Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify purpose and correct phrasing, keep answer concise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid contradictory phrases ("reduce my weight loss"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to explain reason and frequency, and give a specific detail (when/where).

예시: Yes, I walk almost every day and usually reach about 10,000 steps. I started this routine to lose weight because I find brisk walking helps me burn calories steadily. For example, I walk in the park each morning for 45 minutes before work.

제안: Use past tense consistently and produce a coherent, concise memory with specific details. Avoid awkward phrasing and incomplete sentences. Use linking words ("for example", "often") to structure the response and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside with my mother when I was a child. For example, after dinner my parents would take me for a short walk around the neighbourhood and hold my hands while I jumped between them, which felt playful and safe.

제안: Make the answer more coherent with linking words and complete sentences. Start with a topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with brief examples. Remove redundant words and finish the thought clearly.

예시: People like to walk in parks because they offer a peaceful, natural environment. For instance, walkers can enjoy watching children play in the evening and see others practising yoga in the morning, which makes the walk both relaxing and inspiring.

제안: This answer is clear but could be more natural and slightly more specific. Use correct prepositions and reduce repetition. Add a concrete detail about the route or scenery and a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in the mountains, ideally along a trail that runs beside a river with hills on the other side. I enjoy hill stations in general, so walking there with my partner would be peaceful and scenic.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct answer about when and where you walked, then give a brief reason and a specific detail (distance, duration). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

예시: I haven't been walking much lately because I've been busy with work. Recently I have only walked around my neighbourhood block, which is about one kilometre and takes me around 10–15 minutes to complete.

× Yes, I walk almost every day for 10,000 steps so to reduce my weight loss.

✓ Yes, I walk almost every day about 10,000 steps to lose weight.

The original sentence misuses 'reduce my weight loss' which is contradictory: 'reduce weight loss' would mean losing less weight. Use 'to lose weight' to express purpose. Also 'for 10,000 steps' is unnatural; use 'about 10,000 steps'. This fixes verb meaning and present tense habitual action.

× I read somewhere that walking is the best way to do that in the fastest possible way and I want to lose weight as soon as possible.

✓ I read somewhere that walking is the best way to do that quickly, and I want to lose weight as soon as possible.

The phrase 'in the fastest possible way' is wordy; 'quickly' is more natural. Maintain present tense for general truth ('walking is') and use conjunction 'and' properly. No tense change is needed; this simplifies and clarifies meaning.

× Yes, I've always loved to walk outside with my mom as a child.

✓ Yes, I always loved walking outside with my mom when I was a child.

Mixing present perfect 'I've always loved' with 'as a child' (a past time) is inconsistent. Use simple past 'I always loved' or rephrase to present perfect without a past time. Change 'to walk' to 'walking' for natural verb + -ing form after 'loved'.

× I remember in the night when after dinner my parents used to Take Me Out for a cute little walk where they used to pull both my hands and try to make me jump with both of them carrying or.

✓ I remember at night after dinner my parents used to take me out for a small walk where they held my hands and tried to make me jump while carrying me sometimes.

'in the night' should be 'at night'. 'Take Me Out' has incorrect capitalization. 'Cute little walk' is awkward; 'small walk' is natural. Original fragment 'both my hands' and 'carrying or' are ungrammatical; clarify as 'held my hands and tried to make me jump while carrying me sometimes.' Use past tense 'used to' consistently.

× Parks are a refreshing place to walk people can watch children play in the evenings and they can also get inspired by people doing their morning yoga in the during the walk so it is refreshing and peaceful for.

✓ Parks are a refreshing place to walk; people can watch children play in the evenings and get inspired by others doing morning yoga, so walks there are refreshing and peaceful.

The original is a run-on with awkward phrases ('in the during the walk', 'peaceful for'). Insert proper punctuation, remove redundant words, fix 'people doing their morning yoga' to 'others doing morning yoga', and clarify 'walks there are refreshing and peaceful.'

× I would like to go on a long walk in mountains.

✓ I would like to go on a long walk in the mountains.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'mountains' when referring to mountains in general. Preposition 'in' is fine but needs 'the'.

× It would be very pleasant to walk nearby a river on one side and a hill on the another.

✓ It would be very pleasant to walk with a river on one side and a hill on the other.

Use 'with' to describe features beside the path. 'Nearby a river' is unnatural; say 'with a river on one side'. 'the another' is incorrect; use 'the other.'

× I love hill stations in general and I would love to walk in there with my partner.

✓ I love hill stations in general and I would love to walk there with my partner.

Do not use both 'in' and 'there' together; choose one. 'Walk there' is natural. Keep tense consistent.

× In last few days I have been running a little busy due to my work.

✓ In the last few days I have been a little busy because of my work.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'last few days'. The phrase 'running a little busy' is ungrammatical; use 'have been a little busy'. 'Due to' can be used but 'because of' is more natural here.

× So the only places I've walked recently is around my locality near my around my block.

✓ So the only place I've walked recently is around my block in my neighborhood.

Subject-verb agreement: 'places... is' mismatches. Either pluralize verb or singularize noun. Use 'place' singular to match 'is'. Also fix redundancy 'near my around my block' to 'around my block in my neighborhood.'

× You basically so it is around a kilometer around block, so I do that for completing.

✓ It is basically about a kilometer around the block, so I do that to get my steps in.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrase to 'about a kilometer around the block' and explain purpose: 'to get my steps in' or 'to complete my daily steps.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.