Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be precise and directly answer the question about walking (not working). Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you walk often, then give 1–2 brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating 'work' when you mean 'walk.'

예시: Yes, I walk quite often, especially in summer because the weather is pleasant. For example, I usually take a 30-minute walk after work to stay fit and enjoy the warm weather.

제안: Answer directly whether you often walked as a child. Use a clear topic sentence and complete your supporting detail; avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons. Be specific about frequency and context.

예시: Yes, I often walked when I was a child because my village had no public transportation. As a result, I walked about 20–30 minutes to school every day, which became a normal part of my routine.

제안: Directly address the reasons people walk in parks and avoid saying 'work' if you mean 'walk' or 'spend time.' Provide 2–3 specific reasons with linking words and examples to support each reason.

예시: People like to walk in parks because they provide fresh air and a peaceful setting for relaxation. Moreover, parks are ideal for socializing with friends and family, and many people enjoy observing plants and birds while they walk.

제안: Start with a clear statement naming the place you would choose, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use 'walk' instead of 'work' and fix sentence boundaries to avoid run-on sentences.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in the forests near my home in Finland because they feel safe and are very relaxing. In addition, the trails are quiet and full of pine trees, which makes walking more enjoyable.

제안: Begin with a concise answer naming the recent place, then add one or two specific details about it using linking words. Correct small errors (e.g., 'well-marked cycling and walking trails') and keep sentences within the 5-sentence limit.

예시: Recently, I went for a walk in the forest near my apartment. It has well-marked cycling and walking trails with distance markers, so I can track how far I walk and choose different loop lengths.

× I work a lot during summer.

✓ I work a lot during summer.

This sentence is acceptable but context suggests habitual action in summer; no grammatical change needed. Ensure consistency with article 'the' before 'summer' if referring to a specific summer: 'I work a lot during the summer.' Use 'the summer' to specify the season generally.

× The weather during summer is warm, so it's favourable to work outside.

✓ The weather during the summer is warm, so it's favourable to work outside.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'summer' when referring to the season in general. Add 'the' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct: 'during the summer.'

× Physical health is really important to me and working helps me.

✓ Physical health is really important to me, and working helps me.

Sentence is grammatically correct; added a comma for clarity between independent clauses. No plural/singular issue. Keep the original wording which correctly treats 'working' as a gerund.

× Growing up, I did do a lot of working.

✓ Growing up, I did a lot of work.

'Do a lot of working' is unnatural. Use the noun 'work' with 'did' to form past tense: 'did a lot of work.' Alternatively, 'I worked a lot' is even clearer. The error is word choice and tense construction rather than strict grammar category.

× The village I lived in had no public transportation to and from school, so we had to take long walks to school purposely.

✓ The village I lived in had no public transportation to or from school, so we had to walk to school on purpose.

Use 'to or from' not 'to and from' when indicating directions; 'to or from school' is standard. 'Take long walks to school purposely' is awkward: use 'walk to school on purpose' or 'had to walk long distances to get to school.' 'On purpose' means intentionally, so if intended meaning is 'as a necessity,' use 'had to walk long distances.'

× It was a mode of.

✓ It was a mode of transport.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the noun after 'mode of.' Add the object 'transport' (or 'transportation') to complete the phrase: 'a mode of transport.'

× People work in the parks as a form of leisure activity.

✓ People walk in the parks as a form of leisure activity.

'Work in the parks' contradicts the idea of leisure; 'walk' fits the question about walking. The original is a word choice error rather than pure grammar.

× Furthermore, others just go to interact with their friends and families as well as connecting with nature.

✓ Furthermore, others just go to interact with their friends and families and to connect with nature.

Parallel structure requires matching forms: 'to interact' and 'to connect' (infinitives) or use gerunds for both ('interacting' and 'connecting'). The mixture 'to interact... as well as connecting' is nonparallel. Also 'families' can be 'family' depending on meaning.

× I would prefer to work in the forest here in Finland forest they are safe and relaxing so that will be one of my preferred places to take a walk.

✓ I would prefer to walk in the forests here in Finland; they are safe and relaxing, so that would be one of my preferred places to take a walk.

Multiple issues: wrong verb 'work' should be 'walk' given context (word choice). Run-on sentence needs punctuation. Use plural 'forests' or 'the forest here in Finland' and refer back with 'they' for plural. 'Would prefer to walk' is the correct verb + -ing question: 'prefer to walk' or 'would prefer walking' are both possible; maintain parallel structure. Also 'so that will be' changed to 'so that would be' to match conditional 'would prefer.'

× I would prefer to work in the forest here in Finland forest they are safe and relaxing so that will be one of my preferred places to take a walk.

✓ I would prefer to walk in the forest here in Finland; it is safe and relaxing, so that would be one of my preferred places to take a walk.

If referring to a specific forest, use singular 'the forest' and 'it is.' If plural, adjust both nouns and pronouns. Also change 'work' to 'walk' as per context. Ensure matching articles and pronouns.

× We have a forest near our apartment with a well marked cycling and walking trails, so that is the place I normally go to take a walk since it has specific distance markings along the way.

✓ We have a forest near our apartment with well-marked cycling and walking trails, so that is the place I normally go for a walk since it has distance markers along the way.

Hyphenate 'well-marked' and use plural agreement: 'trails' is fine but remove article mismatch 'a forest... trails' is acceptable; change 'go to take a walk' to 'go for a walk' for idiomatic usage. 'Specific distance markings' is wordy; 'distance markers' is clearer. Ensure plural nouns and modifiers agree.