time with my' is incomplete; likely meaning 'spending time by myself.' Suggestion: use clear past-tense structures and correct prepositions.

× There are many values in to walking paths, firstly because of H health.

✓ There are many benefits to walking on paths; firstly, because of health.

'Values in to walking paths' is incorrect collocation; use 'benefits to walking on paths' or 'value in walking on paths.' 'Because of H health' seems garbled—use 'because of health' or 'for health reasons.' Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns (benefits) and prepositions ('to' with benefits, 'on' with paths).

× Umm, working near their home is maybe umm, very healthier habits every day and they're secondary.

✓ Walking near their home may be a much healthier habit every day, and secondly, ...

'Working' should be 'walking'. 'Very healthier' is incorrect; 'healthier' is comparative and does not combine with 'very'—use 'much healthier' or 'much more healthy', or better 'a healthier habit.' 'Habits' plural vs singular: 'a habit' fits with 'every day.' 'They're secondary' is unclear; use 'secondly' to introduce another point. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and linking words ('firstly', 'secondly').

× There are many umm kinds of things they can enjoy.

✓ There are many kinds of things they can enjoy.

Remove filler 'umm' for clarity. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; ensure natural phrasing like 'There are many things they can enjoy.'

× Anywhere will be OK. To be honest it depends on the place.

✓ Anywhere would be OK. To be honest, it depends on the place.

The question is about a hypothetical situation ('if you had the chance'), so use conditional 'would' rather than simple future/neutral 'will'. Also add a comma after 'To be honest'. Suggestion: match conditional mood for hypothetical scenarios.

× Where I'm I was near the park.

✓ When I was near the park.

'Where I'm I was' is ungrammatical. For past context use 'When I was near the park' or 'Where I used to be near the park.' Suggestion: use 'when' for time clauses and correct word order.

× Yes that park is the best place to work. But I knew I live in the city. Yeah.

✓ Yes, that park is the best place to walk, but I know I live in the city.

'Work' should be 'walk' contextually. 'I knew I live' mixes past 'knew' with present 'live'; use present 'know' for current fact: 'I know I live in the city.' Punctuation and commas improve fluency. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use correct verbs for intended meaning.

× I went to work near my home the that nature park and it's called as Humnock Park.

✓ I went to walk near my home at the nature park called Humnock Park.

Use 'went to walk' or 'went for a walk' rather than 'went to work'. Remove duplicate 'the that'. 'It's called as' is incorrect; use 'called Humnock Park' or 'it's called Humnock Park.' Suggestion: use natural phrases like 'went for a walk' and correct 'called' construction.

× It is made various kinds of nature.

✓ It has various kinds of natural scenery.

'Is made various kinds of nature' is ungrammatical. Use 'has' to indicate features: 'has various kinds of natural scenery' or 'features various types of nature.' Suggestion: use 'natural' as adjective and 'scenery' or 'features' for parks.

× I enjoyed as the rivers and skies and many beautiful trees.

✓ I enjoyed the rivers, the sky, and many beautiful trees.

'Enjoyed as the rivers and skies' is incorrect structure. Use direct object list: 'I enjoyed the rivers, the sky, and many beautiful trees.' Use singular 'sky' commonly. Suggestion: list natural features clearly and use articles as needed.

× I can enjoy and there are lots of people.

✓ I enjoyed it, and there were lots of people.

Mixes present 'can enjoy' with past narrative. The question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' so use past tense: 'I enjoyed it, and there were lots of people.' Also specify 'it' as the park/walk. Suggestion: maintain past tense and clear subject references.