Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I walk regularly), correct word order and avoid repetition. Give one or two specific details (how often, duration, route) using linking words. Check basic grammar: use present simple for routines and correct prepositions (from... to).

예시: Yes, I walk regularly. I walk for about 30 minutes every day because I walk from my home to Range Academy, which takes about 15 minutes each way.

제안: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I often did). Provide a specific example and link ideas (for example, we used to...). Correct verbs (liked, played) and collocations (after school).

예시: Yes, I often did. As a child I liked playing games with my friends; for example, we usually ran and played in the park after school.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific details. Use linking words like because or for example. Fix grammar (cities, workspace, prefer to go) and explain benefits (relaxation, fresh air, exercise).

예시: People like walking in parks because parks offer fresh air and a quiet space away from busy city life. For example, parks help people relax, exercise, and reduce stress after work.

제안: Use the conditional clearly (I would like to...) and give a specific location and reason. Avoid unclear phrases (paper) and fix grammar (walking long distances helps me). Use linking words to connect ideas (because, so).

예시: I would like to take a long walk in the countryside because walking long distances helps me clear my mind and relieve stress.

제안: Use past simple for past events (I went). Give a clear, specific answer: where, when, and what you did. Avoid unclear phrases and unnecessary words. Use linking words like and then to sequence events.

예시: Yesterday I went for a walk from my home to my language school. I walked there in the afternoon and then returned home after my lesson.

× Yes, because I go to my my English academic to walk.

✓ Yes, because I go to my English academy to walk.

The word 'academic' is incorrect here; 'academy' is the correct noun. This is a word choice error rather than a verb form error. Replace 'academic' with 'academy' to accurately refer to an educational institution. Also remove the duplicated 'my'.

× So every day I walk 30 minutes.

✓ So every day I walk for 30 minutes.

When stating duration with time expressions, use 'for' + duration. Adding 'for' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural: 'walk for 30 minutes.'

× My home from my home at Range Academy is 15 minutes one way.

✓ It takes 15 minutes one way from my home to Range Academy.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and repetition. Use a clear causative structure 'It takes + time + from A to B' to express travel time. Remove duplicated phrase 'my home'.

× In my childhood I really like play play game with my friends.

✓ In my childhood I really liked playing games with my friends.

The time reference 'in my childhood' requires past tense. Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'playing' for the activity. Also change 'game' to plural 'games' and remove duplicate 'play'.

× We always do work and running in after school.

✓ We always did homework and ran after school.

The verb forms and noun choice are incorrect. With past time reference, use past tense verbs: 'did' and 'ran'. Replace 'work' with 'homework' if intended, and remove the preposition 'in'. This corrects verb form and sentence structure.

× Because these days big city is not working space so people prefer go to park.

✓ Because modern big cities lack green spaces, people prefer to go to parks.

The original uses awkward noun phrases and missing particles. 'These days' is okay but 'big city is not working space' is ungrammatical. Use 'modern big cities lack green spaces' for clarity. Also 'prefer to go to parks' requires 'to' before the verb and plural 'parks' for general statements.

× It is very helpful working.

✓ Walking in parks is very helpful for relaxing/work-life balance.

'It is very helpful working' is unclear and missing a preposition; the intended meaning likely refers to walking being helpful. Use a noun or gerund phrase 'Walking in parks' and specify what it helps with, e.g., 'for relaxing' or 'for mental health.'

× Umm, these days I want to because work a long distance is help me clear my mind and blow up some steam.

✓ Umm, these days I want to, because walking long distances helps me clear my mind and blow off some steam.

Use 'walking' (gerund) to describe the activity. 'Helps' for present simple third-person singular. Use 'blow off some steam' (idiomatic) rather than 'blow up.' Reorder phrase for clarity and add comma before the explanation.

× So I think work is very important thing for paper.

✓ So I think walking is a very important way to relieve stress.

The original sentence is incoherent: 'work is very important thing for paper' doesn't fit context. Replace with a coherent idea aligned to prior sentence: walking's importance. Use article 'a' before 'very important' and a clear noun phrase 'way to relieve stress.'

× Yesterday I go to language school and combine my home.

✓ Yesterday I went to language school and then returned home.

Use past tense 'went' for an action that happened yesterday. 'Combine my home' is incorrect; likely intended 'returned home' or 'went home.' Use 'then' or 'and' to link actions appropriately.

× Plus I work soon because I go to my language.

✓ Also, I will start work soon because I attend language classes.

The original mixes tenses and has unclear phrasing 'I go to my language.' If meaning is future intention to start working, use 'will start work soon.' If referring to attending language school regularly, say 'I attend language classes' or 'I go to language school.' Ensure tense consistency and clarify 'language' as 'language classes' or 'language school.'