Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce redundancy. Add one or two concise supporting details with linking word. Pronunciation/natural phrasing: use idiomatic phrases like “I usually work in an office” and “I just want to lie down.”

예시: No, I don't walk much. I usually work in an office all day, so when I get home I just want to lie down. For that reason, I rarely go for walks during the week.

제안: Correct tense consistency and word choice: use past simple for habitual childhood actions, and avoid mixing future/past forms. Keep answer concise and add a linking word to explain frequency or reason.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I usually walked to the park near my house with my mother, especially at weekends, because she worked during the week.

제안: Focus on clear, natural vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a topic sentence, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Use correct collocations: “walk in parks,” “trees,” “fresher air,” “spend time,” and “relax.”

예시: People like to walk in parks for several reasons. Firstly, parks have trees and fresher air, which feels healthier; secondly, parks are social spaces where people can spend time with friends and relax.

제안: Make conditional sentence natural and correct collocations: use “by the beach” or “along the beach,” correct articles and verb forms. Keep to two or three sentences and explain why with specific sensory detail.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the road beside the beach. I love the sea views and the salty air, which help me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. For recent habitual actions use present perfect or present simple appropriately. Correct grammar and vocabulary: “city centre,” “not enough green space,” “relax,” and avoid unclear words like “savion.” Provide one clear reason with linking word.

예시: Recently, I've been walking in the park quite often because I live in the city centre and there is not much green space nearby. So the park is the only place where I can relax and get some fresh air.

× I usually sit in an office doing and working and when I finish work I come back home just want to lay down on my bed so I'm not usually walk a lot.

✓ I usually sit in an office working, and when I finish work I come back home and just want to lie down on my bed, so I don't usually walk much.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and phrasing: 'doing and working' is redundant and unnatural; use 'working' (verb + -ing) to describe ongoing activity. 'want to lay down' should be 'want to lie down' because 'lie' is the intransitive verb for reclining; 'lay' requires an object. 'I'm not usually walk a lot' is ungrammatical; correct subject-verb and adverb usage is 'I don't usually walk much.' Suggestions: use 'working' for ongoing action, 'lie down' for reclining, and place negation with auxiliary 'do' for simple present: 'I don't usually walk much.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The phrase 'to have a walk' is awkward in this context; native speakers say 'go for a walk.' The question is in past tense using 'Did', so the base verb 'go' is correct; only the prepositional phrase needs correction. Suggestion: use 'go for a walk.'

× Yes, I always got outside to have a walk when I was a child and I will went to a park nearby my house with my mom especially on weekends because she worked on Monday to Friday.

✓ Yes, I always went outside for a walk when I was a child, and I would go to a park near my house with my mom, especially on weekends, because she worked Monday to Friday.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'got outside' is awkward—use simple past 'went outside.' 'to have a walk' should be 'for a walk.' 'I will went' mixes future and past; use 'I would go' or 'I went' for habitual past. 'nearby my house' should be 'near my house.' 'worked on Monday to Friday' is better as 'worked Monday to Friday.' Suggestion: use simple past for habitual past actions and 'would' for repeated past habits if preferred: 'I would go.' Keep prepositions natural: 'for a walk,' 'near my house.'

× I think people like to work in parks, it's because there are full of tree and air as much fresher and people can spending time with friends and getting relaxed there.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks. It's because they are full of trees and the air is much fresher, and people can spend time with friends and relax there.

Multiple issues: 'work in parks' should be 'walk in parks' (word choice). 'there are full of tree' is incorrect structure—use 'they are full of trees.' 'air as much fresher' is ungrammatical; correct comparative is 'the air is much fresher.' 'people can spending' should be 'people can spend' (base verb after modal/can). 'getting relaxed' should be 'relax' (use verb form not passive). Suggestions: choose correct verbs, use plural nouns for countable items, use 'the' with a specific noun phrase if comparing, and use base verbs after modals: 'can spend,' 'relax.'

× If I had the chance to take a long walk I would choose the road beside of beach because I love the view of sea and salty air so I want to spending time in there. I think it's a best idea for permanently.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would choose the road beside the beach because I love the view of the sea and the salty air, so I would like to spend time there. I think it's the best idea permanently.

Problems: 'beside of beach' should be 'beside the beach' (preposition and article). 'view of sea' needs article: 'the sea.' 'want to spending' is wrong; after 'want to' use base verb: 'want to spend.' 'in there' is redundant—use 'there.' 'a best idea' is incorrect; use superlative with 'the best.' 'for permanently' is unnatural; consider 'permanently' or better context-specific phrasing. Also maintain conditional mood: 'I would like to spend' fits the hypothetical. Suggestions: use correct prepositions and articles, base verbs after 'to', and 'the best' for superlative.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The question uses 'lately', which pairs with present perfect in English to ask about recent experiences: 'have you gone' rather than simple past 'did you go.' Suggestion: use present perfect with 'lately' or 'recently.'

× Lately I usually go for a walk in the park because I live in the city center so they don't have enough green space to let savion relaxed. We have only choose is working in the park.

✓ Lately I usually go for a walk in the park because I live in the city center and we don't have enough green space to let people relax. Our only choice is walking in the park.

Multiple errors: 'they don't have' is wrong pronoun for 'we' context; use 'we don't have.' 'to let savion relaxed' is unintelligible—likely meant 'to let people relax': use infinitive 'relax' not past participle 'relaxed.' 'We have only choose is working in the park' has wrong verb forms and nouns: use 'Our only choice is walking in the park' or 'Our only option is to walk in the park.' Also keep consistent present tense: 'I usually go.' Suggestions: match pronouns to subject, use correct infinitive forms, and use noun 'choice' with 'is' plus gerund or 'to' infinitive: 'our only choice is walking' or 'our only choice is to walk.'