Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you walk a lot?
수험생
Yes, I work a lot and going hiking is also my favorite activities when I have free time. I enjoy going hiking because it not only help me to stay healthy but also to enjoy the first day and and the greeneries during my journey.
시험관
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
수험생
Well when I was a child I lived in a crowded cities so there is not enough space for me to have a work. So instead of going outside to have work I usually go went to the the local gym to stay healthy.
시험관
Why do people like to walk in parks?
수험생
From my opinion, because the park is a outdoor space, so when people work, they can also enjoy the clean air and the scenery. Moreover, they can also connect with their friends and make a new one.
시험관
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
수험생
From my point of view, I would choose the countryside regions to have a work because I think that during my work I can enjoy the clean airs and also the sceneries of this place. Moreover, I can also know more about the tradition and practice of the local people, which is very interesting.
시험관
Where did you go for a walk lately?
수험생
Recently I've overwhelmed with my homework and extra classes, so I don't have enough time to have a long work. Instead, I go to the local gym and walk in the treadmill. It's not only help me to relax but also to stay healthy and active.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you walk a lot?
점수: 62.0제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và từ vựng chính xác; nói ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (thói quen, tần suất, lợi ích), sử dụng liên từ thích hợp.
예시: Yes, I walk and hike regularly in my free time. I usually go hiking once every two weeks because it helps me stay fit and reduces stress. Also, I enjoy seeing different plants and landscapes during the walks.
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
점수: 55.0제안: Sửa lỗi thì quá khứ và danh từ/động từ (walk, work bị nhầm). Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích cụ thể về hoàn cảnh và hoạt động thay thế; dùng liên từ để nối ý.
예시: Not really. I grew up in a crowded city where there wasn’t much open space, so I rarely walked outside. Instead, I often went to a local gym or indoor sports center to exercise.
Why do people like to walk in parks?
점수: 68.0제안: Trả lời trực tiếp hơn và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (outdoor, enjoy, scenery). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và số nhiều; nêu thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ lí do và dùng liên từ (for example, besides).
예시: I think people like walking in parks because parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery. For example, they can relax near trees and lakes, and they often meet friends or join group activities there.
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
점수: 65.0제안: Tránh lặp "work" thay cho "walk"; dùng cấu trúc điều kiện rõ ràng và mô tả cụ thể về địa điểm, hoạt động và lí do. Sử dụng tính từ và danh từ đúng số (air -> air).
예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the countryside. I would enjoy fresh air and wide views of fields and hills, and I might visit villages to learn about local traditions and daily life.
Where did you go for a walk lately?
점수: 60.0제안: Chú ý thì hiện tại hoàn thành vs hiện tại đơn; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (overwhelmed -> been overwhelmed; work -> walk). Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu tần suất và mô tả ngắn hoạt động thay thế.
예시: Lately I haven’t had time for long walks because I’ve been overwhelmed with homework and classes. Instead, I usually walk on a treadmill at the local gym three times a week to relax and keep fit.
문법
× Yes, I work a lot and going hiking is also my favorite activities when I have free time.
✓ Yes, I work a lot and going hiking is also my favorite activity when I have free time.
Sentence uses 'going hiking' correctly but 'activities' is plural while referring to a single favorite activity. Use singular 'activity' to match. Also consider 'I enjoy hiking' as a natural alternative. Grammar problem type ID: 8
× I enjoy going hiking because it not only help me to stay healthy but also to enjoy the first day and and the greeneries during my journey.
✓ I enjoy going hiking because it not only helps me stay healthy but also lets me enjoy the fresh air and the greenery during my journeys.
Subject 'it' (referring to going hiking) requires third person singular verb 'helps'. 'Help me to stay' is acceptable but 'helps me stay' is more natural. 'First day' is unclear; likely intended 'fresh air'. 'Greenery' is uncountable singular. Also remove duplicate 'and'. Grammar problem type ID: 27
× Well when I was a child I lived in a crowded cities so there is not enough space for me to have a work.
✓ Well, when I was a child I lived in a crowded city so there was not enough space for me to go for a walk.
'Cities' should be singular 'city' to match 'a crowded'. Also tense should be past 'was'. 'Have a work' is incorrect collocation; use 'go for a walk'. Grammar problem type ID: 1
× So instead of going outside to have work I usually go went to the the local gym to stay healthy.
✓ So instead of going outside to take a walk, I usually went to the local gym to stay healthy.
Use 'take a walk' rather than 'have work'. Also remove duplicate 'the'. 'Go went' mixes present and past; use past 'went' to match narrative. 'To the local gym' is correct preposition. Grammar problem type ID: 11
× From my opinion, because the park is a outdoor space, so when people work, they can also enjoy the clean air and the scenery.
✓ In my opinion, because the park is an outdoor space, when people walk they can enjoy the clean air and the scenery.
Use 'In my opinion' not 'From my opinion'. 'A outdoor' should be 'an outdoor'. Remove redundant 'so'. 'Work' should be 'walk'. Grammar problem type ID: 11
× Moreover, they can also connect with their friends and make a new one.
✓ Moreover, they can also meet up with friends and make new ones.
'Connect with their friends' is acceptable but 'make a new one' is incorrect—use 'make new friends' or 'make new ones'. Grammar problem type ID: 14
× From my point of view, I would choose the countryside regions to have a work because I think that during my work I can enjoy the clean airs and also the sceneries of this place.
✓ From my point of view, I would choose the countryside to take a walk because I think that during my walk I can enjoy the clean air and the scenery of the place.
Use 'take a walk' not 'have a work'. 'Countryside regions' is redundant—use 'the countryside'. 'Airs' should be uncountable 'air'; 'sceneries' should be 'scenery'. Grammar problem type ID: 11
× Moreover, I can also know more about the tradition and practice of the local people, which is very interesting.
✓ Moreover, I can also learn more about the traditions and practices of the local people, which is very interesting.
Use 'learn' rather than 'know' for gaining information. 'Tradition and practice' should be plural 'traditions and practices' to match context. Grammar problem type ID: 11
× Recently I've overwhelmed with my homework and extra classes, so I don't have enough time to have a long work.
✓ Recently I've been overwhelmed with my homework and extra classes, so I haven't had enough time to take a long walk.
Use present perfect continuous 'have been overwhelmed' to show ongoing state. 'Have a long work' incorrect—use 'take a long walk'. Tense consistency: 'haven't had' fits recent period. Grammar problem type ID: 5
× Instead, I go to the local gym and walk in the treadmill. It's not only help me to relax but also to stay healthy and active.
✓ Instead, I go to the local gym and walk on the treadmill. It not only helps me relax but also helps me stay healthy and active.
Use preposition 'on' with 'treadmill'. 'It's not only help' requires third person singular 'helps'. Parallel structure needs repetition or rephrase: 'It not only helps me relax but also helps me stay...' or 'It not only helps me relax but also keeps me healthy.' Grammar problem type ID: 2
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