Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 발음 오류를 바로잡고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 숫자 표현(‘3 or 4 times a week’)과 동사의 오용(‘work’→‘walk’)을 고치고, 중복되는 단어와 망설임을 줄이기 위해 간결한 문장으로 정리하면 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 빈도(얼마나 자주), 이유(통근·스트레스 해소)를 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually go for a walk three or four times a week, mainly to get to the bus stop for my commute and to relieve stress.

제안: 전반적으로 좋지만 일부 반복과 어색한 표현을 다듬으세요(예: ‘walking a lot when walking’ 대신 다른 동사를 사용). 복수형 처리(‘my friends’)와 연결어 사용으로 문장을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

예시: Yes, I used to walk a lot to and from school with my friends. I enjoyed those walks because the route went through a park, so it was a great chance to chat and relax.

제안: 내용은 적절하지만 문장 끝 부분에서 표현을 더 구체적으로 하고 단어 선택을 다듬으세요(‘elderly’ 앞에 관사/수식어 추가). 예시 설명을 확장해 더 자연스럽게 연결어를 쓰면 완성도가 높아집니다.

예시: People go to parks to get fresh air and escape the noise of the city. They can relax, relieve stress, and do light exercise like walking or jogging. For example, I often see families with children and elderly people enjoying the open space.

제안: 어휘와 의미 전달에서 문제가 있습니다. ‘walk along on’ 대신 ‘walk along’, ‘Jeju Island or Forest Trail’의 구조를 명확히 하고, 부적절한 표현(‘explore naked’)을 수정하세요. 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the coastal trails on Jeju Island because the volcanic landscapes and sea views are stunning. I enjoy being alone in nature, and those trails would give me a peaceful chance to explore the scenery.

제안: 불분명한 명사 사용(‘column’)과 동사 선택(‘wondered’ 대신 ‘wandered’)을 고치고, 문장을 간결하게 재구성하세요. 장소를 정확히 말하고 이유와 느낌을 연결어로 명확히 표현하면 좋습니다.

예시: I took a short stroll around the shopping area after lunch today. I wandered past a few shops and cafes, which was quite relaxing.

× 'Yes, I try to work as often as possible.'

✓ 'Yes, I try to walk as often as possible.'

'The student used the verb "work" which does not fit the question about walking. Use the present simple to describe regular habits: "I try to walk as often as possible." This corrects the lexical choice and matches the present habitual tense.'

× 'I usually 3 or 4 times, well times a week.'

✓ 'I usually walk three or four times a week.'

'The original sentence lacks a verb and uses numerals awkwardly. In English, include the verb (walk) and write out small numbers in speech: "three or four times a week." This fixes sentence structure and quantifier expression.'

× 'Umm I walk to the bus stop for my my commute or take walk to relieve stress.'

✓ 'I walk to the bus stop for my commute or take a walk to relieve stress.'

'There is a repeated word (my my) and a missing article before "walk." Use parallel structure: "walk... or take a walk." This corrects redundancy, article use, and parallelism.'

× 'Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?'

✓ 'Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?'

'The phrase "go outside to have a walk" is awkward. Use "go outside for a walk" which is the natural past-tense question form. The auxiliary "did" already marks past tense, so the main verb stays in base form.'

× 'When I was little, I used to walk a lot when walking to and from school with my friends.'

✓ 'When I was little, I used to walk a lot to and from school with my friends.'

'The phrase "when walking to and from school" is redundant after "used to walk a lot." Removing the extra clause simplifies the sentence and avoids repetition.'

× 'I enjoyed those walks well because this route passed through a park and it was a good chance to chat with my friend.'

✓ 'I enjoyed those walks because the route passed through a park, and it was a good chance to chat with my friends.'

'"Well" is unnecessary here and interrupts the sentence. Use plural "friends" to match earlier reference. Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity.'

× 'Most people get some fresh air and escape from the urban noise.'

✓ 'Most people get some fresh air and escape the urban noise.'

'Both "escape from" and "escape" are acceptable, but "escape the urban noise" is more concise. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar correction.'

× 'They can relax, relieve stress and even do light exercise like walking or jogging. Uh, for example, I often see families and elderly.'

✓ 'They can relax, relieve stress, and even do light exercise like walking or jogging. For example, I often see families and elderly people.'

'"Elderly" needs a noun after it (people) when used in this context. Also add commas for list clarity.'

× 'If I had a chance, I would like to walk along on the trail in Jeju Island or Forest Trail because the volcanic landscapes and sea views are very beautiful.'

✓ 'If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the trails on Jeju Island, such as the forest trails, because the volcanic landscapes and sea views are very beautiful.'

'Use "the chance" as the common expression. "Walk along on the trail" is redundant; use "walk along the trails." Clarify "Jeju Island" with plural "trails" and add "such as" to introduce examples.'

× 'I enjoy fresh air alone and long walks and those trails would let me explore naked.'

✓ 'I enjoy the fresh air and long walks alone, and those trails would let me explore the island.'

'"Alone" should modify "long walks" or be placed after "enjoy." "Explore naked" is incorrect and likely a mistranslation; "explore the island" or "explore nature" fits the context. Added definite article for "fresh air."'

× 'Where did you go for a walk lately?'

✓ 'Where have you gone for a walk lately?'

'For recent experiences, present perfect is more natural in English: "Where have you gone for a walk lately?" Using "did" implies a specific finished time, but "lately" pairs better with present perfect.'

× 'I took a stroll around column after lunch just today because I wondered near a few shops and cafes, which was relaxing.'

✓ 'I took a stroll around the column after lunch today because I wandered near a few shops and cafes, which was relaxing.'

'"Column" likely needs the definite article "the column." "Just today" is redundant with "today." "Wondered" is the wrong verb; use "wandered." This fixes article use, adverb placement, and verb choice.'