Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cümlenizi daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru hale getirmeniz gerekiyor. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından gerekirse nedenini açıklayın. Örneğin zaman ve çoğul/tekil uyumuna, artikellerin kullanımına (the/a) ve doğru kelime formlarına dikkat edin. Ayrıca gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının ve en fazla 3-4 cümle kullanın.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I work in the aviation sector, and the hangars are built on a very large site, so we often have to walk long distances between areas.

제안: Zaman tutarlılığı ve yapı üzerinde çalışın. Geçmişten bahsederken geçmiş zaman (past simple) kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Duygu ve sonuç arasındaki ilişkiyi bağlayıcı kelimelerle (so, because, when) net ifade edin. Ayrıca cümleleri daha kısa ve açık tutun.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked outside if I felt bored or angry, because walking helped me clear my mind and think more clearly.

제안: Daha düzgün ve akıcı ifadeler kullanın; dolgu sözcüklerini (uh, umm) azaltın. Sebep-sonuç ilişkisini net bir konu cümlesi ile kurun ve spesifik örnekler verin (görsel sakinlik, temiz hava, egzersiz). Bağlaçlarla (because, so, therefore) akışı iyileştirin.

예시: People like walking in parks because cities often lack green spaces. Parks offer trees, grass and fresh air, which help people relax and enjoy nature.

제안: Daha doğal ve akıcı bir tercih beyanı yapın. Yargı ifadelerinde daha uygun kelimeler kullanın (kinda → quite or very). Birkaç neden ekleyin ve bağlaç kullanın. Cümleleri daha akıcı hale getirmek için virgül kullanımı ve kısa cümleler tercih edin.

예시: I would love to take a long walk in Central Park, New York. It is a well-known place with lots of green spaces and interesting sights, so it would be a pleasant place for a long walk.

제안: Zaman ve tercih ifadelerini doğru kullanın: 'lately' için present perfect uygun olur (I've been walking...). 'Prefer' yapısını doğru kurun (prefer doing something). Hava nedeniyle dışarı çıkmama sebebini net ifade edin ve bağlaçlarla açıklayın.

예시: Lately I have preferred walking at home because of the bad weather. I don't like going outside when it's cold and rainy, so I do indoor walks instead.

× Yes, I'm working in aviation sector and we are walking a lot of ranges cause the hangers is build it in very big area.

✓ Yes, I work in the aviation sector and we walk a lot of routes because the hangars are built over a very large area.

The student used present continuous ('I'm working') where simple present is appropriate for habitual/occupational facts; corrected to 'I work' (present simple). 'Aviation sector' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Ranges' is incorrect vocabulary for paths; 'routes' is more natural. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Hangers' should be 'hangars' (spelling). 'Is build it in' is ungrammatical: passive voice with past participle 'are built' is needed and 'over a very large area' is natural. Suggestion: use present simple for regular jobs, use correct articles, and form passive with 'be + past participle'.

× Yes, I was. I was walking outside when I bored or angry at something.

✓ Yes, I was. I used to walk outside when I was bored or angry about something.

The student mixed past continuous with incorrect past adjectives. 'I was walking' implies a continuous action at a specific time; for habitual past actions, use 'used to'. 'When I bored' lacks the verb 'was' and should be 'when I was bored'. 'Angry at something' is acceptable but 'angry about something' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'used to' for repeated past habits and include the appropriate auxiliary 'was' for past states.

× And when I when I'm walking I can't think, I think more clearly.

✓ And when I'm walking I can't think; actually, I think more clearly.

The sentence is repetitive and has a timing mismatch 'when I when I'm walking'. Keep a single 'when' and use the present continuous 'I'm walking' correctly. Also the two clauses contradict ('can't think' vs 'think more clearly') so add a clarifying connector like 'actually'. Suggestion: remove repeated words and ensure clauses express the intended contrast.

× I think in the cities there is no uh, green plants like uh, umm. Like a grass or big trees, people like to see them.

✓ I think in cities there are no green areas like grass or large trees; people like to see them.

Use plural or uncountable forms: 'green plants' awkward — 'green areas' or 'green spaces' is natural. 'In the cities' should be 'in cities' (general statement). 'There is no' must agree with plural noun: 'there are no'. 'Like a grass' is incorrect article and countability; use 'grass' (uncountable). 'Big trees' -> 'large trees'. Also replace comma splices with appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: use 'there are' for plural/uncountable, drop unnecessary articles, and choose correct nouns for green spaces.

× I can clearly say New York, Central Park, it's uh, kinda popular culture place and there's a lot of greens. It's good to be walking there.

✓ I would clearly say New York, Central Park; it's kind of a culturally popular place and there are a lot of green spaces. It's nice to walk there.

'Can clearly say' is awkward for expressing preference; 'would' or 'I'd' is more natural. 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of'. 'Popular culture place' is unclear — 'culturally popular place' or 'popular cultural attraction'. 'There's a lot of greens' is incorrect: use 'there are a lot of green spaces' or 'lots of greenery'. 'It's good to be walking there' is unnatural; 'It's nice to walk there' fits better. Suggestion: choose appropriate modal to express preference, avoid informal contractions in formal speech, and use correct nouns for greenery.

× I prefer walking in my home nowadays. I don't prefer go outside because of the weather.

✓ I prefer walking at home nowadays. I don't prefer to go outside because of the weather.

Use the correct preposition: 'at home' rather than 'in my home' for habitual walking. The second sentence requires the infinitive 'to go' after 'prefer': 'prefer to go' or use gerund consistently: 'I prefer walking at home; I don't like going outside because of the weather.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions for location and the correct verb form after 'prefer'.