Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce grammar errors and awkward phrasing, make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid irrelevant phrases like "School of Fitness" unless explained. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word. Pronoun and article use should be corrected (e.g., "my boarding house" -> "from my boarding house").

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk from my boarding house to the office every day, which takes about 15 minutes each way. Because of this routine, it helps improve my cardiovascular fitness and keeps me energized throughout the day.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary/tense mistakes. Answer directly, avoid filler words, and give specific examples of activities. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with words like "but" or "instead."

예시: Not really. When I was a child I rarely went for long walks. Instead, I played games with my friends, such as riding bikes and playing tag, which kept me active and fit.

제안: Improve grammar, use plural/singular correctly, and make linking smoother. Use clearer vocabulary ("trees," "social spaces") and concise reasoning. Keep within 3–4 sentences and add one clear supporting example.

예시: People like walking in parks because the trees and fresh air help them relax and recharge. Also, parks are social spaces where you can meet friends or join community activities. So walking there combines light exercise with opportunities to socialize.

제안: Make the intention clear and correct vocabulary and phrasing. Use natural expressions like "take part in" rather than "input my Cardio." Specify one event and reasons with linking words. Avoid invented labels and correct nouns ("socialize").

예시: If I had the chance, I would take part in an organized event like a charity walk or a marathon. It would be a great way to improve my cardiovascular fitness and meet new people while supporting a good cause.

제안: Provide a clear, grammatical past/present description. Use correct prepositions ("around my boarding house"), consistent tense, and concise benefits with linking words. Remove unclear phrases like "Give me energized input."

예시: Lately I have been walking around my boarding house. I usually walk for about 15 minutes each day, which helps my cardiovascular fitness and keeps me energized. It's also cost-effective because I don't need to use public transport.

× I work on my boarding house to the office every day.

✓ I walk from my boarding house to the office every day.

The verb 'work' is incorrect in this context and the preposition 'on' and 'to' are misused. Use 'walk' to describe traveling on foot and 'from...to...' to indicate origin and destination. Suggestion: use 'walk from X to Y' to express the route.

× It takes about 15 minutes each way and I find that work help improve my cardio for School of Fitness and keep me energized throughout the day.

✓ It takes about 15 minutes each way, and I find that the walk helps improve my cardio for the School of Fitness and keeps me energized throughout the day.

'work' should be 'walk' (wrong word) and 'help' must agree with singular subject 'the walk', so use 'helps'. Also parallel structure requires 'keeps' to match singular subject. Add articles for clarity ('the walk', 'the School of Fitness').

× Not really. When I was a child I rarely worked.

✓ Not really. When I was a child I rarely walked.

The verb 'worked' is incorrect for meaning 'went for walks'; the past tense 'walked' is appropriate. Use verbs that match intended activity.

× Instead, uh, I went with my friend.

✓ Instead, I went with my friends.

Context implies plural 'friends' since later 'Our game often require...' refers to multiple participants. 'Friend' could be correct if singular; choose plural to match following sentences. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal correction.

× Our game often require one like baking cheese or something like that, and I enjoy it a lot because it kept me fit and energized the other day.

✓ Our games often required activities like baking cheese or similar things, and I enjoyed them a lot because they kept me fit and energized.

Multiple issues: 'Our game' -> 'Our games' (plural) and verb agreement 'require' -> past 'required' to match 'When I was a child'. 'One' is unclear; replace with 'activities'. 'I enjoy' -> past 'I enjoyed' and 'it' -> 'them' to agree with plural 'activities'. Remove 'the other day' because it's not suitable for childhood description.

× I think people like walking in park because the tree and fresh air help them relax and feel more energized.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because the trees and fresh air help them relax and feel more energized.

Use plural 'parks' to generalize and plural 'trees' to match. Also add article 'walking in parks' is standard. Ensure noun plurality matches intended meaning.

× Folks are social space where you can meet friends or join community activity.

✓ Parks are social spaces where you can meet friends or join community activities.

The original subject 'Folks' is incorrect for 'spaces'. Replace with 'Parks' as topic. Use plural 'spaces' and 'activities' and include article 'community activities'.

× So walking there, uh combine light exercise with opportunities to socialize.

✓ So walking there combines light exercise with opportunities to socialize.

Subject-verb agreement: gerund phrase 'walking there' is singular so verb should be 'combines'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk by joining our organized events such as marathon or spring charity work.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk by joining organized events such as a marathon or spring charity work.

Add article 'a marathon' and remove 'our' which is unclear. 'Organized events' is correct; ensure articles with countable nouns.

× It would be a great way to input my Cardio 5 School of Fitness and also to meet new people and socialist during the event.

✓ It would be a great way to improve my cardio at the School of Fitness and also to meet new people and socialize during the event.

'Input' is incorrect — use 'improve'. 'Cardio 5' is unclear; assume 'cardio' and 'School of Fitness' needs preposition 'at'. 'Socialist' is wrong word; use verb 'socialize'.

× Go for a walk. Lately I walk on my boarding house.

✓ Lately I have been walking near my boarding house.

Combine fragments into coherent sentence. Use present perfect continuous 'have been walking' for recent habitual action and correct preposition 'near' or 'around' instead of 'on'.

× The deal Christmas Day walking for about 15 minutes each day.

✓ During the past Christmas period I walked for about 15 minutes each day.

Original is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'walked' to describe completed habit during Christmas and rephrase 'The deal Christmas Day' to 'During the past Christmas period'.

× Give me energized input, my cardiovascular fitness, and it's cost effective because I don't need to pay for public transport.

✓ It gives me more energy and improves my cardiovascular fitness, and it's cost-effective because I don't need to pay for public transport.

Replace fragment 'Give me energized input' with full clause 'It gives me more energy'. 'My cardiovascular fitness' needs verb 'improves'. Add hyphen in 'cost-effective'. Ensure subject 'It' refers to walking.