Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g. “30 to an hour” is unclear) and use linking words to improve flow.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I try to walk for about 30 to 60 minutes every day to stay active and improve my fitness, and I find it helps me manage my weight.

제안: Start with a direct past-tense topic sentence, use correct tense and smoother phrasing, and give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid redundancy.

예시: No, I didn't often go for walks as a child because my parents prioritized studying. For example, I usually stayed home doing homework after school, so I rarely had time for outdoor activities.

제안: Give a clear main idea, use linking words, correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), and provide one specific detail or example to support your point.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because the paths are spacious and peaceful. Moreover, being surrounded by trees and plants can lift your mood and reduce stress, so many people go there to relax after work.

제안: Be specific and accurate: name the place correctly, use conditional phrasing clearly, fix grammar and sentence ending. Provide a reason and one detail about what you would do there.

예시: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Daan Forest Park in Taipei because it's the city's largest park. I would stroll along the lakeside, enjoy the fresh air, and sit under the trees to relax.

제안: Use past tense if the question asks about a recent specific occasion, or keep present tense for a habitual action. Be concise and add one specific detail about what you do there to enrich your answer.

예시: Lately I walked at Sun Yat-sen Memorial Hall because I live about ten minutes away. I often walk around the park there and sometimes stop at a café afterwards.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

Using 'do' is unnecessary for a simple present affirmative sentence. Use the base present simple 'I walk' to state habitual actions. Suggestion: say 'I walk a lot' for natural speech.

× I try to make myself walk 30 to an hour per day just to keep myself active and hope that I can lose some fat.

✓ I try to make myself walk 30 minutes to an hour per day to keep active and hope I can lose some fat.

Problems: '30 to an hour' is ungrammatical — use '30 minutes to an hour'. 'Just to' is repetitive; 'to keep myself active' can be 'to keep active'. 'hope that I can' is wordy; 'hope I can' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct time expressions and concise phrasing.

× I don't often go outside to have a walk back in childhood because my parents are more focused on academic performance rather than the physical health, so I just don't have that much of time to get out and take a walk or something like that.

✓ I didn't often go outside to take walks when I was a child because my parents were more focused on academic performance than on physical health, so I didn't have much time to go out for a walk.

Tense inconsistency: talking about childhood requires past tense ('didn't' not 'don't'). Use 'take walks' or 'go for a walk' instead of 'have a walk'. Compare 'focused on A rather than B' and include 'on' before 'physical health'. 'much of time' is incorrect; use 'much time'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use idiomatic phrases like 'go for a walk'.

× I think it's because Parks provides a wide lane so that you don't need to randomly bump into others and immersing yourself in greenery just help elevate your mood and ease your stress just to refresh your mind and unwind.

✓ I think it's because parks provide wide paths so you don't randomly bump into others, and being surrounded by greenery helps elevate your mood and ease stress, allowing you to refresh your mind and unwind.

Errors: 'Parks' should be lowercase 'parks' and plural verb 'provide' to match. 'a wide lane' is unnatural; 'wide paths' fits. 'randomly bump into others' word order: 'don't randomly bump into others'. 'immersing yourself in greenery just help' mixes forms and has subject-verb disagreement; use gerund or passive: 'being surrounded by greenery helps'. Remove extra 'just' repetitions. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb, use gerunds correctly, and streamline repeated adverbs.

× If I had a chance, I would love to go to dancing for a walk 'cause as far as I know it's a biggest park in Taipei City and I really do enjoy immersing myself in greenery to feel that clear air and refresh my.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to go to Daan Forest Park for a long walk because, as far as I know, it's the biggest park in Taipei City, and I really enjoy immersing myself in greenery to feel the fresh air and refresh myself.

Multiple issues: 'go to dancing for a walk' is ungrammatical—likely meant a park name; replace with a proper park name or 'a big park'. Use 'the chance' not 'a chance' in this conditional. 'a biggest park' should be 'the biggest park'. 'clear air' is better as 'fresh air'. 'refresh my' is incomplete; use 'refresh myself'. Suggestion: use correct articles with superlatives ('the biggest') and complete reflexive pronoun 'myself'.

× If I had a chance, I would love to go to dancing for a walk 'cause as far as I know it's a biggest park in Taipei City and I really do enjoy immersing myself in greenery to feel that clear air and refresh my.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to go to Daan Forest Park for a long walk because, as far as I know, it's the biggest park in Taipei City, and I really enjoy immersing myself in greenery to feel the fresh air and refresh myself.

Also note tense/usage: 'it's a biggest park' mixes present 'it's' with incorrect article; when stating general facts present tense 'it's the biggest' is correct. Ensure 'refresh myself' completes the verb. Suggestion: use present simple for general facts and proper article with superlative.

× I usually go to Sonia Memorial Hall for a walk 'cause I just live 10 minutes away from there, so it's really convenient for me to go there for a walk.

✓ I usually go to Sun Yat-sen Memorial Hall for a walk because I live just 10 minutes away, so it's very convenient for me.

Redundancy: 'go there for a walk' repeated; streamline. Name correction: 'Sonia' likely 'Sun Yat-sen' (if intended). Preposition 'away from there' is wordy; 'away' suffices. 'just live' order corrected to 'I live just 10 minutes away'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use concise prepositional phrases.