Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid using 'work' for walking, fix tense and word choice, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (because, so) appropriately and give one specific detail (time, place).

예시: Yes, I walk regularly in the evenings. I usually take a 30-minute walk in the nearby park after dinner because it helps me sleep better and keeps me fit. Often I go almost every day unless the weather is bad.

제안: Use past tense correctly and avoid repeating 'work' for walking. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific detail (who, how often, where). Keep sentences grammatically simple and link ideas (because, so, when).

예시: Yes, I often went for walks as a child with my parents and grandparents. It was a family tradition, so we walked in the nearby park for about an hour almost every day because everyone wanted to stay healthy.

제안: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague or incorrect words like 'grainy' or awkward phrases. Keep sentences short and logical.

예시: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and surrounded by nature. For example, trees, flowers and birds create a calm atmosphere, so walking there helps reduce stress and lift the mood after work.

제안: Good idea; make language more natural and avoid repetition. Start with a clear conditional sentence, then give specific reasons and one vivid detail (a particular park or activity). Use linking words like 'because' and 'also'.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a national park or forest because of the lush greenery and variety of wildflowers. I would also enjoy listening to birdsong and maybe spot some wildlife, which would feel very relaxing.

제안: Answer directly in past tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement of where and when you went most recently, then give one specific detail (how long, who with, or why). Keep sentences complete.

예시: Lately I went to the nearby park after dinner. I usually walk there for about 30 minutes because it is convenient and helps me relax before bed.

× Yes, I do work regularly in the evening after the last meal because I want to be healthy and better sleep, so I usually walk about 30 minutes almost everyday in the nearby park.

✓ Yes, I walk regularly in the evening after my last meal because I want to be healthy and sleep better, so I usually walk for about 30 minutes almost every day in the nearby park.

Multiple present tense and word-order issues: 'do work' is unnatural for habitual action; use simple present 'walk'. 'last meal' needs possessive 'my'. 'better sleep' should be 'sleep better' (adverb after verb). 'about 30 minutes' needs preposition 'for'. 'almost everyday' should be 'almost every day' (two words). Suggestion: Use simple present for habits, correct word order for verb + adverb, and fix prepositions and spacing.

× Yes, I did work on the daily basis with my parents and grandparents because they wanted to be fit and healthy.

✓ Yes, I used to walk daily with my parents and grandparents because they wanted to be fit and healthy.

'Did work on the daily basis' is incorrect past-tense phrasing and verb choice: 'work' is wrong meaning; 'used to' or simple past 'walked' fits habitual action. 'on the daily basis' should be 'daily' or 'on a daily basis'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' for past habits or 'walked daily'.

× It is tradition over family to go work for everyday.

✓ It is a family tradition to go for a walk every day.

Incorrect word order and word choice: 'tradition over family' should be 'family tradition'; 'go work' should be 'go for a walk'; 'for everyday' should be 'every day'. Suggestion: Rearrange into natural English: 'It is a family tradition to go for a walk every day.'

× That's why I went a nearby park on the daily basis for one hour.

✓ That's why I went to a nearby park every day for one hour.

Missing preposition and article: need 'went to a nearby park' not 'went a nearby park'. 'on the daily basis' is awkward; use 'every day'. Maintain past tense 'went'. Suggestion: Include 'to' before location and use 'every day' for frequency.

× Park because park is a very relaxing place and they are full of nature and their grainy, attractive people so much it's unwind their mood and lift up spirits after do work in the park people mostly feel relaxed and calm because of.

✓ Parks are very relaxing places; they are full of nature and greenery, which makes people unwind and lift their spirits. After working, people usually feel relaxed and calm in the park.

Multiple issues: sentence fragments, plural agreement, wrong word choices. Use plural 'parks' and 'places', 'greenery' instead of 'grainy', 'which makes people unwind' fixes verb-object order. 'After do work in the park' should be 'After working, people usually feel...'. Suggestion: Break into two sentences, correct plural forms, use proper nouns and clauses for cause and effect.

× If I had a chance, I would prefer to go for walk in a forest or National Park because National Park and forest are full of greenery and different flowers.

✓ If I had the chance, I would prefer to go for a walk in a forest or a national park because forests and national parks are full of greenery and various flowers.

Articles and noun forms: 'a chance' -> 'the chance' is more natural here; 'go for walk' needs 'a walk'; 'National Park' should be lowercased unless a specific name and needs article 'a'; use plural 'forests' when speaking generally and 'various' better than 'different'. Suggestion: Use 'a walk', correct article use, and pluralize when generalizing.

× Additionally, animal and birds are also there, so I would recommend for relaxing.

✓ Additionally, animals and birds are also there, so I would recommend it for relaxation.

Pluralization and pronoun/object issues: 'animal and birds' should be 'animals and birds'. 'Recommend for relaxing' is ungrammatical; use 'recommend it for relaxation' or 'recommend it to relax'. Suggestion: Pluralize nouns and provide correct object for 'recommend'.

× As I discussed before, I do work on the daily basis after my last meal, so I go nearby park which is more convenient and easy to me for go there.

✓ As I mentioned before, I walk daily after my last meal, so I go to the nearby park which is more convenient and easy for me to get to.

Tense and phrasing: 'do work on the daily basis' incorrect—use 'walk daily'. 'go nearby park' needs 'go to the nearby park'. 'easy to me for go there' is ungrammatical; use 'easy for me to get to' or 'convenient for me to reach'. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines and correct prepositions and infinitive structure.

× So after my last meal I just go there and.

✓ So after my last meal I just go there.

Fragment: trailing conjunction 'and' without continuation makes it incomplete. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Avoid leaving sentences unfinished; ensure every sentence has a complete clause.