Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary (e.g., "exercise," "healthy," "improves my mood"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I see walking as a simple form of exercise, and it helps me stay healthy and more energetic. For example, after a 30-minute walk I usually feel less stressed and in a better mood.

제안: Use correct past tense and clear sentence structure. Begin with a topic sentence in past tense, then add a specific detail about who you walked with and why it was enjoyable, using linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. I usually walked every day with my father or grandfather, and because we spent time together I felt happy and relaxed.

제안: Answer directly and give clear reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "flat paths," "greenery," "fresh air"). Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

예시: People like walking in parks because the paths are flat and safe, and there is plenty of greenery and fresh air. As a result, parks are comfortable and pleasant places for exercise.

제안: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with the preference, then explain reasons using linking words like "because" and include specific sensory details (sight, sound) to make the answer vivid.

예시: I would like to take a long walk along the beach because the sound of the waves and the sea breeze relax me. Walking there helps me clear my mind and improves my mood.

제안: Use correct past tense and precise numbers. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the location, then add details such as distance and how you felt, using linking words like "and" or "so."

예시: Recently I walked along a long street near my house. It was about two kilometers, and after the walk I felt refreshed and more energetic.

× I like, uh, work a lot, a lot uh, because, uh, when, uh, people do walking, it's kind of a sport.

✓ I like working a lot because walking is a kind of sport.

The verb after 'like' should be in the -ing form (gerund) when describing general preferences. 'Do walking' is incorrect; use the gerund 'walking' alone. Remove unnecessary fillers and repetitions for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I like working' or 'I like to work' consistently, and say 'walking' rather than 'do walking'.

× It's uh, more healthy for body and uh, when do this exercise, we feeling good and change mood.

✓ It's healthier for the body, and when we do this exercise we feel good and our mood changes.

Use comparative adjective 'healthier' instead of 'more healthy'. 'Body' needs the definite article 'the'. 'When do this exercise' requires subject and auxiliary: 'when we do this exercise'. 'We feeling' should be 'we feel'. 'Change mood' should be 'our mood changes' to match subject and tense. Suggestion: Use correct comparative forms, include articles, and use correct subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, when was a child I working a lot outside.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I worked a lot outside.

The time clause 'when I was a child' requires past simple 'was'. The main clause describing habitual past action should use past simple 'worked', not present participle 'working'. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed or habitual actions in the past.

× Uh, I think every day I go walking with my father or grandfather.

✓ I used to go walking every day with my father or grandfather.

The question refers to childhood; describe habitual past action with 'used to' or past simple. 'I think every day I go walking' mixes present perspective with past time reference. 'Used to' clarifies past habitual activity. Suggestion: For past habitual actions, use 'used to' or past simple (e.g., 'I went walking every day').

× I feel more fine when when I'll go with the our family to to walk.

✓ I felt better when I went walking with our family.

Talking about childhood requires past tense not future 'I'll go'. Remove duplicate words and use 'felt better' or 'I felt more fine' corrected to 'felt better'. 'The our family' is incorrect article use; use 'our family'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time reference and avoid redundant words.

× I think because this place is good for walking, didn't have up and down, it's like a street, a street way, so that's suitable for people who do walking.

✓ I think it's because the park is good for walking; it doesn't have ups and downs and is like a flat pathway, so it's suitable for people who walk.

Pronoun and subject references were unclear. Use 'it' for the park. 'Didn't have up and down' should be 'doesn't have ups and downs'. 'A street way' is incorrect; 'pathway' or 'flat path' is better. 'People who do walking' should be 'people who walk'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct construction. Suggestion: Use clear pronouns, correct negation and noun forms ('ups and downs'), and prefer natural verbs like 'walk'.

× I think I prefer the beach, uh, when I walk a beach, I feel more relaxed and uh, more enjoy.

✓ I think I prefer the beach; when I walk on the beach I feel more relaxed and enjoy it more.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'walk on the beach'. 'More enjoy' is incorrect; use 'enjoy it more' or 'am more relaxed and enjoy myself more'. Maintain consistent structure. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and complete verb objects ('enjoy it').

× I see the people, uh, or I can't see the sea, uh, I can't change my mood when I do that.

✓ I see other people, or I can see the sea; it changes my mood when I do that.

Original had contradiction 'can't see the sea' and unclear pronoun referents. Use 'other people' or 'people' and correct truth: presumably he can see the sea. Use 'it changes my mood' to refer to the action of walking on the beach. Ensure pronouns refer clearly to the subject. Suggestion: Clarify what you can observe and use clear pronouns ('it changes my mood').

× So I prefer so much, uh, walking in beach.

✓ So I prefer walking on the beach very much.

Use 'on the beach' not 'in beach'. 'Prefer so much' is awkward; place 'very much' after the verb phrase. Ensure correct preposition and natural adverb placement. Suggestion: Use natural adverb placement and correct prepositions.

× I work in a street near my house.

✓ I walk on a street near my house.

The student used 'work' incorrectly; the question asked where they went for a walk, so use 'walk'. 'Walk on a street' or 'walk along a street' is appropriate. Also add an article: 'a street'. Suggestion: Use the appropriate verb for the action and include articles.

× It's long street.

✓ It's a long street.

Missing article 'a' before 'long street'. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns.

× I think I walk 2 kilometer probably.

✓ I think I walked about 2 kilometers.

Use past tense 'walked' to describe a recent completed action. Use plural 'kilometers' for more than one. Place 'about' before the number for approximation and remove 'probably' redundancy. Suggestion: Use correct tense, plural for units, and natural adverbs like 'about'.