Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and provide two specific examples. Use correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot because I value my health. For example, I usually walk to the nearby grocery store and to run small errands instead of driving or taking public transport.

제안: Improve fluency and tense accuracy. Remove fillers, avoid repeating phrases, and finish the thought. Use linking words to connect reasons and examples.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I walked a lot — for instance, I often walked about one kilometre to the bus stop and 1.5 kilometres to church. My parents encouraged morning and evening walks, so it became a habit.

제안: Be more concise and specific. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Provide clear reasons and two concrete examples, using linking words for coherence.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because it relaxes them and offers pleasant sights and sounds. For example, they can watch children playing and listen to birdsong, which helps reduce stress and lift the mood.

제안: Use correct conditional tense and avoid hesitation. Be specific about the route and feelings, and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: If I had the chance, I would walk to the grocery shop three kilometres away, following the nature trails along the way. I think the tree-lined paths would make it a peaceful and enjoyable walk.

제안: Correct grammar and finish your ideas. Avoid wordiness and filler phrases; state when, where, and why clearly and give one specific effect of the walk.

예시: I went for a walk to the nearby park yesterday evening. I do this regularly because after a stressful day it helps me relax and clear my mind.

× I'm a person who give much importance to health and fitness, so whenever I get a chance I prefer to walk to nearby places.

✓ I'm a person who gives great importance to health and fitness, so whenever I get a chance I prefer to walk to nearby places.

The relative clause 'who give' refers to the singular noun 'person' so the verb must be in third person singular form 'gives' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'much importance' is more naturally 'great importance' in this context. Suggestion: use third person singular verbs after singular subjects and choose natural collocations like 'give importance' -> 'give great importance'.

× For example, to buy a small, to have a grocery shopping, or to buy small things rather than taking my car or taking the TTC.

✓ For example, to buy small items or to do grocery shopping rather than taking my car or the TTC.

The original lists incomplete and inconsistent phrases ('to buy a small,' 'to have a grocery shopping') causing sentence structure errors. Use parallel forms in a list: 'to buy small items' and 'to do grocery shopping'. Also 'the TTC' is fine but omit repeated 'taking'. Suggestion: keep items parallel and complete.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

No correction needed: question is correctly formed in past tense using 'did' plus base verb 'go'. (Included to confirm correctness.)

× When I was a child, I used to walk a lot.

✓ When I was a child, I used to walk a lot.

Sentence is correct: 'used to' correctly expresses habitual past actions. (Included to show no change needed.)

× For example, I used to walk to the nearby bus stop from my house which was nearly 1 kilometer away and also the church which was like 1.5 kilometer away from my house.

✓ For example, I used to walk to the nearby bus stop, which was about 1 kilometre from my house, and also to the church, which was about 1.5 kilometres away.

Use 'from my house' or 'away' consistently and place commas for non-restrictive clauses. Use 'about' instead of 'nearly' or 'like' in spoken formal answers, and plural 'kilometres' with numbers above one. Also make parallel structure by adding 'to' before 'the church'. Suggestion: maintain consistent prepositions and parallel structure.

× I I am taught to walk in the morning and in the evening so that.

✓ I was taught to walk in the morning and in the evening.

The original has duplication 'I I', mixes tenses and ends incomplete ('so that'). Correct to simple past 'was taught' to match childhood context and remove the unfinished clause. Suggestion: avoid unfinished sentences and match tense to time reference.

× People like to walk, walk in parks because it is really a good feeling to walk or go to a park because we could see a lot of good things that is happening, for example, children's playing, chirping of the birds and there are a lot of activities going on there and it is a positive.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it feels good and we can see many pleasant things happening, for example children playing, birds chirping, and various activities taking place.

Original repeats words, has awkward phrasing, subject-verb disagreement ('things that is happening'), incorrect possessive 'children's playing', and an unclear ending 'it is a positive'. Fix by removing repetition, using correct verb agreement ('things happening'), correct noun forms ('children playing'), and clearer, concise phrasing. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct subject-verb agreement and simpler phrasing.

× If I have a chance, I would like to go for a long walk to the grocery shop which is 3 kilometres away from my house and I think there are some trails in between, so I believe that that's going to be a pleasant walk just being umm, into the nature.

✓ If I had a chance, I would like to go for a long walk to the grocery shop which is 3 kilometres away from my house; I think there are some trails in between, so I believe that would be a pleasant walk, just being in nature.

The conditional sentence mixes present and conditional forms. For hypothetical situations, use past tense in the 'if' clause ('If I had a chance') with 'would' in the result clause. Also 'into the nature' is incorrect; use 'in nature'. Remove filler 'umm' and make phrasing concise. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure and preposition 'in nature'.

× I did walk yesterday evening to the nearby park from my house.

✓ I walked to the nearby park from my house yesterday evening.

Using 'did walk' is emphatic and unnecessary; simple past 'walked' is natural. Place time expressions (yesterday evening) at the end for smoother word order. Suggestion: prefer simple past for ordinary statements and natural word order.

× It is something that I do usually because after a long day with which was stressful, I just go would like to go to a park and I feel that that's something that I made it as a habit that will help me to reduce my.

✓ It is something I usually do because after a stressful day I like to go to a park, and I feel that it's a habit that helps me reduce stress.

Original contains broken phrases ('with which was stressful'), mixed modal verbs ('go would like to go'), unnecessary pronoun 'it' ('made it as a habit'), and an unfinished ending. Correct by using natural adverb placement ('usually'), clear cause ('after a stressful day'), correct modal verb ('like to go'), and a complete object ('reduce stress'). Suggestion: keep sentences concise, ensure verbs and clauses are complete, and place adverbs in typical positions.