Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify meaning and correct verbs; use a topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and keep sentences concise. For example say you walk regularly, explain purpose (commute and exercise), and mention frequency.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk daily between my dormitory and the teaching building to attend lessons, and I usually go hiking on weekends for exercise.

제안: Use past tense consistently and be specific about activities and reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 concrete details. Reduce hesitation and unclear words.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents often took me to the local nature park for walks and short hikes because they wanted me to enjoy fresh air and experience nature.

제안: Organize your answer: give a main reason, then support with specific details. Use correct vocabulary (attract vs attractive, encounter vs attach, warm? or watch?). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Keep to 2–3 short sentences.

예시: People like walking in parks because the natural environment is relaxing and the air is fresher than in the city. Additionally, parks offer opportunities to see birds and other wildlife, which helps people relieve stress.

제안: Use the conditional correctly and keep verbs accurate (would go, not went). Name specific attractions and explain why with clear vocabulary (fresh air, scenic views). Avoid filler and vague terms like 'particle goods'.

예시: If I had the chance, I would go to Hu Mountain in Zhangqing, Guangdong Province, because the area has fresh air, beautiful scenery, and many trails that are good for health.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific details: what you did and why you liked it. Use correct words (wonder → wander; bumpy, not pumpy) and avoid repetition.

예시: I recently walked in a nature reserve called Seven Star Park. It was lovely to wander there because the scenery was beautiful and the walking paths were smooth and comfortable.

× Yes, actually, I nearly work every day because I need to work for uh, what to the teaching building to have a lesson and then I will work, uh, back to my dormitory and I also, umm, go for hiking on the weekend.

✓ Yes, actually, I nearly walk every day because I need to go to the teaching building to have a lesson and then I walk back to my dormitory and I also go hiking on the weekend.

The student used 'work' where the intended meaning is 'walk', causing a lexical/verb error and inconsistent tense/choice. Also 'need to work for... to have a lesson' is ungrammatical; the correct verb is 'go' with destination 'to the teaching building'. 'Will work back' is inappropriate for habitual action; use simple present 'walk' for routines. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual routines and verify verb choice matches meaning (walk/go/go hiking).

× Yes I do. When I was a child, my parents always bring me out to the thing, uh, to the nature park, uh, to have a hiking because they want me to close to the nature and uh, feel the refresh, uh, feel the fresh air and have fur is.

✓ Yes I did. When I was a child, my parents always brought me out to places in nature, to go hiking because they wanted me to be close to nature, to feel refreshed and to breathe fresh air.

Mixed tense and incorrect pronouns/phrasing: 'Yes I do' should match past question context => 'Yes I did'. 'Bring' should be past 'brought' for repeated past action. 'The thing' is vague; use 'places in nature'. 'Have a hiking' is incorrect collocation — use 'go hiking'. 'Want me to close to the nature' needs infinitive and no article: 'wanted me to be close to nature'. 'Feel the refresh' is incorrect adjective/noun use; use 'feel refreshed'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for childhood routines and use correct verb forms and collocations (go hiking, be close to nature, feel refreshed).

× I think it mostly because the nature is really attractive because of its fresh air, just like I said before and maybe some wild animals they can attach with and they may be war in the part to relieve their emotion and.

✓ I think it is mostly because nature is really attractive because of its fresh air, as I said before, and maybe people can encounter some wild animals and walk in the park to relieve their emotions.

Several issues: 'it mostly because' missing verb 'is' -> 'it is mostly because'. 'the nature' should be 'nature' (no article). 'some wild animals they can attach with' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'people can encounter wild animals' — avoid redundant pronoun 'they'. 'may be war in the part' is garbled; likely 'may be walking in the park' or 'walk in the park' to relieve emotion. 'Relieve their emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. Suggestion: include linking verb 'is', remove unnecessary articles, use correct verbs (encounter, walk) and plural nouns as needed.

× If I have the chance, I will choose to went to umm, the Hu Mountain in Zhangqing, Guangdong Province, because the the the the area is really fresh and there are many, uh, many particle goods, which is good for our health to breathe in.

✓ If I had the chance, I would choose to go to Hu Mountain in Zhangqing, Guangdong Province, because the area is really fresh and there are many plants and trees, which are good for our health when we breathe in.

Conditional mixed error: 'If I have the chance, I will choose to went' mixes conditional forms and wrong verb 'went'. For a hypothetical situation use second conditional: 'If I had... I would choose to go'. 'Went' is simple past; correct base form after 'choose to' is 'go'. 'Particle goods' is incorrect; likely 'plants' or 'particle' confusion — replace with 'plants and trees'. Also agreement: 'which are good' (plural) and clearer phrase 'when we breathe in'. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure and base verb forms after 'choose to', and replace unclear nouns with accurate terms.

× I went to a nature park called 7 Star Park to have a have a wonder because that since there is really wonderful and the most importantly the road there is not pumpy so it is very comfortable.

✓ I went to a nature park called 7 Star Park to take a walk because it is really wonderful and, most importantly, the paths there are not bumpy so it was very comfortable.

Redundant and incorrect phrases: 'to have a have a wonder' is ungrammatical — use 'to take a walk' or 'to wander'. 'Because that since there is really wonderful' is incorrect structure; simplify to 'because it is really wonderful'. 'The road there is not pumpy' has wrong word 'pumpy' -> 'bumpy' and 'road' plural 'paths' fits parks better. Maintain past reference: 'I went... so it was very comfortable' or keep present perception 'it is wonderful' — keep consistency. Suggestion: use clear collocations (take a walk, paths, bumpy) and consistent tense.